Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 23 "Football Chapter 11 part 3"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a bizarre life Katherine had....her last husband was sure a roaming around fellow. It's a wonder why she stayed with him as he led such a double life...and he never was a family man. Sad!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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What a bizarre life Katherine had....her last husband was sure a roaming around fellow. It's a wonder why she stayed with him as he led such a double life...and he never was a family man. Sad!
Comment Written 22-Apr-2021
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2021
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George is NOT a good person, we will soon discover.
Comment from seaglass
Ah, so now we know that the deceased husband was mo prince. Romance is moving along. And I've experienced some Texas storms so thats very realistic. I may have jumped into a few arms, as i remember.
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
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Ah, so now we know that the deceased husband was mo prince. Romance is moving along. And I've experienced some Texas storms so thats very realistic. I may have jumped into a few arms, as i remember.
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
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LOL Texas storms can be brutal. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
Well you validated Katherine's reluctance to get into relationships, as she relates the story of how she used to live as a trophy wife in a dysfunctional relationship. But we see her slowly falling into the arms of Gabriel, and he is seemingly this great guy who cares about her kid. The warm, emotional dialogue really moves this along. Also some nice flashes of the lightning as the storm moves over them, I think you set that scene well as they grope around in the dark for the candles. Very realistic. estory
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
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Well you validated Katherine's reluctance to get into relationships, as she relates the story of how she used to live as a trophy wife in a dysfunctional relationship. But we see her slowly falling into the arms of Gabriel, and he is seemingly this great guy who cares about her kid. The warm, emotional dialogue really moves this along. Also some nice flashes of the lightning as the storm moves over them, I think you set that scene well as they grope around in the dark for the candles. Very realistic. estory
Comment Written 25-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 27-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. We will learn more about George as the story continues.
Comment from paleface
This is an work of art from a true artist thoughts. Written beautifully and played out excellent, will be outstanding to fill two hardcovers with. Great job
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reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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This is an work of art from a true artist thoughts. Written beautifully and played out excellent, will be outstanding to fill two hardcovers with. Great job
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Comment Written 24-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2021
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This is a 5 review, but you only gave me 2 stars. Is it a mistake? If not, please inform me what I need to correct to bring this up to a 5 level.
Comment from Jimmy Hogg
Thanks for sharing this. I'm not entirely sure if the title works, and I don't know enough about the story as a whole to suggest an alternative. Something to consider.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thanks for sharing this. I'm not entirely sure if the title works, and I don't know enough about the story as a whole to suggest an alternative. Something to consider.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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The title doesn't work!! I am sure of it. I just haven't come up with a title, yet and just threw this one on it. LOL I'm still waiting for the right title. Thank you for the kind review.
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Yeah, titles are tough. The right one will present itself I'm sure!
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I'm hoping so. The ones I've looked at when I googled them there was already tons of novels with similar titles.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
First if there were error I didn't see any.
I got so involved reading what happened after the light went off. I smiled when I read-- when--
Gabriel took Katherine's hand. "I don't want you getting lost. "
and loved this--
when Gabriel his arms circled Katherine After her breathing returned to normal.
To me it sounds like a nice relationship is going to happen
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Hello Barb
First if there were error I didn't see any.
I got so involved reading what happened after the light went off. I smiled when I read-- when--
Gabriel took Katherine's hand. "I don't want you getting lost. "
and loved this--
when Gabriel his arms circled Katherine After her breathing returned to normal.
To me it sounds like a nice relationship is going to happen
Gert
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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I think it will be a nice relationship, if we can get these two together. LOL Thank you.
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Yes, lets get started making a romance going between Katherine and Gabriel.
Gert
Comment from AJ McCall
Haha! Gabriel is such a character and caring at the same time it's hilarious. Who doesn't get scared of some thunder and lighting every now and then? This was the perfect storm (Ha! No pun intended.) for Katherine and Gabriel to be together alone. I'm very excited to see where this is heading. Can't wait to read the next chapter!
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Haha! Gabriel is such a character and caring at the same time it's hilarious. Who doesn't get scared of some thunder and lighting every now and then? This was the perfect storm (Ha! No pun intended.) for Katherine and Gabriel to be together alone. I'm very excited to see where this is heading. Can't wait to read the next chapter!
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your enthusiasm. I appreciate it.
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You're welcome!!!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
The missing in action husband seems a real jerk: "After folding her hands in her lap, she added, "The boys were pictures in his wallet he'd show off. My purpose," she glanced at a photo on the fireplace hearth, "he'd have a dress sent to the penthouse for an appointed dinner engagement. He'd even hire a babysitter. Most of the time, he'd send a taxi. I'd meet him there and enter on his arm."
"A trophy wife."" Thank you for sharing, I think your novel it comes up nicely:)
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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The missing in action husband seems a real jerk: "After folding her hands in her lap, she added, "The boys were pictures in his wallet he'd show off. My purpose," she glanced at a photo on the fireplace hearth, "he'd have a dress sent to the penthouse for an appointed dinner engagement. He'd even hire a babysitter. Most of the time, he'd send a taxi. I'd meet him there and enter on his arm."
"A trophy wife."" Thank you for sharing, I think your novel it comes up nicely:)
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement. More about George will be coming up, SLOWLY!!
Comment from RShipp
("The boys were pictures in his wallet he'd show off. My purpose," she glanced at a photo on the fireplace hearth, "he'd have a dress sent to the penthouse for an appointed dinner engagement. He'd even hire a babysitter. Most of the time, he'd send a taxi. I'd meet him there and enter on his arm.") What a concrete way to describe this relationship!
Enjoying the story. A good read.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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("The boys were pictures in his wallet he'd show off. My purpose," she glanced at a photo on the fireplace hearth, "he'd have a dress sent to the penthouse for an appointed dinner engagement. He'd even hire a babysitter. Most of the time, he'd send a taxi. I'd meet him there and enter on his arm.") What a concrete way to describe this relationship!
Enjoying the story. A good read.
Comment Written 23-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Wendy G
Yes, it works. I was wondering yesterday if I had missed a chapter! Again, it flows well and with realism (I know I am repeating myself, but it does, and I don't have suggestions for improvement, as I like your easy style.) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Yes, it works. I was wondering yesterday if I had missed a chapter! Again, it flows well and with realism (I know I am repeating myself, but it does, and I don't have suggestions for improvement, as I like your easy style.) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 23-Feb-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
