Forever
A Love poem not using the word love45 total reviews
Comment from June Sargent
hat a beautiful testament to the love you both share. And it is all the more touching, as it's the second time around for you. You did not need to use the word love. It came through. My favorites lines were
If you would ever leave and go away
I'd wither like a shawl of ancient lace.
Bright stars would quickly fall in disarray --
like tiny specks of dust without a trace.
Delicate like a la cy shawl and tiny stardust, feelings can wither and fade. But yours will live forever.
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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hat a beautiful testament to the love you both share. And it is all the more touching, as it's the second time around for you. You did not need to use the word love. It came through. My favorites lines were
If you would ever leave and go away
I'd wither like a shawl of ancient lace.
Bright stars would quickly fall in disarray --
like tiny specks of dust without a trace.
Delicate like a la cy shawl and tiny stardust, feelings can wither and fade. But yours will live forever.
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you June for this lovely review and for sharing your favorite lines.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A lovely image and
good presentation, Janet.
-Thanks for sharing the notes,
and congratulations on sharing
27 years of marriage.
-You wrote a very good poem
for your husband's birthday. I
can see why he loved it!
-I like the imagery you use to
show what it would be like if
he weren't there, "I'd wither like a
shawl of ancient lace."
-I also like how the turn in the
poem is to the positive with
his staying "and mold our many
fragments into one."
-A very good closing couplet, too.
-It is an excellent sonnet and love poem,
deserving of a win in the contest! Good luck!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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-A lovely image and
good presentation, Janet.
-Thanks for sharing the notes,
and congratulations on sharing
27 years of marriage.
-You wrote a very good poem
for your husband's birthday. I
can see why he loved it!
-I like the imagery you use to
show what it would be like if
he weren't there, "I'd wither like a
shawl of ancient lace."
-I also like how the turn in the
poem is to the positive with
his staying "and mold our many
fragments into one."
-A very good closing couplet, too.
-It is an excellent sonnet and love poem,
deserving of a win in the contest! Good luck!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Pam for this lovely review and for you continued encouragement of my writing. You are the to mention the 3rd stanza and the turn. I wasn't even sure you could go to the positive in the line but I guess it works ok.
Blessings and thank you too for the good wishes.
Janet
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You are very welcome, Janet. I don't know if the turn can be positive, but it worked in my opinion. You didn't list it as a sonnet, but it seemed that way to me.
Comment from Patty Palmer
Good luck with the contest, Every time Iet myself get down to the wire like this my fingers get tongue tied LOL This really is a pretty poem that you wrote for your husband. I can understand why forever means so much to you. Take care!!
Patty
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Good luck with the contest, Every time Iet myself get down to the wire like this my fingers get tongue tied LOL This really is a pretty poem that you wrote for your husband. I can understand why forever means so much to you. Take care!!
Patty
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you Patty for this lovely review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Forever
by Jmf4119
Hello
Nice entry for the Love Poem Poetry Contest. It was clever to write a love poem not using the word love. Your husband must love it. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Forever
by Jmf4119
Hello
Nice entry for the Love Poem Poetry Contest. It was clever to write a love poem not using the word love. Your husband must love it. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Gypsy for this lovely review. He does love it. It's framed and on his desk.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mary Vigasin
This is a beautiful poem of love. It is a very intimate write. This is one you could repeat to each other as wedding vows even without a formal ceremony on an anniversary.
Very well done.
I enjoyed the read.
Regards,
mary
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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This is a beautiful poem of love. It is a very intimate write. This is one you could repeat to each other as wedding vows even without a formal ceremony on an anniversary.
Very well done.
I enjoyed the read.
Regards,
mary
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you Mary for this lovely review.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Janet!
Not only do I appreciate the sentiments found in you well-crafted love poem, I love the backstory found in your Author's Notes! Did I ever share with you that my married name is "Truelove?" Yup. Forty-two years in June!
But back to your poem: sincere and filled with beautiful imagery.
Much enjoyed!
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Hello Janet!
Not only do I appreciate the sentiments found in you well-crafted love poem, I love the backstory found in your Author's Notes! Did I ever share with you that my married name is "Truelove?" Yup. Forty-two years in June!
But back to your poem: sincere and filled with beautiful imagery.
Much enjoyed!
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Diane for this lovely review. I didn't know your married name was "Truelove". You can put "true love" in everything you write. :)))) Congratulations on 42 years in June.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from nancy_e_davis
This is a very lovely poem, Janet. You did a wonderful job proving that Love is just a word . T rue love is more than just an emotion it is indeed a CHOICE. It's something you work at 24/7 and that helps it endure. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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This is a very lovely poem, Janet. You did a wonderful job proving that Love is just a word . T rue love is more than just an emotion it is indeed a CHOICE. It's something you work at 24/7 and that helps it endure. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Nancy for this lovely review and for you continued encouragement of my writing. Marriage is work 24/7 if you want it succeed. You are right - true love is a CHOICE.
Blessings
Janet
Comment from Mastery
All I can say is brilliant poetry, Janet. Every stanza grabs the heart of the reader anyone who has ever found this kind of love will understand the emotions expressed here. If not, their loss. Bless you and your husband for your good fortune. Good luck in the contest. to me it is the winner. Bob
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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All I can say is brilliant poetry, Janet. Every stanza grabs the heart of the reader anyone who has ever found this kind of love will understand the emotions expressed here. If not, their loss. Bless you and your husband for your good fortune. Good luck in the contest. to me it is the winner. Bob
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Bob for this most encouraging review and good wishes plus the sixth star is an added bonus.
Blessings
Janet
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Keep up the good job, Janet. Bob
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Janet, this is beautiful, sincere and your words are just perfect - without the word 'love'. Writing what you have written here, that word is not necessary - it's there in the poem. This is not just a love poem, it is well written with perfect iambic pentameter - some writers never manage that rhythm, and your abcb rhyme is maintained throughout. The best love poems are sonnets. This is beautiful and I hope you win - you should. Good Luck - warm regards Dorothy xx
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Janet, this is beautiful, sincere and your words are just perfect - without the word 'love'. Writing what you have written here, that word is not necessary - it's there in the poem. This is not just a love poem, it is well written with perfect iambic pentameter - some writers never manage that rhythm, and your abcb rhyme is maintained throughout. The best love poems are sonnets. This is beautiful and I hope you win - you should. Good Luck - warm regards Dorothy xx
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2021
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Thank you Dorothy this lovely review and most encouraging comments. The sixth star is an added bonus and icing on my cake. 😊
Blessings
Janet
Comment from dragonpoet
Jan,
You wrote a very heartfelt and romantic love poem without the word love.
It shows what everlasting love is. The chosen artwork implies this is about both earthly and diviine love.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Jan,
You wrote a very heartfelt and romantic love poem without the word love.
It shows what everlasting love is. The chosen artwork implies this is about both earthly and diviine love.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 02-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Thank you Joan for this lovely review and good wishes.
Blessings
Janet
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My pleasure, Janet.
Joan
