God And Man
A Spiritual Poem; Contest Over; Edited Today119 total reviews
Comment from The Mom/DarleneThomson
Dear DR,
I understand your meaning completely without all the author's notes but I am sure there are some who won't. I enjoyed this style of poetry. Your poem spoke volumes. It flowed very well. Great job. I hope you won the contest. Blessings, Darlene
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Dear DR,
I understand your meaning completely without all the author's notes but I am sure there are some who won't. I enjoyed this style of poetry. Your poem spoke volumes. It flowed very well. Great job. I hope you won the contest. Blessings, Darlene
Comment Written 21-Jan-2022
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow, you leave me nothing left to say! I just wanted to say this is a well-written four-line poem and I love the artwork, it is so divine!
It is brief and gets to the point very well!
I want to thank you for posting this even though you give a lot of author's notes to read and decide whether to review or not to review it a question best answered by God himself! So, thank you for posting this spiritual poem it is worth pondering and I intend to do just that!
Take good care of yourself!
Jesse
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Wow, you leave me nothing left to say! I just wanted to say this is a well-written four-line poem and I love the artwork, it is so divine!
It is brief and gets to the point very well!
I want to thank you for posting this even though you give a lot of author's notes to read and decide whether to review or not to review it a question best answered by God himself! So, thank you for posting this spiritual poem it is worth pondering and I intend to do just that!
Take good care of yourself!
Jesse
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from Frank Malley
There's a paradox in this poem: if God only knows man's sin, how then is man encouraged to live as he wishes? "Speak your sins" urges honesty within the self, which can be like wrestling within a pile of eels. And God's ultimate choice of whether to "save or punish" seems whimsical, sort of Calvinistic, some sort of inscrutable preference system that God imposes when ads show up on his TV. At any rate, the language within this poem is childishly simplistic; given this choice of style, the main message, I think, would have to be more impressive. All the best.
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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There's a paradox in this poem: if God only knows man's sin, how then is man encouraged to live as he wishes? "Speak your sins" urges honesty within the self, which can be like wrestling within a pile of eels. And God's ultimate choice of whether to "save or punish" seems whimsical, sort of Calvinistic, some sort of inscrutable preference system that God imposes when ads show up on his TV. At any rate, the language within this poem is childishly simplistic; given this choice of style, the main message, I think, would have to be more impressive. All the best.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
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Thanks, please clarify.
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I'm sorry I spoke confusingly. Simplicity of style is fine, but your several statements in the poem do not create a convincing conclusion.
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God
Only knows man's sin
Do live as you wish
Speak your sins God may save or punish
Please clarify wisely.
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God
Only knows man's sin
Do live as you wish
Speak your sins God may save or punish
Please clarify wisely.
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Sorry. I guess we come from different systems of appreciation. I wonder, however, if you've read any poetry by the great authors of the past?
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Please revise notes.
Please don't hurry.
Right, never worry!
03-12-2021
Comment from pookietoo
This is a great four line poem. I wish you a lot of luck in the contest. Keep up the great work writing poems. I hope you keep smiling. Best wishes always.
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This is a great four line poem. I wish you a lot of luck in the contest. Keep up the great work writing poems. I hope you keep smiling. Best wishes always.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
Comment from chatterbox1
Of course we can live as we wish. Only we are responsible for the outcome from the direction we take. We have no one to blame (but One to thank). Thank you for sharing,
Carol
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Of course we can live as we wish. Only we are responsible for the outcome from the direction we take. We have no one to blame (but One to thank). Thank you for sharing,
Carol
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
Comment from P. Finn
I apologize that I am not able to post a positive review. I see little or no value in the idea expressed or the words selected. I see that you are an accomplished writer and review on this website, I am a newcomer. The topic of sin is not an easy one to write about in a short poetic piece. What's the idea you wish to convey? God punishes or saves and only He knows our sins. How does Live as you wish fit into this?
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I apologize that I am not able to post a positive review. I see little or no value in the idea expressed or the words selected. I see that you are an accomplished writer and review on this website, I am a newcomer. The topic of sin is not an easy one to write about in a short poetic piece. What's the idea you wish to convey? God punishes or saves and only He knows our sins. How does Live as you wish fit into this?
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2021
Comment from Earthlover
Hello, I really enjoyed your litte "Four Line Poem" for the contest.
Very creative expressions and the photo used inhances your message very well. I enjoyed also your detailed footnote information. Thank you for sharing your poem.
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Hello, I really enjoyed your litte "Four Line Poem" for the contest.
Very creative expressions and the photo used inhances your message very well. I enjoyed also your detailed footnote information. Thank you for sharing your poem.
Comment Written 01-May-2021
Comment from Aussie
"Except a man be born again he will not see the Kingdom of Heaven. Born of the spirit not of the flesh. I liked the way you put the path of righteousness into a few lines. Now is the time for man to choose the path. "To every man there opens a highway and a low, each man decides which way his soul shall go." The clock is ticking.
Well done. Blessings, Kay.
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"Except a man be born again he will not see the Kingdom of Heaven. Born of the spirit not of the flesh. I liked the way you put the path of righteousness into a few lines. Now is the time for man to choose the path. "To every man there opens a highway and a low, each man decides which way his soul shall go." The clock is ticking.
Well done. Blessings, Kay.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2021
Comment from Mame
Very well phrased. How true! God only knows what is in our heart. So many other judgements yet we only know when the time comes to meet our Maker - apt picture too.
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Very well phrased. How true! God only knows what is in our heart. So many other judgements yet we only know when the time comes to meet our Maker - apt picture too.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2021
Comment from Colleen The Garbanzo Bean
I like your lack of punctuation. I find it interesting you say this is not an acrostic poem. The poem leads me to wonder, speak sins to whom? God? Doesn't God already know of man's sins? I reread the poem after writing that line and I like it more already. Is it God only know's man's sins, as in it is only God who knows man's sins? Or is it "God only know's man's sins" like "God only knows what I would do without you," like it is unfathomable? Great work!
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I like your lack of punctuation. I find it interesting you say this is not an acrostic poem. The poem leads me to wonder, speak sins to whom? God? Doesn't God already know of man's sins? I reread the poem after writing that line and I like it more already. Is it God only know's man's sins, as in it is only God who knows man's sins? Or is it "God only know's man's sins" like "God only knows what I would do without you," like it is unfathomable? Great work!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2021
