I Don't Want to Go There
a question of integrity33 total reviews
Comment from tfawcus
Maintenance of dignity and self-respect is vital in any process of healing. I'm sorry to hear that those who were entrusted with your care failed in such a basic way. It must have taken great resolve to rise above such circumstances. You have made a compelling poem expressing your feelings.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Maintenance of dignity and self-respect is vital in any process of healing. I'm sorry to hear that those who were entrusted with your care failed in such a basic way. It must have taken great resolve to rise above such circumstances. You have made a compelling poem expressing your feelings.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Hello Tony.
I appreciate your concern and understanding of the vital need to be treated with respect while recuperating from surgery. It has taken me quite a while to sort out how to rise above such treatment, and writing and posting this poem helped me considerably in that regard. I am honored by your kind review. Have a great week.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from rspoet
Hello Jesse,
One must always stay true to what their heart and gut tell them and take care of their own genuine needs.
The indignity others can inflict, especially in hospital or nursing homes, is something that should not be tolerated. Alas the world we live in needs much improvement.
I like that you created a word, when there did not exist one to express the true way you felt. I often create my own words too.
Sorry I'm late with the review, my computer crashed and I had to get a new one, then get it up and running.
Poetry is about emotion, and you'd put it into words very well.
Love that picture of nature.
Best wishes to you, my friend. Stay safe.
Robert
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Hello Jesse,
One must always stay true to what their heart and gut tell them and take care of their own genuine needs.
The indignity others can inflict, especially in hospital or nursing homes, is something that should not be tolerated. Alas the world we live in needs much improvement.
I like that you created a word, when there did not exist one to express the true way you felt. I often create my own words too.
Sorry I'm late with the review, my computer crashed and I had to get a new one, then get it up and running.
Poetry is about emotion, and you'd put it into words very well.
Love that picture of nature.
Best wishes to you, my friend. Stay safe.
Robert
Comment Written 25-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Hello Robert. I am honored by your kind words and agree that the indignity of the way I was treated should not be allowed to continue unexamined. I always place high value on your reviews and views on poetry. That you like and accept my creation of a word to help define how I feel means a lot to me. I am glad you loved my nature image accompanying the poem.
Take care my friend,
Jesse
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, yeah - you go right on and shout that from the mountaintop, Jesse!! ;) Great free verse, Jesse - thanx for letting us hear you out here!! ;) :) Yvette
scweltered --> perhaps a typo... ?
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Oh, yeah - you go right on and shout that from the mountaintop, Jesse!! ;) Great free verse, Jesse - thanx for letting us hear you out here!! ;) :) Yvette
scweltered --> perhaps a typo... ?
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Hi Yvette. Thanks for the positive encouragement. I shall do that and more. I am sticking up for me and it feels great. Empowering, too! Scweltered is not a typo but rather an invented word to help express my feelings of oppression. I clarify that in my author's notes below the poem. Thanks for a super review and excellent rating. Have a good upcoming weekend, my friend!
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from giovannimariatommaso
I read this a few times and each time I read it I felt I could relate with you in the demeaning situation of non-acceptance of the truth of what is our reality as human beings. There are so many esoteric and existentialist views that it is useless to attempt to keep up with them, bogus non-sense!
By the way "poetic license" is permissible and the explanation is valid! Feelings truly cannot be expressed in words individually, only collectively as agreed upon. giovanni
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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I read this a few times and each time I read it I felt I could relate with you in the demeaning situation of non-acceptance of the truth of what is our reality as human beings. There are so many esoteric and existentialist views that it is useless to attempt to keep up with them, bogus non-sense!
By the way "poetic license" is permissible and the explanation is valid! Feelings truly cannot be expressed in words individually, only collectively as agreed upon. giovanni
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Wow. Thank you so much for this high honor of an exceptional rating! Your careful consideration of what I had to say means the world to me. I am glad this resonated with you, and am happy to see I have been understood. I appreciate the thoughtful review. Have a wonderful week.
Take care,
Jesse
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y/w giovanni
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I loved your review.
Jesse
Comment from Bill Schott
I hope you are working towards capturing your stay as a essay collection. Spitfire wrote about her and her husband's travels through the senior citizen living facilities which was very eye-opening.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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I hope you are working towards capturing your stay as a essay collection. Spitfire wrote about her and her husband's travels through the senior citizen living facilities which was very eye-opening.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Thank you, Bill, for the idea and encouragement. I am working on such a project now. I feel the need to let people know what goes on in these nursing homes and how they impacted me. I was there for three months and they had me thinking that I needed to stay there and couldn't live on my own. I have and am, proving them wrong. It is empowering. Thank you for this supportive review and excellent rating. Have a great upcoming weekend.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are clear, sad, descriptive and creative. I found the words of this poem expressing deep emotions. Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes! The poem flows and connects well. I also
like the title of this poem - it compliments the theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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The author's words are clear, sad, descriptive and creative. I found the words of this poem expressing deep emotions. Thank you for the author's notes - they speak volumes! The poem flows and connects well. I also
like the title of this poem - it compliments the theme of this poem.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your kind words. I am glad you like the title and flow of the poem. I feel good about them as well. Thank you for this supportive and encouraging review and excellent rating. Have a good upcoming weekend.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from Susan Louise Gabriel
Wow, Jesse, this is a powerful poem, and so true! Every time I've been in the hospital (I've had 18 surgeries), I've also felt the indignity of it all. And when I was a teen, I worked in nursing homes where people were often treated like burdens to bear by the staff who worked there. It was sad, and I couldn't work there for long.
