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Comment from royowen
An excellent post Iza, the thought of living in the 4th millennium is pretty well unthinkable. We'll probably not need arms or legs, everything will be done for us, driverless cars, meals cook themselves, hedonism rules. Well done my friend, blessings Roy
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An excellent post Iza, the thought of living in the 4th millennium is pretty well unthinkable. We'll probably not need arms or legs, everything will be done for us, driverless cars, meals cook themselves, hedonism rules. Well done my friend, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Mar-2021
Comment from barbara.wilkey
She better be careful being a free thinker and all. Going to the older people might get her in big trouble. We certainly don't want anybody to think for themselves. Thank you for sharing.
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She better be careful being a free thinker and all. Going to the older people might get her in big trouble. We certainly don't want anybody to think for themselves. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2021
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hey, that is not fair! I'm old and I want to be in my 20s, if that's the way we have to stay!! What a clever, original story about the covid vaccine. I went back and quickly read through. So, no children either? Your story did make me wonder, would we really like to be immortal and live forever in the body we have? Hmm, I'm not too sure about that. I'll be following this story. Well done, Iza. :)) Sandra xx
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Hey, that is not fair! I'm old and I want to be in my 20s, if that's the way we have to stay!! What a clever, original story about the covid vaccine. I went back and quickly read through. So, no children either? Your story did make me wonder, would we really like to be immortal and live forever in the body we have? Hmm, I'm not too sure about that. I'll be following this story. Well done, Iza. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 05-Mar-2021
Comment from Leann DS
Not only does your story intrigue me because of the focus nowadays on the apocalypse and living underground, blah blah blah, but I am also a fanatic about ice cream. I can't wait to see what significance this word plays in the story. Well done. Going to get some mint chocolate chip now. Hugs.
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Not only does your story intrigue me because of the focus nowadays on the apocalypse and living underground, blah blah blah, but I am also a fanatic about ice cream. I can't wait to see what significance this word plays in the story. Well done. Going to get some mint chocolate chip now. Hugs.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2021
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Wry dystopian fanstasy! Spiking the vaccines--Corona still reigns in 3050!
tick-in=>TICKING or TICKIN' (informal)
automats=>AUTOMATONS
state of content=>CONTENTMENT
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Wry dystopian fanstasy! Spiking the vaccines--Corona still reigns in 3050!
tick-in=>TICKING or TICKIN' (informal)
automats=>AUTOMATONS
state of content=>CONTENTMENT
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
Comment from lyenochka
Interesting reflection on your sci-fi story. I like that your character is going to give the seniors a chance (Hooray for old people!) Hopefully, they can put their minds and memories together to make a good change.
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"only people until 40 years old" (suggest "only people aged 40 and younger" or "people under the age of 40") We usually us "until" with dates not age. I know - prepositions are so hard!
I am not sure why this is under Script as it seems to be regular prose.
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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Interesting reflection on your sci-fi story. I like that your character is going to give the seniors a chance (Hooray for old people!) Hopefully, they can put their minds and memories together to make a good change.
Comments:
"only people until 40 years old" (suggest "only people aged 40 and younger" or "people under the age of 40") We usually us "until" with dates not age. I know - prepositions are so hard!
I am not sure why this is under Script as it seems to be regular prose.
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
reply by the author on 03-Mar-2021
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I don't know how to change it.😒
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It's probably not in our power to change the category once it's done. You could ask Tom or just leave it.
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Guess what Tom contacted me to change and I told him that I can't and he told me to look at the TYPE. But that thing doesn't come up when I edit something.
Comment from visionary1234
Good to read another script writer on site, Iza! Though this would be classified as a 'monologue' - but still a script. 'After a short sight'??? And I think you mean 'automaton' rather than an 'automat' which sounds more like a place I'd go to wash my clothes :):):) But a fun, imaginative, unusual piece, for sure! Well done!
Sharyn
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Good to read another script writer on site, Iza! Though this would be classified as a 'monologue' - but still a script. 'After a short sight'??? And I think you mean 'automaton' rather than an 'automat' which sounds more like a place I'd go to wash my clothes :):):) But a fun, imaginative, unusual piece, for sure! Well done!
Sharyn
Comment Written 03-Mar-2021
