Frozen in Time
Hester waiting for the return of her husband11 total reviews
Comment from judester
Great job and six stars to welcome you to fanstory. What an image you conjure and so timely as we just got about a foot of snow, haha.
I look forward to sharing our stories and poems.
Cheers, j
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Great job and six stars to welcome you to fanstory. What an image you conjure and so timely as we just got about a foot of snow, haha.
I look forward to sharing our stories and poems.
Cheers, j
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Judester,
Thank you so much! I'm new to the site
and I apologize for being late in thanking
you for your very generous rating.
Comment from zanya
A very effective use of the limited prompt for this contest - a mere 100 words and a lot said and conveyed - the snowy scene so well painted and the tragedy that subsequently ensues
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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A very effective use of the limited prompt for this contest - a mere 100 words and a lot said and conveyed - the snowy scene so well painted and the tragedy that subsequently ensues
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a Nicely written flash fiction story. Interesting read. Just as you opened the door all you could see was a pair of boots and a hand reaching for the latch. I guess it was Tom ð???. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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This is a Nicely written flash fiction story. Interesting read. Just as you opened the door all you could see was a pair of boots and a hand reaching for the latch. I guess it was Tom ð???. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is gruesome. I can't decide whether Tom has frozen to death literally, or wether he is stuggling to get through the door. The former would make the better story, but the latter would be more reassuring. It is good that you left it to our own inclinations.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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This is gruesome. I can't decide whether Tom has frozen to death literally, or wether he is stuggling to get through the door. The former would make the better story, but the latter would be more reassuring. It is good that you left it to our own inclinations.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Oh no, I guess he died in front of the door:"Opening the door, she was met by a wall of snow. All she could see was a pair of boots and a hand reaching for the latch." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Oh no, I guess he died in front of the door:"Opening the door, she was met by a wall of snow. All she could see was a pair of boots and a hand reaching for the latch." Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from AnnaLinda
Haha, PENofFire...your last line is hysterical!!! I think you did a great job on this flash fiction entry...you did a good job of leading us innocently up your surprise ending.
I think you are missing another 'she' in the following sentence...
She shivered as * donned her bonnet and shawl."
Good luck!
Anna
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Haha, PENofFire...your last line is hysterical!!! I think you did a great job on this flash fiction entry...you did a good job of leading us innocently up your surprise ending.
I think you are missing another 'she' in the following sentence...
She shivered as * donned her bonnet and shawl."
Good luck!
Anna
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
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You are welcome.
This is for the other 13 thank you's you sent.
😚
Comment from rjuselius
This is a tragic piece of prose dear anonymous! It is perfectly posed with an insightful read. I think this should do very well!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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This is a tragic piece of prose dear anonymous! It is perfectly posed with an insightful read. I think this should do very well!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Debbie Pope
Now I am going to assume from your title that the husband did not quite make it home in time. How horrible. But, as a good writer should, you left me the possibility of concluding that the husband was just arriving as she was just leaving to get the wood. The serendipity of it all makes that unlikely, but I am going with it.
Nice job. I like your ambiguous ending.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Now I am going to assume from your title that the husband did not quite make it home in time. How horrible. But, as a good writer should, you left me the possibility of concluding that the husband was just arriving as she was just leaving to get the wood. The serendipity of it all makes that unlikely, but I am going with it.
Nice job. I like your ambiguous ending.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
That was intense and unexpected. You told a good little story in the space allowed. Your words are descriptive and well-chosen. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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That was intense and unexpected. You told a good little story in the space allowed. Your words are descriptive and well-chosen. Best wishes.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
Comment from Susan Newell
What a chilling story told in 100 words. Im'll bet she wished she'd ventured out sooner. One tiny thing - in the sentence that begins, "She shivered as . . ." You are missing a "she." Be careful to rewrite to maintain word count.
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reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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What a chilling story told in 100 words. Im'll bet she wished she'd ventured out sooner. One tiny thing - in the sentence that begins, "She shivered as . . ." You are missing a "she." Be careful to rewrite to maintain word count.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2021
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Thank you very much!
