Waiting for John
Nobody knows he's thereā?¦12 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is very sad and at least the dog was rescued, I felt a pang of grief having read your words here, good luck with the contest, you fulfilled the brief, this write is unusual and unique, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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This is very sad and at least the dog was rescued, I felt a pang of grief having read your words here, good luck with the contest, you fulfilled the brief, this write is unusual and unique, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you. I humbly appreciate your review and thoughtful comments. Hugs.
Comment from equestrik
This is well written and well presented. I enjoyed the picture as well as the poem. Well done. it is also very tragic and sad and you do a god job gaining the sympathy of your readers.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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This is well written and well presented. I enjoyed the picture as well as the poem. Well done. it is also very tragic and sad and you do a god job gaining the sympathy of your readers.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much. Your thoughtful comments are humbly appreciated. Hugs and blessings.
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
Oh how very sad! And, oh how so very well written. An excellent use of your 100 words. It is a complete story and paints a very detailed picture. Poor puppy!
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Oh how very sad! And, oh how so very well written. An excellent use of your 100 words. It is a complete story and paints a very detailed picture. Poor puppy!
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your comments and review. I hope that The poor puppy barks loud enough so that someone hears him soon. Hugs.
Comment from lancellot
Hmm, this is a very interesting story, of a dog left locked in a shed and its owner having died. Yes, the dog is indeed a prisoner (sort of) and the reader can understand its suffering. Not sure about the strangers coming to what I assume is a wake. Why would it be at John's house if he is dead? And if there is someone else, they would know about the dog.
Maybe I'm over thinking it. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Hmm, this is a very interesting story, of a dog left locked in a shed and its owner having died. Yes, the dog is indeed a prisoner (sort of) and the reader can understand its suffering. Not sure about the strangers coming to what I assume is a wake. Why would it be at John's house if he is dead? And if there is someone else, they would know about the dog.
Maybe I'm over thinking it. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 09-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your comments and review. The backstory is that John lives alone and his children all live out of town, so the wake is at his house, run by his adult children. That's my story and I'm sticking to it. :-) Hugs.
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a very creative and suspenseful story up until the end, where it turns sad, all within a few words. The artwork pairs perfectly with the story, making the reader wish they could go to that shed and let the dog out. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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This is a very creative and suspenseful story up until the end, where it turns sad, all within a few words. The artwork pairs perfectly with the story, making the reader wish they could go to that shed and let the dog out. Well done. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 08-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much for your encouraging review. I hope somebody finds that puppy too. I feel so sad myself. I want to go rewrite it now. Hugs.
Comment from LisaMay
Oh what a heartbreaking story! That poor dog, missing John, and now - unless he starts barking - might starve to death.
You've shown skill in setting the scene from the dog's point of view and emotional depth with suspense and drama.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Oh what a heartbreaking story! That poor dog, missing John, and now - unless he starts barking - might starve to death.
You've shown skill in setting the scene from the dog's point of view and emotional depth with suspense and drama.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thank you. Yes, I hope he is strong enough to get someone's attention with a bark or two. I appreciate your comments and review. Hugs.
Comment from Begin Again
Poor little critter locked in a shed and his owner has passed away. Surely someone will search for him and save him from the miserable death. A very nice entry for the contest. Best of luck!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Poor little critter locked in a shed and his owner has passed away. Surely someone will search for him and save him from the miserable death. A very nice entry for the contest. Best of luck!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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I am hoping that he isn't too weak to bark and get someone's attention. Thank you for your comments and review. Hugs.
Comment from Wendy G
This story is very moving, and very powerfully written. The viewpoint of the pet is very well done, and then the climax in the last sentence is unsaid, but implicit. Then we are left wondering ... will he be found in time? This to me is a winner, so best wishes!
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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This story is very moving, and very powerfully written. The viewpoint of the pet is very well done, and then the climax in the last sentence is unsaid, but implicit. Then we are left wondering ... will he be found in time? This to me is a winner, so best wishes!
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thank you so much for your supportive comments and your six star review. I humbly appreciate both. Hugs.
Comment from michele will
I sure hope this abandoned dog knew how to bark. Maybe have the story end with the dog's soulful yowl of distress. I had to reread the first paragraph to get the gist, not sure you need the suspense of waiting but I like the story very much
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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I sure hope this abandoned dog knew how to bark. Maybe have the story end with the dog's soulful yowl of distress. I had to reread the first paragraph to get the gist, not sure you need the suspense of waiting but I like the story very much
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thank you. That's a good suggestion. I'll have to go back and review it again. Hugs.
Comment from Judy Lawless
Very well done! You've thought outside the box and it works beautifully. So sad that John won't be coming back. And what will happen to "him"? I don't know if these word prompts are a competition or not. If so, good luck.
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Very well done! You've thought outside the box and it works beautifully. So sad that John won't be coming back. And what will happen to "him"? I don't know if these word prompts are a competition or not. If so, good luck.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2021
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Thank you for your thoughtful comments and review. Yes, the daily prompts are contests that we all get to vote on. They are really fun! They give us ideas of styles of writing to help improve our skills. Thanks again. Hugs.
