An Unwanted Message
Some messengers in dreams deliver a punch34 total reviews
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'An Unwanted Message', is an extremely well-written and heart-wrenching piece. There was certainly a punch in this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest! I hope you do well.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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'An Unwanted Message', is an extremely well-written and heart-wrenching piece. There was certainly a punch in this talented poet's work. Good luck with the contest! I hope you do well.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Thank you Duchess
Anon, your very welcome.
the Duchess
Comment from Miss Cookie Atkinson
.I love the words to your poem they truly touched my heart and soul.
You see this happen to twice
I don't have to tell how I felted
You captured my attention from the first word to the last
.Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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.I love the words to your poem they truly touched my heart and soul.
You see this happen to twice
I don't have to tell how I felted
You captured my attention from the first word to the last
.Thank you for sharing.
Cookie
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Thank you Miss Cookie!
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Your very welcome
Stay on praying ground
Cookie
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your narrative poem is well told, vividly descriptive and so sad, conveying a message about "This dream, not a dream." It is an excellent entry for this contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Your narrative poem is well told, vividly descriptive and so sad, conveying a message about "This dream, not a dream." It is an excellent entry for this contest.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Thank you Janice.
Comment from Susan Larson
I hope this isn't a true story, However, if it is, I trust your skill as a poet helped you heal. As for the dream, those things do happen. Is life just a dream? Very well written and I like your rhyming scheme.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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I hope this isn't a true story, However, if it is, I trust your skill as a poet helped you heal. As for the dream, those things do happen. Is life just a dream? Very well written and I like your rhyming scheme.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Susan, Yes, my siblings and I were all at college when the accident occurred. Dreams are the opportunity for us to open to our inner voice and ne alert to messages that come in our nighttime slumber.
Comment from Wendy G
That is a very clever poem, albeit a very sad one. When a dream becomes such a horrific reality, it almost makes one afraid to sleep. I hope it is not a true story. Very well written, so good wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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That is a very clever poem, albeit a very sad one. When a dream becomes such a horrific reality, it almost makes one afraid to sleep. I hope it is not a true story. Very well written, so good wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Wendy, dreams are, I believe, just another dimension that we are given insights to our lives that we would otherwise ignore.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Yes, those dreams--premonitions--are frightful and foreboding. You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I like the monorhyme of each verse. Your lines read well with and create great imagery. The image is supportive. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Yes, those dreams--premonitions--are frightful and foreboding. You did a great job with your contest entry, Mystery Author. I like the monorhyme of each verse. Your lines read well with and create great imagery. The image is supportive. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from papa55mike
Dreams are the gateway to the soul, so they say. I hope this is fiction! What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Dreams are the gateway to the soul, so they say. I hope this is fiction! What a wonderfully written poem.
Good luck in the contest!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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Hi Mike, I truly believe dreams are just that. Thanks for the good wishes.
Comment from LisaMay
You carry the story through the poem well with your use of monorhyme stanzas. Your dream's premonition is delivered with drama and tension. "Who is crossing heavens archway?" has a distressing answer.
One minor correction: dad should be Dad.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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You carry the story through the poem well with your use of monorhyme stanzas. Your dream's premonition is delivered with drama and tension. "Who is crossing heavens archway?" has a distressing answer.
One minor correction: dad should be Dad.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from lancellot
Not sure if this was a dream that came true or a dream that put one on defense, awaiting for something like that to happen. I do know that our fears can manifest themselves in our dreams. That happens often I think. The form of the poem is good with the mono-rhymes in each stanza.
Strong entry.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Not sure if this was a dream that came true or a dream that put one on defense, awaiting for something like that to happen. I do know that our fears can manifest themselves in our dreams. That happens often I think. The form of the poem is good with the mono-rhymes in each stanza.
Strong entry.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you, dreams do manifest possible warnings and insights to our lives.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is such an eerie write and more like a nightmare, did this really happen? If so, I am so sorry for your loss and to dream of seeing a crash and then finding it involved a loved one must have been terrifying, a life changing dream, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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This is such an eerie write and more like a nightmare, did this really happen? If so, I am so sorry for your loss and to dream of seeing a crash and then finding it involved a loved one must have been terrifying, a life changing dream, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Dolly, regrettably yes! My siblings and I were all in college and mom and dad were vacationing, I have paid very close attention to my night messengers ever sense.
