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Golden Thread

A Villanelle Poem

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Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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I do like poems that have a repetition rhyme scheme. This one fits the bill.
Sad but true information is not well received. I like this stanza especially..

"If there was no other, could we move ahead?
Would you partake in a romance, sweet Camille?
My broken heart sown with golden thread,
She said, "I think the answer you shall dread."

LOL Ralf

 Comment Written 18-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 18-Apr-2021
    Thank you Ralf, yes some answers we should not pursue ( LOL)
Comment from R.E.R.
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What a great poem! You have such interesting storytelling abilities that really makes this poem complete. Leaves the reader to find lots of interpretations! Thank you for posting this.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
    Thank you.
Comment from rspoet
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You've written an excellent villanelle for the contest
with very good rhymes and a consistent theme
of love and loss.
Excellent presentation with photo and colors.
Nicely done.
Good luck in the contest.
Robert

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
    Thank you very much for the validation.
Comment from estory
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This form, with its repeating phrasing, is great for creating those echoing musical language effects and also for creating that sense of running in place, of trying to reach beyond the present or the past and not being able to make any headway. estory

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
    Thank you.
Comment from Sanku
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I think the answer you shall dread. .. This encore from her is discouraging .he is hoping that the golden thread will surely heal the wounds..
A nice Villanelle poem .all the best fort he contest.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
    Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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Your well-written villanelle vividly describes the heartache that ensues when a person still deeply loves the person who has fallen for somone else. Yes, there are answers we really don't want to hear!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
    Thank you.
Comment from lyenochka
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I think you used the repeated line so well because in each of the repetitions, you put it in another context of thought or conversation. The golden thread makes me hopeful that the heart is healing with the gold of some good despite the wounds.
Hope you do well in the contest!
Question:
will this hearts' wound once again heal? (Did you mean the plural possessive? If only a single heart was meant to match the 'this' adjective, you probably want the singular possessive: heart's)

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 17-Apr-2021
    Thank you you are correct that was my error.
Comment from equestrik
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This is na good write for the Villanelle poetrey contest. Your visual is really well chosen and adds to the powerful emotion of your write. All the best to you!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 16-Apr-2021
    Thank you
Comment from papa55mike
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Any breakup is difficult to the one jilted. Please check, heart (sewn) with golden thread. What a wonderfully written poem.

Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    Thank you Mike, have a great remainder of the week!
Comment from Dilettante junior
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Excellent. I really like the phrase 'my broken heart sown with golden thread'. Very well versed, complex syntax. The repetition brings the reader back to the essential message. Bravo!

 Comment Written 15-Apr-2021

reply by the author on 15-Apr-2021
    I value your words! Thank you.