A prayer
Tinos miracle8 total reviews
Comment from RetroStarfish
Interesting take on the writing prompt. Great story but the second sentence don't make sense: "What if life stops and wonders and let squeeze another miracle?"
I think I understand what you're trying to say with this story and it's a great idea.
Interesting take on the writing prompt. Great story but the second sentence don't make sense: "What if life stops and wonders and let squeeze another miracle?"
I think I understand what you're trying to say with this story and it's a great idea.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2021
Comment from lyenochka
Thank you for sharing about this place of miracles. I'm so glad you got to see it with your parents! Enjoyed the story and hope you do well in the contest!
Suggestion:
when you are over forties? (in your forties)
Thank you for sharing about this place of miracles. I'm so glad you got to see it with your parents! Enjoyed the story and hope you do well in the contest!
Suggestion:
when you are over forties? (in your forties)
Comment Written 02-Jan-2021
Comment from LisaMay
I believe in miracles of faith so I found your story very interesting. It was well written, showing the emotion of the situation, and I liked how you introduced a real place - the Panagia Monastery in Tinos - to give authenticity.
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021
I believe in miracles of faith so I found your story very interesting. It was well written, showing the emotion of the situation, and I liked how you introduced a real place - the Panagia Monastery in Tinos - to give authenticity.
Comment Written 01-Jan-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jan-2021
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an interesting entry for the contest, but there are a few grammatical niggles that need to be fixed:
life stops and wonders and let squeeze another miracle > discordance between three verbs to solve
over forties > in your forties / over forty
an old lady in the monastery that > that is for an object, who for a person
We did as we were told. > sudden shift from third person to first (illogical)
This is an interesting entry for the contest, but there are a few grammatical niggles that need to be fixed:
life stops and wonders and let squeeze another miracle > discordance between three verbs to solve
over forties > in your forties / over forty
an old lady in the monastery that > that is for an object, who for a person
We did as we were told. > sudden shift from third person to first (illogical)
Comment Written 31-Dec-2020
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Lovely piece, well narrated. You skillfully incorporated first person narration via Jeff's thoughts. An original theme for this contest. Notes are intriguing; link appreciated.
when you're over forties=>over forty
Lovely piece, well narrated. You skillfully incorporated first person narration via Jeff's thoughts. An original theme for this contest. Notes are intriguing; link appreciated.
when you're over forties=>over forty
Comment Written 30-Dec-2020
Comment from equestrik
This is a really interesting write but I had a bit of a tough time understanding what happened in the last -who came? and who is going back with them?
This is a really interesting write but I had a bit of a tough time understanding what happened in the last -who came? and who is going back with them?
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
Comment from Goodadvicechan
You are good story teller. It is very easy to follow the story but the way to pray is not real. "To believe it and follow it" is more a humor than reality.
Nice picture for this story.
Best of luck.
You are good story teller. It is very easy to follow the story but the way to pray is not real. "To believe it and follow it" is more a humor than reality.
Nice picture for this story.
Best of luck.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
Comment from Jewell McChesney
When you get at the door cross yourselves and pray to the Mother of God for her blessing.
I think you need a comma after "door".
Interesting fictional story. Or is it a real experience?
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
When you get at the door cross yourselves and pray to the Mother of God for her blessing.
I think you need a comma after "door".
Interesting fictional story. Or is it a real experience?
Comment Written 29-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2020
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It's fictional, I have no kids but two cats:) I was there with my dad to pray for him to get a cure of his cancer, and he got two more years despite that the doctors said he is going to live only 6 months.