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I got lucky

Inheritance

21 total reviews 
Comment from lancellot
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Well, it may not be real, but maybe it would be. At least the guy in your story won the marry a millionaire sweepstakes based on merit.

Funny stuff, is should be a top contender.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
    I hope I can be the top performer... in the contest.

    Thank you for your review and encouraging comments.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Halloween is around the corner. please visit my story "The Twin Boys". You will like it.

    Have a wonderful day.
Comment from DonandVicki
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Even though this is labeled as fiction, I'm sure that this happens all the time. Unfortunately for the dude money will not buy him happiness. A good flash with plenty of imagery.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your review and generous rating.
    This gave me a laugh when I wrote it.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Halloween is around the corner. please visit my story "The Twin Boys". You will like it.

    Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
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This got a big guffaw(!) out of me. It's crude and lewd and funny and humorous and offers a surprise in the end that I didn't see coming. The less than 50 words limit is hard to put together a funny short story but you did an excellent job with the Dribble Flash Fiction format. I enjoyed reading this and wish you luck in the contest. You have a good chance at being the winner!
Also, the artwork is hilarious, and it is hard to tell which one was the one who got lucky and won the inheritance, if you know what I mean.
Jesse

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
    Jesse, I am glad you got a laugh... I had fun in writing this one as I was dreaming to get lucky... haha ... but I was greedy and add the inheritance...

    The picture is a bonus for my luck... I think this one deserves to be the winner. But I can never trust Fanstory's taste...

    Thank you for your encouraging comments and generous rating...
reply by Jesse James Doty on 11-Apr-2021
    I looked up your contest and too bad, it is being decided by the committee of Fan Story so I can not vote anyway for that contest. Good luck!
    Jesse
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
    Thank you Jesse... You are so kind...
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Halloween is around the corner. please visit my story "The Twin Boys". You will like it.

    Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Susan Larson
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I took your final word as a double entendre . Were you the best performer in bed or wherever you laid her, or were you the best actor, feeding her the best lines? The reason I wonder is that the first time around, I fell for the latter.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
    Haha, I am the best performer in this contest...
    Thank you for your wonderful comments.
    I appreciate your generous rating.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Halloween is around the corner. please visit my story "The Twin Boys". You will like it.

    Have a wonderful day.
Comment from AnnaLinda
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Lol Chan!

The best performer hit the jackpot I guess.
You've written a very entertaining little story
within those fifty words. That's a challenge
and you have succeeded. Great performance!

Anna

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
    Thank you, Anna... It is always a challenge to write a story with 50 words. I had fun in writing this one.

    Thank you for your review and generous rating.

reply by AnnaLinda on 11-Apr-2021
    You are so welcome.
    It was a fun visit.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Halloween is around the corner. please visit my story "The Twin Boys". You will like it.

    Have a wonderful day.
Comment from sandramitchell
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Lol, that was so funny, and you may not think so, but it does happen. (Not to me!!) This is a great dribble flash fiction story, very well done and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 11-Apr-2021
    Wow it happens? Double prizes?
    It is always a challenge to write a story with 50 words. I had fun in writing this one.

    Thank you for your review and generous rating.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Halloween is around the corner. please visit my story "The Twin Boys". You will like it.

    Have a wonderful day.
Comment from L. Kalere
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Yes, indeed weird things happen every day. I don't think it's entirely beyond the realm of possibility ... the world can be a cynical place. Nice entry for the Dribble Contest.
Linda

 Comment Written 10-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 10-Apr-2021
    Thank you for your review and encouraging comments.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Halloween is around the corner. please visit my story "The Twin Boys". You will like it.

    Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Rdfrdmom2
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You are absolutely right, Goodadvicechan. I am sure weirder things have happened in our lifetimes. Your turn of phrase at the end of this dribble flash fiction is priceless - he was the best performer. Good luck in the contest.

Rdfrdmom2

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
    I'm glad you like the story... I had fun in writing this one.

    Writing is always enjoyable.
    thank you for your review and generous comments.
Comment from Alaskastory
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"I got lucky" is a humorous story is so few words. It seems worth a perfect promotion to a much longer story with characters and goals developed and the punch line is proven out.

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
    Thank you very much for your encouraging comments...
    I had fun in writing this story
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2021
    Halloween is around the corner. please visit my story "The Twin Boys". You will like it.

    Have a wonderful day.
Comment from Patrick Borosky
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Interesting, it is always hard with Dribble flash fictions, to get everything that you need from the story as this is really a conversation. I feel like it sounds slightly off at the ending though.

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 Comment Written 09-Apr-2021


reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
    Thank you.
    I appreciate your comments. After all it is a fiction.

    I?ll do a better job to meet your expectation