Along the Jericho Road
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "A Hota Moon, Part 2 "Murder Mystery
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Comment from Maureen's Pen
Probably not a good thing to start off with "Oh Lord" as I started reading.
You grabbed hold of me again and I couldn't stop reading, knowing I'm a sap for scary stuff that says a whole lot about your skill as a writing.
This was well penned and flowed smoothly. Nothing popped up needing anything, it was brilliant as is.
The ending section was an excellent touch getting to know the killer and his life a bit with his mother's dependency on him. The rosary was the perfect touch. I wasn't lost to the fact that he said he was adding to her collection of rosary's.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Probably not a good thing to start off with "Oh Lord" as I started reading.
You grabbed hold of me again and I couldn't stop reading, knowing I'm a sap for scary stuff that says a whole lot about your skill as a writing.
This was well penned and flowed smoothly. Nothing popped up needing anything, it was brilliant as is.
The ending section was an excellent touch getting to know the killer and his life a bit with his mother's dependency on him. The rosary was the perfect touch. I wasn't lost to the fact that he said he was adding to her collection of rosary's.
Thanks for sharing.
Maureen
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Hi, Maureen. I so appreciate your marvelous review. Your support is always very heart-warming, my friend, and I'm glad you liked the chapter! Love and hugs, Bev
Comment from TammyGail
Writingfundimension this was wow.. one hell of a chapter
you pulled me in and kept my full att throughout the read
your closing lines were compelling and like bait to the reader insuring a return for the next :) Thanks for sharing you hooked me I'll be back for more
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Writingfundimension this was wow.. one hell of a chapter
you pulled me in and kept my full att throughout the read
your closing lines were compelling and like bait to the reader insuring a return for the next :) Thanks for sharing you hooked me I'll be back for more
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Hi, Tammy. Thank you for reading my chapter and sending along your fab review! I so appreciate your support and interest. Glad you liked it. Warm regards, Bev
Comment from FlorrieFan
This is very good. You provide just enough details to make me feel I am there at the scene. The sherrif is a believable character. As the chapter continues, my questions mount. Especially what was on the wall of the bedroom? Yes, I am eager to read more.
I liked the detail about the posole which helped locate the story for me geographically.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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This is very good. You provide just enough details to make me feel I am there at the scene. The sherrif is a believable character. As the chapter continues, my questions mount. Especially what was on the wall of the bedroom? Yes, I am eager to read more.
I liked the detail about the posole which helped locate the story for me geographically.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Thank you so much, FlorrieFan. It's really nice to hear from you. Father Brian spent a number of years in the Southwest, though my story is currently set in Minnesotta. There's going to be more of those kinds of things showing up in the future, so I hope you'll stop by again! Kind regards, Bev
Comment from tinams
I really enjoyed this post. It has a great plot and story line. Your vocaublay is very natural and believable and flows well. A very enjoyable read :) Tina
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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I really enjoyed this post. It has a great plot and story line. Your vocaublay is very natural and believable and flows well. A very enjoyable read :) Tina
Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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I really appreciate your supportive and generous review, Tina. Thanks so much for reading! Warmest regards, Bev
Comment from c_lucas
You are off on a good start with your personna of a killer. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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You are off on a good start with your personna of a killer. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Kinda scary when the most fun part of a write is the time you spend inside a killer's head. As always, charlie, thanks for your time and support. I appreciate it. Bev
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Beware that your creativity does not make your negative energy your reality. As you think, so you are. This is very well written.
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Well said, charlie.
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Well said, charlie.
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Well said, charlie.
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You're welcome Bev. Charlie.
Comment from October21
Great storyline and plot
Excellent vocabulary
Good structure and layout
Correct grammar and punctuation
Well done, I enjoyed it!
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reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Great storyline and plot
Excellent vocabulary
Good structure and layout
Correct grammar and punctuation
Well done, I enjoyed it!
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2012
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2012
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Thanks so much, October 21. I appreciate you taking time to read and review this rather long chapter. Thanks for the generosity! Warmest regards, Bev