I like the way your free verse flows from one line to the next without the need for a period or comma at the end of a line. It fits well with the well-justified "rant" and the message.
Well done!
Sue
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Wow, Jesse, this is a powerful poem, and so true! Every time I've been in the hospital (I've had 18 surgeries), I've also felt the indignity of it all. And when I was a teen, I worked in nursing homes where people were often treated like burdens to bear by the staff who worked there. It was sad, and I couldn't work there for long.
I like the way your free verse flows from one line to the next without the need for a period or comma at the end of a line. It fits well with the well-justified "rant" and the message.
Well done!
Sue
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Hello Sue. Thank you so much for this insightful and informative review. I appreciate your kind words and personal revelations of the idea that folks are treated like burdens with indignity suffered as a result. Thank you for sharing your story. Thank you also, for your positive and encouraging comments about the poetics of this piece.
Take care,
Jesse
Comment from lancellot
I understand this is considered free verse poetry, but with what you have it is not enough context. It is a statement but for those not hospitalized or in a nursing home we cannot understand what is going on or how this is empowering.
More context needed.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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I understand this is considered free verse poetry, but with what you have it is not enough context. It is a statement but for those not hospitalized or in a nursing home we cannot understand what is going on or how this is empowering.
More context needed.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2020
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When I don't have anything to say that is positive about a post, I pass on it. It might behoove you to do the same.
Jesse
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Then, how do you help others improve? If some honest people in 2006 when I started did not give me their honest opinions of what I was lacking or did wrong, I would never have learned a thing. That is true on FS, school, work and life.
But, I understand that some people come here for praise, or therapy and not to improve in their art. If that is you, I have no issue with you blocking me, so I will not accidently give you my honest opinion meant to help.
Lance.
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If you take the time to read how to give reviews, you will find that you are supposed to say what you like about the post and then make suggestions on how to improve the piece. It should be a combination of both, not just saying what you think is "wrong." Inquire with others about the tactful way to offer help.
Jesse
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Look, you are close to the line, if not over it, with a rule violation to responding to reviews. I have stated my intention as plainly and fairly as possible. If you still cannot accept my OPINION to a post, YOU put out for opinion reviews, voluntarily. Then it should be pretty clear, that you only want blind praise. FINE!!! then either block me, or label your post with a sub-heading that you only want praise, five star reviews, or Tell the reviewers exactly how you want to be reviewed, and in what form you will accept. Clearly, you want it your way.
Now, Block me, or ask Tom if I violated the rules of Reviewing. But, after all my years I know what he will tell you. I think you know too.
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I stand by what I said. I have not violated any rules.
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Dude, it was only one review on FanStory. Doesn't your obsession over it, tell you anything?
Fine, allow me to demonstrate how the Mute function works.
Comment from robyn corum
JJ,
Well, that's kinda sad. --frowny face--
Though I have to admit, I didn't get a full picture of what was going on for you. More details (and maybe more SPECIFIC details) would help your readers tremendously.
Also, you might consider increasing the font a bit?
I do completely understand that when we are suffering in some way - physically or mentally or emotionally, WE are the ones burdened with making sure we get the treatment and help we need and deserve. No one else will care about our well-being as much as we do ourselves. It's a sad fact that we learn as we age. --sigh--
As for your unique word - it made sense to me. *smile* It seemed like a mash-up of 'squashed' and 'sheltered' and hints at some of the problems you may have had.
It's good to see you again. Thanks!
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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JJ,
Well, that's kinda sad. --frowny face--
Though I have to admit, I didn't get a full picture of what was going on for you. More details (and maybe more SPECIFIC details) would help your readers tremendously.
Also, you might consider increasing the font a bit?
I do completely understand that when we are suffering in some way - physically or mentally or emotionally, WE are the ones burdened with making sure we get the treatment and help we need and deserve. No one else will care about our well-being as much as we do ourselves. It's a sad fact that we learn as we age. --sigh--
As for your unique word - it made sense to me. *smile* It seemed like a mash-up of 'squashed' and 'sheltered' and hints at some of the problems you may have had.
It's good to see you again. Thanks!
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2020
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Thank you for your commentary and suggestions. Have a nice upcoming weekend.
Jesse
Comment from Alena Carver
I love this poem! The rhyming is great, and so is the message. I agree that elderly and disabled care is being neglected, and love how you mentioned how they make people feel bad for just having basic needs.
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I love this poem! The rhyming is great, and so is the message. I agree that elderly and disabled care is being neglected, and love how you mentioned how they make people feel bad for just having basic needs.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
