Escaping the straitjacket
Not quite a sonnet44 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
This I like. I laughed out loud. May I join in with your sentiments?
"Don't ape others, monkey around instead;
innovate on old themes, then you'll be read." I truly enjoyed reading this.
Ralf
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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This I like. I laughed out loud. May I join in with your sentiments?
"Don't ape others, monkey around instead;
innovate on old themes, then you'll be read." I truly enjoyed reading this.
Ralf
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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So glad you enjoyed the humour in this one, Ralf. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from country ranch writer
Finding ones self in a pickle that is hard to get one self out of don't monkey around wit the new generations version of things. To the
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Finding ones self in a pickle that is hard to get one self out of don't monkey around wit the new generations version of things. To the
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Very wise. One is sure to make a monkey of oneself trying to ape the new generation. I appreciate the sixth star. Most generous. All good wishes, Tony
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Comment from Irish Rain
Ha ha...I love it!!
I've been following the forum topic on sonnets.
I prefer the tried and true...no rap here.
This is a wonderful 'not-quite-a-sonnet'.
Great job!!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Ha ha...I love it!!
I've been following the forum topic on sonnets.
I prefer the tried and true...no rap here.
This is a wonderful 'not-quite-a-sonnet'.
Great job!!
Blessings...
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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So glad you enjoyed the humour in this one, Judy. Thank you so much for the sixth star.
I prefer the classic structure of the older sonnets, too. Rap leaves me cold, mainly because the words are rattled off so fast that I don't hear any of them. Maybe that's just as well. LOL
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Ha ha....it IS just as well!!! Loved this....wonderfully written!!
Comment from juliaSjames
Only an expert could convert the sonnet form into a rap. I got lost in the wordplay early on but the rhythm pulled me along and I made it through.
Innovation is natural. On the other hand, old habits die hard.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Only an expert could convert the sonnet form into a rap. I got lost in the wordplay early on but the rhythm pulled me along and I made it through.
Innovation is natural. On the other hand, old habits die hard.
Stay safe
Blessings Julia
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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I can assure you that my expertise is only an illusion! I sometimes strike lucky with a phrase or two - enough to keep me going. Rather like my golf! Anyway, very kind of you to say so.
By the way, I loved your Haiku that took out the first prize in the recent competition.
All good wishes, Tony
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Thanks for the kind words Tony. Keep on striking lucky with those phrases. :-))
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
A wonderful humorous poem, free of meter, simple rhyme,
perhaps it's a wonnet, a wannabe sonnet.
It looks like a sonnet, but looks can be deceiving,
like plastic, and fake news.
Maybe if you call it a fake sonnet, more will read it.
In the words of the immortal poet,
M C Hammer, "U can't touch this."
But for humor, a definite six.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Hello Tony,
A wonderful humorous poem, free of meter, simple rhyme,
perhaps it's a wonnet, a wannabe sonnet.
It looks like a sonnet, but looks can be deceiving,
like plastic, and fake news.
Maybe if you call it a fake sonnet, more will read it.
In the words of the immortal poet,
M C Hammer, "U can't touch this."
But for humor, a definite six.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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M C Hammer is a new experience for me. I'm right out of my depth.
Glad you enjoyed this fake sonnet from a wannabe sonneteer. I'm dazzled by the sixth star. My word, with encouragement like that, I'm tempted to write another one.
Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is inventive, is this a rapping sonnet then Tony? I think I prefer the original sonnet format but I still read your invention as you played with he meter and rhymes here, a fun post, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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This is inventive, is this a rapping sonnet then Tony? I think I prefer the original sonnet format but I still read your invention as you played with he meter and rhymes here, a fun post, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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I couldn't agree more. A traditional sonnet composed with skill is hard to beat. I don't see my 'rap' sonnet displacing it! LOL
Comment from Mistydawn
Your poem is well-written, makes a good point. If everyone stuck to the hard fast rules, we wouldn't have the large variety we do. New ideas would never be born. Romance wasn't really heard of until the 1900s, sci-fi in the 1920's and horror in the late 60's early seventies. They wouldn't have been introduced at all if writers didn't venture out.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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Your poem is well-written, makes a good point. If everyone stuck to the hard fast rules, we wouldn't have the large variety we do. New ideas would never be born. Romance wasn't really heard of until the 1900s, sci-fi in the 1920's and horror in the late 60's early seventies. They wouldn't have been introduced at all if writers didn't venture out.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2020
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A little experimentation never does any harm. Mind you, the result can be quite diabolical. I should probably take a leaf out of Edison's book and keep working on it.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Allow me the honor of being reviewer #15--thus, you shall be awarded recognition via a virtual blue ribbon. This is very punny--I appreciate your irreverence.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Allow me the honor of being reviewer #15--thus, you shall be awarded recognition via a virtual blue ribbon. This is very punny--I appreciate your irreverence.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thank you very much, Liz. I shall wear it with pride on my virtual straitjacket. Glad you enjoyed the humour. All good wishes, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
A sonnet it seems these days is whatever the poet says it is. Anything goes so when I run my sonnet class in January I had better tell them this:
This is a sonnet class and so
Anything you write is good to go
Fourteen lines an approximation
And they can be
As long
Or as short
As you wish
Iambic, doric or ionic
Archaic taximeters if you like
No matter if you are suffering from temptation
Or not. In this situation
This is a sonnet
Because I say it is.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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A sonnet it seems these days is whatever the poet says it is. Anything goes so when I run my sonnet class in January I had better tell them this:
This is a sonnet class and so
Anything you write is good to go
Fourteen lines an approximation
And they can be
As long
Or as short
As you wish
Iambic, doric or ionic
Archaic taximeters if you like
No matter if you are suffering from temptation
Or not. In this situation
This is a sonnet
Because I say it is.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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I think Robert summed mine up quite succinctly when he called it a fake sonnet. If it doesn't win the National Poetry Competition, I shall demand a recount.
Comment from roof35
I see truth in your words and some of it is hard to take. I hate rap but it seems to be hanging around so I guess someone likes it. This is a well written sonnet.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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I see truth in your words and some of it is hard to take. I hate rap but it seems to be hanging around so I guess someone likes it. This is a well written sonnet.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2020
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2020
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Thanks, Roof. I don't like rap, either, but that's mainly because it is so rapid that I can't differentiate the words. Mind you, that could be an advantage - or so I'm told.
