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Life in plastic17 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I enjoyed reading your story. You gave a good description of what it would be like to switch places with someone else. I found your tale entertaining and witty, with good humor. It sounds like a nice lifestyle. Great job!
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I enjoyed reading your story. You gave a good description of what it would be like to switch places with someone else. I found your tale entertaining and witty, with good humor. It sounds like a nice lifestyle. Great job!
Comment Written 14-Jun-2021
Comment from royowen
I think at some stage in our lives we at least wonder what it would be like to be someone, good looking, talented and of course, rich. You've chosen a worthy in in Jennifer Lopez, and why not? Beautifully written, an excellent entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
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I think at some stage in our lives we at least wonder what it would be like to be someone, good looking, talented and of course, rich. You've chosen a worthy in in Jennifer Lopez, and why not? Beautifully written, an excellent entry in this contest, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
Comment from Leann DS
This was a fun story and a great And original take on the contest. I enjoyed reading it and I like your message. thank you for writing. Well done. Hugs and blessings to you.
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This was a fun story and a great And original take on the contest. I enjoyed reading it and I like your message. thank you for writing. Well done. Hugs and blessings to you.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
Comment from Bonnie Seach
This is a quick and easy read. It leaves a smile on my face and I can picture the fabulous Jennifer Lopez smiling too if she gets to read it. The modern style is pleasing. It is not laborious. It is light and breezy. Thank you
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This is a quick and easy read. It leaves a smile on my face and I can picture the fabulous Jennifer Lopez smiling too if she gets to read it. The modern style is pleasing. It is not laborious. It is light and breezy. Thank you
Comment Written 23-Apr-2021
Comment from Jill McCauslin
This was definitely fun. I enjoyed it a lot. I didn't realize until the end that poor Jennifer Lopez ended up in your body! She didn't make a wish but it still happened. I liked the last paragraph. I kept expecting a servant to show up. Maybe there should have been someone that you had to interact with. Great job! Good luck with the contest.
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This was definitely fun. I enjoyed it a lot. I didn't realize until the end that poor Jennifer Lopez ended up in your body! She didn't make a wish but it still happened. I liked the last paragraph. I kept expecting a servant to show up. Maybe there should have been someone that you had to interact with. Great job! Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
Comment from Judy Lawless
This is a fun piece of fiction. I couldn't even imagine what it would be like to be a star, but I'm sure I wouldn't want to step outside the gates of that home. There would always be someone looking to find your secrets. ð??? Good luck in the contest.
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This is a fun piece of fiction. I couldn't even imagine what it would be like to be a star, but I'm sure I wouldn't want to step outside the gates of that home. There would always be someone looking to find your secrets. ð??? Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
Very creative and cute! I liked your choice of who you would like to be and wallah!!! There you were. What a fun read! Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest!
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Very creative and cute! I liked your choice of who you would like to be and wallah!!! There you were. What a fun read! Keep up the good work and good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
Comment from Bill Schott
This is a fun story and I'm certain that many wish to be J-Lo. I only see one nagging tense shift right off the get-go that could use an edit.
'The next morning...' nails down the past tense point of view. To bring the beginning paragraph, which is in the present tense, to that tense as well.
I (was) so tired of working hard. What (was) my reward for working and giving my one hundred and ten percent? (Was) I making more than the average Jo? (Did) I (have) respect and credibility? Etcetera...
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This is a fun story and I'm certain that many wish to be J-Lo. I only see one nagging tense shift right off the get-go that could use an edit.
'The next morning...' nails down the past tense point of view. To bring the beginning paragraph, which is in the present tense, to that tense as well.
I (was) so tired of working hard. What (was) my reward for working and giving my one hundred and ten percent? (Was) I making more than the average Jo? (Did) I (have) respect and credibility? Etcetera...
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
Comment from mobileliz
Nice story, well written. Good buildup getting to the new ID. Knew what she wanted and actively went after it. She also acknowledged that it wouldn't last by saying "before the offer expires." Good job.
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Nice story, well written. Good buildup getting to the new ID. Knew what she wanted and actively went after it. She also acknowledged that it wouldn't last by saying "before the offer expires." Good job.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
Comment from Karen Estep
Fun piece! I feel you really enjoyed writing this and don't we all wish at times we could yell something before bed and wake up in a different world? Good luck in the contest, my friend!
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Fun piece! I feel you really enjoyed writing this and don't we all wish at times we could yell something before bed and wake up in a different world? Good luck in the contest, my friend!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2021
