Hey, Mommy!
100-Word Story30 total reviews
Comment from victor 66
Besides this being a story told with only one hundred words, it could actually be an interesting endeavor as a children's book. That being said, it's also a lesson in expecting the unexpected. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Besides this being a story told with only one hundred words, it could actually be an interesting endeavor as a children's book. That being said, it's also a lesson in expecting the unexpected. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind review and comments for my story, Victor.
I appreciate your time to read, and I'm pleased by your encouraging feedback.
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You are most welcome, Indianairish.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Ohhh . . Yuck! Bless the little kid's heart. He was convinced he was
doing Mommy a big favor. in real life, the Mom would probably spend
a long time gargling, etc.--and possibly vomiting.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Ohhh . . Yuck! Bless the little kid's heart. He was convinced he was
doing Mommy a big favor. in real life, the Mom would probably spend
a long time gargling, etc.--and possibly vomiting.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind review and comments for my story, Janice.
I appreciate your time to read and for your response.
Comment from Ulla
Oh dear, that was not quite the idea was it? I loved this little flash where you indeed had a surprise ending. I was really waiting to see: where is this going and boom! Good luck. Ulla:)))
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Oh dear, that was not quite the idea was it? I loved this little flash where you indeed had a surprise ending. I was really waiting to see: where is this going and boom! Good luck. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind review and comments for my story, Ulla.
I appreciate your time to read and for your thoughtful response.
Comment from Bill Schott
This one-hundred-word story, Hey Mommy, meets the word requirement and presents a great example of news that would have been much more useful only moments prior. Good ole Timmy.
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This one-hundred-word story, Hey Mommy, meets the word requirement and presents a great example of news that would have been much more useful only moments prior. Good ole Timmy.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind review and comments for my story, Bill
I appreciate your time to read, and I'm pleased y your thoughtful response.
Comment from write hand blue
Hi mystery writer. The tale of using a toothbrush to clean a toilet with is amusing and only a child could do that. It sounds like this could have happened.
A nice picture depicts a few sample germs. Well displayed in bold script and easy to read. Good luck. ~Mel~
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Hi mystery writer. The tale of using a toothbrush to clean a toilet with is amusing and only a child could do that. It sounds like this could have happened.
A nice picture depicts a few sample germs. Well displayed in bold script and easy to read. Good luck. ~Mel~
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you very much for your kind review and comments for my story, Mel.
I appreciate your time to read and I'm delighted you found it a funny story.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Yuk! That kid needs a lesson in where the germs are in the house. Actually, they're everywhere, including toothbrushes, but some germs are nastier than others. No one wants toilet germs to get close to them... ever. :)
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Yuk! That kid needs a lesson in where the germs are in the house. Actually, they're everywhere, including toothbrushes, but some germs are nastier than others. No one wants toilet germs to get close to them... ever. :)
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thanks for your kind review and taking the time to read and share your comments for this story, Phyllis. I appreciate your feedback.
Comment from tfawcus
Well, that was certainly a surprise ending! Not what you want to hear just after you've finished cleaning the pearly whites! You build up to the little boy's words rather well with your graphic description of the germs.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Well, that was certainly a surprise ending! Not what you want to hear just after you've finished cleaning the pearly whites! You build up to the little boy's words rather well with your graphic description of the germs.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Tony, for your kind review and encouraging comments for my little story. I always appreciate your feedback and I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. Thank you.
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
YIKES...What a great little story of icky, sick-y, and gross. Yet, the little ending offers a terribly humorous twist with cute dialogue. You did a great job in writing a 100-word story. I wish you lots of luck in the contest.
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YIKES...What a great little story of icky, sick-y, and gross. Yet, the little ending offers a terribly humorous twist with cute dialogue. You did a great job in writing a 100-word story. I wish you lots of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thanks for this great review, Cindy. I'm delighted you enjoyed the little twist ending, and I appreciate your encouraging comments. Thanks, too, for your good luck wishes in the contest.
Comment from Carola Fernandez
This is a very cute, funny and clever entry. I hope it is fiction; therefore, it did not happen to you. Nice way to tell the story; it keeps the reader interested in what comes next. Great picture. Best of luck with your writing piece!
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This is a very cute, funny and clever entry. I hope it is fiction; therefore, it did not happen to you. Nice way to tell the story; it keeps the reader interested in what comes next. Great picture. Best of luck with your writing piece!
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Carola, thank you so much for your great review and for taking the time to read and share your kind comments. Yes, this is a fiction story, but I do have some doozies of true stories. LOL
Thanks!
Comment from royowen
This is hilarious, a brilliant entry in in this hundred word flash fiction, it's been a long tome since I've sen one this funny, brilliant my friend. Well done, good luck, Blessings,
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reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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This is hilarious, a brilliant entry in in this hundred word flash fiction, it's been a long tome since I've sen one this funny, brilliant my friend. Well done, good luck, Blessings,
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Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Oh, Roy, thank you so very much for this encouraging review and your great comments for my story. Your saying this is funny is the best compliment you could give the story. Thank you for your good luck contest wish, too.
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Well done
