Back In The Day
Just a glimpse of how times have changed13 total reviews
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
You've written such a beautiful poem about the way things have changed, over time. Your description of life in your youth is very colorful and lively, and you have a great, healthy acceptance of the changing landscape of your lifetime. That, my friend, is a priceless treasure.
Some grammatical revisions and suggestions:
Earned my Rite to reminisces
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Earned my Rite [or right?] to reminisce [or reminiscences]
As a child, and than well into my early teens
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As a child, and then well into my early teens
I went to school everyday,
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I went to school every day,
My friends and I we also loved to swim
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My friends and I, we also loved to swim
We often ended our play
In the ocean not too far away
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We often ended our play
In the ocean, not too far away
Now looking back their memories I adore
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Now looking back, their memories I adore
Most of us listen to their voice
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Most of us listened to their voice
I did things my parents way
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I did things my parents' way
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You narrate your poem like a pleasant story. The picture is also very cute.
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You've written such a beautiful poem about the way things have changed, over time. Your description of life in your youth is very colorful and lively, and you have a great, healthy acceptance of the changing landscape of your lifetime. That, my friend, is a priceless treasure.
Some grammatical revisions and suggestions:
Earned my Rite to reminisces
-->
Earned my Rite [or right?] to reminisce [or reminiscences]
As a child, and than well into my early teens
-->
As a child, and then well into my early teens
I went to school everyday,
-->
I went to school every day,
My friends and I we also loved to swim
-->
My friends and I, we also loved to swim
We often ended our play
In the ocean not too far away
-->
We often ended our play
In the ocean, not too far away
Now looking back their memories I adore
-->
Now looking back, their memories I adore
Most of us listen to their voice
-->
Most of us listened to their voice
I did things my parents way
-->
I did things my parents' way
***
You narrate your poem like a pleasant story. The picture is also very cute.
Comment Written 12-Feb-2021
Comment from Judy Lawless
You've described in detail a life much like mine, when I was a child growing up in the 50s. Looking back I sometimes remember some things that seem odd now, but were of no consequence to me at the time.
Thanks for the memories.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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You've described in detail a life much like mine, when I was a child growing up in the 50s. Looking back I sometimes remember some things that seem odd now, but were of no consequence to me at the time.
Thanks for the memories.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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Thank you for encouraging review and generous rating. It is appreciated. All the best to you.
Comment from Patty Palmer
I remember back in the day myself. I'm 67 and I remember all of the things you mentioned. I'm glad that I grew up back then and not in these days. We had some worries growing up, like did I pass history class this six weeks. Kids today have too many worries on their minds about friends, drugs, social worries etc. I wouldn't trade the good ole days for anything they have today!
Patty
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I remember back in the day myself. I'm 67 and I remember all of the things you mentioned. I'm glad that I grew up back then and not in these days. We had some worries growing up, like did I pass history class this six weeks. Kids today have too many worries on their minds about friends, drugs, social worries etc. I wouldn't trade the good ole days for anything they have today!
Patty
Comment Written 11-Feb-2021
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
You listed many 'good old day' things in this poem. Family and friend, thanking people, running and playing in the woods, listening and obeying our parents, and being seen, not heard when company has arrived.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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You listed many 'good old day' things in this poem. Family and friend, thanking people, running and playing in the woods, listening and obeying our parents, and being seen, not heard when company has arrived.
Comment Written 11-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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You are appreciated thank you so much for your review and rating.
Comment from equestrik
I like this and can identify with much of what you write here. I suppose we have lost much and gained much in time-some positive but some, not so much.
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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I like this and can identify with much of what you write here. I suppose we have lost much and gained much in time-some positive but some, not so much.
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 11-Feb-2021
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Thank you so very much for your sincere comments and your encouraging rating and review. All the best to you.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think we all felt this kind of power in our lives and I left home at the age of 18 to escape it. There were so many rules at home that it was hard to navigate them and live a good life. But some lessons were worth learning. You made me smile here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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I think we all felt this kind of power in our lives and I left home at the age of 18 to escape it. There were so many rules at home that it was hard to navigate them and live a good life. But some lessons were worth learning. You made me smile here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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Thank you for your generous rating and encouraging review. Much appreciated.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
I like the picture and the title "Back in the Day."
Different generations... a generation respects. Be it right or wrong, repast each other. Listen the teachers, parents and older people. Young adults may not agree what why hear but they don't fight back...
Where are hose good old days?
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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I like the picture and the title "Back in the Day."
Different generations... a generation respects. Be it right or wrong, repast each other. Listen the teachers, parents and older people. Young adults may not agree what why hear but they don't fight back...
Where are hose good old days?
Comment Written 10-Feb-2021
reply by the author on 10-Feb-2021
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My sincere thanks and appreciation for your encouragement and generous rating.
Comment from lancellot
There is no doubt that you tell a good story of how things used to be when you were young and the effect it had on you.
Poetic construction wise, it is usually recommended you type with on form, but I think this blended piece works best for this.
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There is no doubt that you tell a good story of how things used to be when you were young and the effect it had on you.
Poetic construction wise, it is usually recommended you type with on form, but I think this blended piece works best for this.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
Comment from PENofFIRE
I love your story and the memories you shared with all of us. Things are so different today. Kids have no idea what they are missing, but would not see as such. Looking forward to more of your poems and stories.
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I love your story and the memories you shared with all of us. Things are so different today. Kids have no idea what they are missing, but would not see as such. Looking forward to more of your poems and stories.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
Comment from Jean Lutz1
At almost 81, I lived those good ole days. Didn't appreciate them then but I sure do now. Your use of words, art work and color scheme are a ticket to rewind my time. I wish you well in the contest.
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At almost 81, I lived those good ole days. Didn't appreciate them then but I sure do now. Your use of words, art work and color scheme are a ticket to rewind my time. I wish you well in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Feb-2021
