Fat Shadow
7/6/7 Haikuish Tercet11 total reviews
Comment from Mark Schardine
his New Year resolution
to jog around the block --
on next lane, a fat shadow
We see other people in worse shape than ourselves, but that provides no excuse to give up our efforts.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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his New Year resolution
to jog around the block --
on next lane, a fat shadow
We see other people in worse shape than ourselves, but that provides no excuse to give up our efforts.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem.
Gypsy
Comment from w.j.debi
I like it. You create excellent imagery. I can imagine the jogger having a surprised look on his face when he sees that fat shadow. Maybe with determination, it will become a thin one.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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I like it. You create excellent imagery. I can imagine the jogger having a surprised look on his face when he sees that fat shadow. Maybe with determination, it will become a thin one.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from amada
This is an intriguing 7-6-7. Very unique and enigmatic in only a limited set of words. That fat shadow could be an incentive to run, run, run. Beautiful imagery and incentive to exercise.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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This is an intriguing 7-6-7. Very unique and enigmatic in only a limited set of words. That fat shadow could be an incentive to run, run, run. Beautiful imagery and incentive to exercise.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Teri7
Gypsy, This is a very interesting and well written 7/6/7 Haikuish Tercet. You used very good descriptive words and good imagery. Thank you for sharing. You are so good at all these different forms. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Gypsy, This is a very interesting and well written 7/6/7 Haikuish Tercet. You used very good descriptive words and good imagery. Thank you for sharing. You are so good at all these different forms. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you, Teri :)
Comment from DonandVicki
Ahh yes, the shadow doesn't lie, it cannot hide the truth. I like the sublime message that you craftily placed in this haikuish terset. May our resolutions never falter.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Ahh yes, the shadow doesn't lie, it cannot hide the truth. I like the sublime message that you craftily placed in this haikuish terset. May our resolutions never falter.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words
Gypsy
Comment from Jasmine Girl
Haha. Running one block is not enough. He has to run a lot more blocks.
I like the new form of poetry you have created. I might try to write one, too.
I give you a six stars for creativity.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Haha. Running one block is not enough. He has to run a lot more blocks.
I like the new form of poetry you have created. I might try to write one, too.
I give you a six stars for creativity.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and six stars, I m glad you found it funny and creative.
Gypsy
Comment from Gloria ....
I bet you he'll take a different route next time when he's out jogging. ;-)
What a terrific haikuish tercet. Those shadows can most absolutely be misleading. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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I bet you he'll take a different route next time when he's out jogging. ;-)
What a terrific haikuish tercet. Those shadows can most absolutely be misleading. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much Gloria. :)
Gypsy
Comment from lyenochka
That's so funny! Although one's shadow is never quite an accurate representation of the real person, it does make me laugh thinking how the poor person is "shadowed" by his self-image.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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That's so funny! Although one's shadow is never quite an accurate representation of the real person, it does make me laugh thinking how the poor person is "shadowed" by his self-image.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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LoL I'm happy it made you smile :) thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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LoL I'm happy it made you smile :) thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy--and I made and couldn't keep my New Year's resolution--to stop being an embarrassment to men everywhere; oh well, there's always next year!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy--and I made and couldn't keep my New Year's resolution--to stop being an embarrassment to men everywhere; oh well, there's always next year!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words
Gypy
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words
Gypy
Comment from Raul1
I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. I see a real fat shadow. Interesting type of poetry. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors.
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reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. I see a real fat shadow. Interesting type of poetry. I like how you structured this poem. Excellent work! No grammatical errors.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2021
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Thank you
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Thank you
