Shades of Light
Free Verse26 total reviews
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I enjoyed your poem about light. Some great alliteration,
"Sifted sunlight" as the opener
"I pause to ponder"
The only thing I'd change would be your last word. It needs to be punched, and I think you could do it with one slight change.
"I shift to stand in a beam... grateful for light."
(I shift to stand in a beam... grateful for sight.)
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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Hi Melissa,
I enjoyed your poem about light. Some great alliteration,
"Sifted sunlight" as the opener
"I pause to ponder"
The only thing I'd change would be your last word. It needs to be punched, and I think you could do it with one slight change.
"I shift to stand in a beam... grateful for light."
(I shift to stand in a beam... grateful for sight.)
Nicely penned!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 06-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2021
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I DO like your version and think it adds a stronger punch. Thanks for the suggestion!
Melissa
Comment from tempeste
Ciao Sugarray , nice to see you posting even if on and off .
I enjoyed your nature poem ..
I love seeing the light seep through narrow openings in the woods .. those beams look like shining swords slicing through
The woods can be coolish even in Summer so like you mentioned I too stop and stand in a beam and warm up like a lizard. ( biggrin)
Keep safe!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Ciao Sugarray , nice to see you posting even if on and off .
I enjoyed your nature poem ..
I love seeing the light seep through narrow openings in the woods .. those beams look like shining swords slicing through
The woods can be coolish even in Summer so like you mentioned I too stop and stand in a beam and warm up like a lizard. ( biggrin)
Keep safe!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2021
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Hello there Franca. Ciao! I really appreciate your lovely review and comments. I have not seen lizards yet :), but they do hang out around my deck in August. I will name the first one I see? Franca, in your honor. Haha. Hugs, my friend.
Meissa
Comment from poetwatch
There can be no shadows without light, Melissa. :) Yet, it is always good to get out of the shadows and into the light. That is one big magnolia tree that you have or the one you picked. Does it give white, lilac, or lavender blooms? Nice free verse. Thank you for sharing. All I got down here is the grass that I have to cut, trees I need to trim, and rattlesnakes I have to get rid of. Killed one on my porch near the back door.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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There can be no shadows without light, Melissa. :) Yet, it is always good to get out of the shadows and into the light. That is one big magnolia tree that you have or the one you picked. Does it give white, lilac, or lavender blooms? Nice free verse. Thank you for sharing. All I got down here is the grass that I have to cut, trees I need to trim, and rattlesnakes I have to get rid of. Killed one on my porch near the back door.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Hello Jose. Thanks for the comments on the verse. My magnolia is the kind with the really big white blossoms. It is blooming very nicely right now :). I am certainly not envious of you and the rattlesnakes. EEEk! You can keep them down there in San Antonio. PLEASE! Haha. Have a lovely week, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This seems like an ekphrastic poem, as well as a free verse piece. I like the way this is lined in the shape of a bell. I like how you lead up to a great finish line, where you are grateful for the beam of light shining through on you.
The syllable count is unique...I have never seen one like this before. I appears at first, like a reverse nonet, yet you stay with two syllables for the first three lines before adding more.
I love the words you use to describe the shadows underneath the magnolia tree.
Thank you for sharing this positive, life- fulfilling poem with me.
Have a good evening,
Jesse
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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This seems like an ekphrastic poem, as well as a free verse piece. I like the way this is lined in the shape of a bell. I like how you lead up to a great finish line, where you are grateful for the beam of light shining through on you.
The syllable count is unique...I have never seen one like this before. I appears at first, like a reverse nonet, yet you stay with two syllables for the first three lines before adding more.
I love the words you use to describe the shadows underneath the magnolia tree.
Thank you for sharing this positive, life- fulfilling poem with me.
Have a good evening,
Jesse
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Hi Jesse! I am delighted that you liked this poem and the shape. I did start out to write a Nonet, but this took a life of its own. :). I was unable to stick to a syllable scheme, so just called it free verse. LOL. It wiggled out of my control. Thank you so very much, my friend.
Melissa
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Hi Melissa!
I love that line, 'it wiggled out of my control.' You sure have a way with words! I am glad it took on a life of its own. It works so well that way.
Have a good afternoon, my friend,
Jesse
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Melissa,
I like your symbolic poem about counting our blessings, perhaps Jesus is the light beam, and the cave, misfortune or emptiness.
Your photo is perfect.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Melissa,
I like your symbolic poem about counting our blessings, perhaps Jesus is the light beam, and the cave, misfortune or emptiness.
Your photo is perfect.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Hi Cindy. Thanks so much. Yes, when we stand in the beam of His light, it is life changing and the shadows sweet to melt away. I appreciate your comments and I am so glad you liked it.
Melissa
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You?re welcome, Melissa
Comment from Aussie
I really liked your play on light and shadow. Jesus said, "I am the Light of the World." There is light and dark in every situation; just like yin and yang. We must have a balance, too much of one would tip the balance. K XX
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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I really liked your play on light and shadow. Jesus said, "I am the Light of the World." There is light and dark in every situation; just like yin and yang. We must have a balance, too much of one would tip the balance. K XX
Comment Written 11-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Hi Kace!! Thank you my dear friend for understanding the point and meaning of my ..Shades of Light.. poem. I so appreciate your comments about it. :)
Melissa
Comment from kahpot
Excellent-love the shape/visual of this work, and yes to find happiness and contentment all we have to do is move/shift a little bit and life's warmth will find us, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Excellent-love the shape/visual of this work, and yes to find happiness and contentment all we have to do is move/shift a little bit and life's warmth will find us, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Hi Kym, Thank you for the lovely comments on this verse. I really appreciate your delightful comments.
Melissa
Comment from Sharon Davis
This succinct free verse has an interesting theme...shades of light and also those of darkness.
Well composed and presented. Well chosen image.
Nicely done.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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This succinct free verse has an interesting theme...shades of light and also those of darkness.
Well composed and presented. Well chosen image.
Nicely done.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Thank you very much, Sharon!!
Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Shades of Light
by Sugarray77
Excellent Free Verse poem. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images of nature. Good imagery.
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Shades of Light
by Sugarray77
Excellent Free Verse poem. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images of nature. Good imagery.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Hi Gypsy? thank you for your lovely review!! So appreciate it.
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
Beautifully presented. The darkness of a cave is certainly frightening. You long to see just a bit of light in all that darkness. Great imagery of the sunlight playing with shadows. The specific mention of the magnolia tree is an excellent visual. Lovely touch of alliteration with "sifted sunlight." judi
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Beautifully presented. The darkness of a cave is certainly frightening. You long to see just a bit of light in all that darkness. Great imagery of the sunlight playing with shadows. The specific mention of the magnolia tree is an excellent visual. Lovely touch of alliteration with "sifted sunlight." judi
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jun-2021
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Hi Judi. Thanks so very much. I tried to use alliteration and other tools in this free verse. Jim would have reprimanded me if I just put out stylized prose and called it FV. LOL. Hugs!
Melissa
