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To Just Pause

watch snowflakes dance, just be present

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Comment from Bill Schott
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This 3-7-5, To Just Pause, has the right set up and gives us permission to see the killing winter cold in its triumphal entry into our world.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Bill thanks for your time taken to read and comment on this 3-7-5. Poem on winters dance.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
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You have made excellent use of all of your syllables in this lovely poem describing an offering of nature that demands our rapt attention. We don't get much snow in Mississippi, but when we do I can't stop looking!

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Janice, thanks ?- nope not much white stuff in Mississippi, so I bet it is a nice delight on those occasions you can a flake or two.
Comment from Mark D. R.
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A most contemplative poem for your 3-7-5 contest entry! Snowflakes with their myriad shapes are a good metaphor for your pause to consider the moment in time. You selected an illustration that just adds to the overall feeling.

'watching snowflake's dance' is a terrific phrase, but takes on a different meaning if written as 'watching snowflakes dance...'

I prefer a serif font for all my FanStory posts, but it is your poetic choice to disregard.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Yes a totally different meaning unfolds without the apostope.
Comment from equestrik
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This is a creative idea and write for the 3-5-7 writing prompt. I enjoyed this - both the picture as well as your words. Best of luck to you in the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Thank you!
Comment from Father Flaps
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An excellent entry for the 3-7-5 poetry contest, Mystery Poet.
You take a time-out to just marvel at the snowflake patterns "dance".
A "pause/present moment stuff" is perfect.
Nicely penned! Good Luck in the contest!
I don't think many people seize the opportunity to look at falling snow. They're too busy shoveling it!
Cheers,
Kimbob

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Kimbob, this may well be so! It?s just work, work, work for some...
Comment from bnair
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Be in the moment. I love snowflakes and how unique each one is. Do not get to see it often. Reminds me of my childhood when I was blessed to see it every winter.

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    bnair, it is os true that we, as children, seem to connect more "at one" with the snow days. Heightening the anticipation of playtime and steamy hot cocoa .
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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My 6th graders did a snow study course. So I learned things I did not know. You may know the study done by Snowflake Bentley. We focused a lot on that. All of it causes one to pause.
https://snowflakebentley.com/

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Liz,what an intriguing website and such a marvelous study on a person who, by simple inquiry, made a such a significant discovery. Thank you very much for sharing this information, You obviously are an excellent educator a profession I bow to you and for your gifts you bring to children.
reply by Liz O'Neill on 04-Dec-2020
    Thank you for the generous compliment.
Comment from royowen
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There are some things that make great mobiles, and that is snow falling, although I haven't watched snow for some time now, we live in a no snow region, well done great entry, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    I couldn't agree more!
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
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Pausing to enjoy should be a criterion of life. How else do we acknowledge the beauty that surrounds us? We have to see more when we look than the surface. We need to understand the source.

Ralf

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    Ralf, Hi and thank you so much. We do need to understand the God in all things....thus we need to pause.
Comment from Sally Law
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Lovely offering for the 3-7-5 contest, mystery poet. A beautiful snowfall deserves attention. Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest
Sally XOs...

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020
    SAlly, as always, thank you for your time taken to read and comment on my poem.