Arnie the carny
silly story6 total reviews
Comment from RetroStarfish
This is sweet and funny.
Loliipops are slicks on a stick and they do stick to the stick. This is good stuff.
Also - is Santa from Atlanta?
Very clever. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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This is sweet and funny.
Loliipops are slicks on a stick and they do stick to the stick. This is good stuff.
Also - is Santa from Atlanta?
Very clever. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review:) I am so happy that you appreciated the humor:)
Comment from lyenochka
Considering the constraints of the contest, I think you met the challenge well. I like that you used dialogue all the way through. Best wishes in the contest!
"Silly boy, did you meant" (mean)
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Considering the constraints of the contest, I think you met the challenge well. I like that you used dialogue all the way through. Best wishes in the contest!
"Silly boy, did you meant" (mean)
Comment Written 20-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you:)
Comment from Jerome Goldberg
Wow! I have no idea what you said or why you said it; but, I do like the way you said it. This may be a silly review, it do say what I think. Stay safe and stay well.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Wow! I have no idea what you said or why you said it; but, I do like the way you said it. This may be a silly review, it do say what I think. Stay safe and stay well.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your review
Comment from Sanku
This is a very interesting story .The silliness id very endearing .And it has only dialogues.All the best for this contest. Arnie from Carnie will be quite thrilled
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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This is a very interesting story .The silliness id very endearing .And it has only dialogues.All the best for this contest. Arnie from Carnie will be quite thrilled
Comment Written 17-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your wonderful review
Comment from sammielwf
Dear Mystery Author,
I am glad you attempted and created this silly phoneme....it was worth your effort and craftsmanship.
I kept trying this challenge - but it got the better of me....you wrestled yours into existence. Well done.
Sammielwf
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Dear Mystery Author,
I am glad you attempted and created this silly phoneme....it was worth your effort and craftsmanship.
I kept trying this challenge - but it got the better of me....you wrestled yours into existence. Well done.
Sammielwf
Comment Written 12-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your support with this piece:)
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Cute bit of whimsy. Fun with phonemes! - Sugg: tweak to include rhyme (or omit): "No! It's minus fifteen, wait until we go home." Also: chick/geek--no rhyme--is the intention regarding the "K" sound? Kids will surely delight in this XMAS story!
(Taking a tole=>toll?)
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Cute bit of whimsy. Fun with phonemes! - Sugg: tweak to include rhyme (or omit): "No! It's minus fifteen, wait until we go home." Also: chick/geek--no rhyme--is the intention regarding the "K" sound? Kids will surely delight in this XMAS story!
(Taking a tole=>toll?)
Comment Written 12-Dec-2020
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2020
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Thank you so much for your kind review:)
