Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 28 "Football Chapter 13 part 2"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What an embarrassment? I bet Katherine will never go near the male locker room again. A sign on the door would have helped Katherine's decision...not a mistake that one would like to experience.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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What an embarrassment? I bet Katherine will never go near the male locker room again. A sign on the door would have helped Katherine's decision...not a mistake that one would like to experience.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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So so true. I think most schools have it clearly marked.
Comment from Mistydawn
That would be so embarrassing walking in on someone like that. Think I would've just dropped the list and ran. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting from start to finish. I look forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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That would be so embarrassing walking in on someone like that. Think I would've just dropped the list and ran. Your chapter is well-written, very interesting from start to finish. I look forward to reading more.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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I thought about that, but I figured for future interaction they needed to communicate a little. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Good thing he was wearing a towel! Brilliant bit about her arms blushing and placing the paper on the floor and rushing out. These characters are vivid. Dialog is excellent!
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Good thing he was wearing a towel! Brilliant bit about her arms blushing and placing the paper on the floor and rushing out. These characters are vivid. Dialog is excellent!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
I liked the lighthearted feel to this, you had plenty of humor mixed into the dialogue here, and we keep watching Katherine and Gabe dancing closer and closer together. Nice little risque scene there at the end when Katherine goes into the locker room and sees Gabe a little dressed down. You are hinting at the romance to come here. estory
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2021
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I liked the lighthearted feel to this, you had plenty of humor mixed into the dialogue here, and we keep watching Katherine and Gabe dancing closer and closer together. Nice little risque scene there at the end when Katherine goes into the locker room and sees Gabe a little dressed down. You are hinting at the romance to come here. estory
Comment Written 31-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bluesatinbutterfly
I enjoyed very much the sometimes awkward interaction between Katherine and Gabriel. The dialogue seemed natural and I am looking forward to reading more, thank you.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2021
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I enjoyed very much the sometimes awkward interaction between Katherine and Gabriel. The dialogue seemed natural and I am looking forward to reading more, thank you.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from bhogg
I can't believe you used the picture of me without permission! I enjoyed this well written post (as all yours are) and had to smile at the end. Well done. Bill
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2021
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I can't believe you used the picture of me without permission! I enjoyed this well written post (as all yours are) and had to smile at the end. Well done. Bill
Comment Written 30-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2021
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Please don' t turn me into the copyright police.
Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
Still an interesting read - about an embarrassing situation! You write well, and there are no spelling or grammatical errors. It is always clear, and convincing. Thanks for posting.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2021
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Still an interesting read - about an embarrassing situation! You write well, and there are no spelling or grammatical errors. It is always clear, and convincing. Thanks for posting.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
"She entered the locker room section of the school and glanced around. "Why isn't the Athletic Director's office labeled?" She opened a door and walked in. "Maybe it's in here."
As she stood inside, Gabriel walked in wearing a towel and using another one to dry his hair. "Kate, what are you doing in the male locker room?"
She turned around so her back was to him. "Looking for you."
Aha, this explain the Hulk picture:) Damn Mr. Gabe it's a wow guy and poor Katherine got too much information:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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"She entered the locker room section of the school and glanced around. "Why isn't the Athletic Director's office labeled?" She opened a door and walked in. "Maybe it's in here."
As she stood inside, Gabriel walked in wearing a towel and using another one to dry his hair. "Kate, what are you doing in the male locker room?"
She turned around so her back was to him. "Looking for you."
Aha, this explain the Hulk picture:) Damn Mr. Gabe it's a wow guy and poor Katherine got too much information:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Yes, Katherine got more than she bargained for. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Suzanna Ray
Dear Barbara, I don't know where you got this picture for your illustration, but at least it sure makes Gabe into a real person.
I laughed, when Gabe made the remark about her arms blushing. Poor Catherine must Have a very sensitive nervous system.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Dear Barbara, I don't know where you got this picture for your illustration, but at least it sure makes Gabe into a real person.
I laughed, when Gabe made the remark about her arms blushing. Poor Catherine must Have a very sensitive nervous system.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-That was quite a picture, Barbara,
and a good story, too.
-For some reason when I go
to write a review, I want
to call you Katherine; I guess
she has made an impression on me.
-The chapter flows well with
very good dialogue between
Katherine and Gabe as they take
their morning walk.
-I'm glad she is getting a good
response for the cross country team.
-So far, she is managing her career
and her family very well with some
help from Gabe, like having his
father tape the games for her
and other things along the way.
-The ending is very good, too.
-I enjoyed the chapter.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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-That was quite a picture, Barbara,
and a good story, too.
-For some reason when I go
to write a review, I want
to call you Katherine; I guess
she has made an impression on me.
-The chapter flows well with
very good dialogue between
Katherine and Gabe as they take
their morning walk.
-I'm glad she is getting a good
response for the cross country team.
-So far, she is managing her career
and her family very well with some
help from Gabe, like having his
father tape the games for her
and other things along the way.
-The ending is very good, too.
-I enjoyed the chapter.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are very welcome.
