Comment from djsaxon

Exceptional

Love it. Unlike your clever self, I tend to go down the extended rhyming trail with clumsy dum de dums and not so clumsy sonnets. This truly inspires me to revisit the 5/7/5 structure be it haiku or whatever. Thank you for sharing - DJ

 Comment Written 04-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020

DJ,

My wife is always asking me why my poems don?t rhyme. I tell her that I don?t go down that rabbit hole very often. Most of my posts are Haiku or the English version with exactly 5-7-5 syllables. Do appreciate your extra star!

Mark

reply by djsaxon on 04-Dec-2020

Hey Mark. Banish your wife to the kitchen. Kidding. My daughter is my biggest critic. "Hey dad, the 'turn' on that last sonnet was total crap". She is always right. I'd still your wife in the kitchen. Cheers - DJ

reply by the author on 04-Dec-2020

Someone needs to keep you honest - your daughter is family; she can poke at you. LOL

reply by the author on 05-Dec-2020

DJ,

You and I are the same age and my Albany, NY home is almost 180 degrees from Albany in your neck of the woods, but not near ocean waters. . We are about 8 miles from the Hudson River, but we have myriad lakes in our nearby Adirondacks mountains region. So, I can became your ?cobber? now ?

Mark

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

5-7-5 (Jack Frost, the spy, writes)
Jack Frost Etches Secret Notes
by Mark D. R.

Hello, Mark,

The story behind your poem is very interesting, I would incorporate it to the poem as a haibun. I like your poem...it has great imagery.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020

Gypsy,

I too liked the imagery I penned for this. It was in preview for a few days and with no contest to enter, I posted it anyway. I am very pleased with the positive reviews received for the same.

Mark

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

Loving this frosty offering, dear Mark. Simply beautiful. Your art was well-chosen, and crowned your fine work so nicely. Sending you my best today as always and blessings for your day,
Sal XOs....

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020

Thanks Sally,

This was a good one, but I had not entered it in a contest.

Thanks, as always, for your support of my poems.

Mark

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

An ambient write as our world is magically painted with white overnight and melts in the sun during the day, you brought the scene to life with few words here Mark, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2020

Thanks Dolly for your love and review. For sure, our belief in Jack Frost is more vivid in our childhood. As adults, our imagination is not that whimsical when we see the frost on our windows.

Stay safe during this virus lockdown.

Mark

Mark

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Ah, Mark!
How I loved the stories of Jack Frost when I was a child!
And you have captured his essence beautifully!
Kudos!

Much enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020

Diane,

Jack and I thank you for those childhood memories when we believed in his etchings on our winter window panes. Now as adults, we often curse the ice on our car windows.

Thanks, as always, for your stars and review.

Mark

Mark

Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick

Excellent

Lovely 5-7-5 poem. I like your choice of words jack frost the spy writes messages nightly in white. Secrets fade with light. Well done. Awesome photo.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020

Thanks Joanne for all those nice compliments. Jack and I are most happy with the reviews received about his secret messaging service. (-;

Mark

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

I love the way you have expressed this. Have many fond memories of times in my childhood, when we would enjoy the pictures that frost painted on our windows. That was before the time of central heating, don't see much of it today.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020

Anne,

Yes we did scratch away the frost from our inside glass windows. Even with good heating and double paned windows, occasionally Jack Frost leaves his mark, especially in the morning when the shades or blinds have not been opened.

Pleased you enjoyed my 5-7-5. It is the style I choose to write in. Longer verses are not in my poetry wheelhouse.

Mark

Comment from royowen

Excellent

I can remember when those particular things were in existence, they were much fun, I can remember the white light, the invisible writing appeared as if by magic, well done, great post, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 02-Dec-2020

Roy,

Glad our memories are in sync. Thanks for your support for my poem-story.

Mark

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

This is a lovely piece, and yes, a reminder of the magic of invisible ink! The poem is well- written, and very lyrical. It conforms to the 5-7-5 style, and though short, leaves a memorable image.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020

Thanks Wendy for reinforcing our childhood memories. I appreciate your kind remarks and your stars too!

Mark

Comment from LeftHandedScribe

Excellent

There is a saying that the truth comes out in the dark. This poem has it all--so many glorious literary device gems and a delicious story in such a brief space. One of my faves.

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2020

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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2020

Thanks Shauna for your kind words about our childhood friend, who we really believe did that artwork and inscriptions on our windowpanes.

Mark