Too Shy
A Shakespearian sonnet19 total reviews
Comment from equestrik
This is a sad but sweet love poem reflecting such a one sided love that she doesn't even seem to have any knowledge that it exists! Well written and a good write for the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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This is a sad but sweet love poem reflecting such a one sided love that she doesn't even seem to have any knowledge that it exists! Well written and a good write for the contest.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Yes 👍 he?s too shy to even take the first step. Lol
Comment from Wendy G
A very beautiful sonnet, but what a pity the recipient of the love cannot read such lines expressing love, because the writer is too shy. Very well written - good wishes.
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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A very beautiful sonnet, but what a pity the recipient of the love cannot read such lines expressing love, because the writer is too shy. Very well written - good wishes.
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Wendy, thank you
Comment from Patty Palmer
I enjoyed your poem. i'm impressed with this sonnet with the unstressed syllables followed by stressed. I tried writing one but I don't quite get the just of it yet. I loved the picture with your poem. It looks like a cozy place to rest. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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I enjoyed your poem. i'm impressed with this sonnet with the unstressed syllables followed by stressed. I tried writing one but I don't quite get the just of it yet. I loved the picture with your poem. It looks like a cozy place to rest. Good luck with the contest.
Patty
Comment Written 10-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 10-Mar-2021
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Patty Thank you
Comment from Susan Newell
Oh, if she only knew that such a poet had been so smitten by her grace and charm and royal demeanor, surely she would have bid him sit with her and recite his poems of love, on a shaded bench in the garden. Speak up, young man!
A tale told well.
I wonder if line three would read better thusly:
"Words stop, astart with fear, when she comes near"
The first time I read it, I wondered why she was fearful.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Oh, if she only knew that such a poet had been so smitten by her grace and charm and royal demeanor, surely she would have bid him sit with her and recite his poems of love, on a shaded bench in the garden. Speak up, young man!
A tale told well.
I wonder if line three would read better thusly:
"Words stop, astart with fear, when she comes near"
The first time I read it, I wondered why she was fearful.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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That may well be a great solution instead of leaving her fear hang and unadressed, thank you!🙏
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Aaah. She was fearful. Of him? I didn't realize she could see him.
Comment from June Sargent
The agony and ecstasy of love - albeit undeclared. This is a lovely sonnet that captures the excitement and frustration of one who is just too shy to take that first step - and the dove flies away- again. I really enjoyed this piece with the perfect artwork. Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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The agony and ecstasy of love - albeit undeclared. This is a lovely sonnet that captures the excitement and frustration of one who is just too shy to take that first step - and the dove flies away- again. I really enjoyed this piece with the perfect artwork. Well done.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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June, thank you so much. As you certainly know sonnets are my rough patch, so your comments are very helpful, 🙏🙏
Comment from Patty Cicero
My heart bursts with awe of her sleek allure,
Such grace, not meek! Much poise her charm in place.
*excellent work done in Shakespearian style. Well written.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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My heart bursts with awe of her sleek allure,
Such grace, not meek! Much poise her charm in place.
*excellent work done in Shakespearian style. Well written.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Patty, than? fort eh review and comment, I appreciate your compliment.🙏
Comment from ESOSTINE
Your poem evoked pains of seeing love disappear. Many have been there one time or the other and the memories are better imagined. Hope you find the consolation you so need. Could you consider rearranging the poem into Quatrains (four-line stanzas) and a couplet at the end as in thr tradition of Shakespeare. Well done!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Your poem evoked pains of seeing love disappear. Many have been there one time or the other and the memories are better imagined. Hope you find the consolation you so need. Could you consider rearranging the poem into Quatrains (four-line stanzas) and a couplet at the end as in thr tradition of Shakespeare. Well done!
Comment Written 09-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Thank you for the thought...I would
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Too Shy', is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. It was a pleasure to both read and review a a poem of this standard. To me this is a six. Good luck with the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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'Too Shy', is an exceptionally well-written and delightfully descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. It was a pleasure to both read and review a a poem of this standard. To me this is a six. Good luck with the contest!
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2021
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Duchess, I thank you very much for your generous six-star validation on this poem.🙏🙏
Dear Anon,
You're very welcome. You certainly deserved the six star review.
God bless you and stay safe!,
the Duchess
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Too Shy
Great job with your entry for the Write A Sonnet writing prompt contest. I like the old Shakespearian sonnet in iambic pentameter. It's my favorite.
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Too Shy
Great job with your entry for the Write A Sonnet writing prompt contest. I like the old Shakespearian sonnet in iambic pentameter. It's my favorite.
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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thank you, I am so new at it. 👌👌
Comment from papa55mike
Lost love and loneliness are two great problems of today that people don't notice. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Lost love and loneliness are two great problems of today that people don't notice. What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2021
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Thank you and 🙏🙏 prayers to you for good health and good cheer.
