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Football - A Novel

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A mother faces life's struggles.

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Comment from judiverse
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It looks like someone's keeping track of Katherine and Gabe's movements. She needs to be careful, and tell her to let him let his own coffee. She's finding herself faced with a lot of challenges, such as the time it will consume of she undertakes coaching track. And she has quite a few girls who are interested. Funny scene when Katherine enters the men's locker room and finds Gabe with the towel draped around him. Good work with it.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Barbara. I liked this chapter a lot. I was quite amused how embarrassed poor Katherine was seeing Gabriel just dressed in a towel.
Now, but that's is a by de by and has nothing to do with the written work. If Gabriel looks anything like the man in the picture I would run a mile and never look back. I like my men well toned, but not pumped up by steroids. Whack! I'm sorry that photo turns me off completely.
Otherwise, I'm looking forward to what's next. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
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Phew! That was close! Hope Frosty wasn't spying someplace? I forgot he is not part of the school anymore. Another great chapter and as usual great reading and NO SPAGS!

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Sankey on 28-Mar-2021
    Dunno where Ulla is today she is usually posted before yours.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    I am sure she will be here.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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That picture certainly caught my attention, if that's what Katherine saw, and that's how Gabe looks, I'm giving up writing and going into teaching!! LOL. The numbers for the cross-country runners are coming together, I'm sure she'll need help ... now I wonder who will be available!!!!!!? Nice one, Barbara, I'm still worried at the dog's growls. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    The dog growls should worry you. LOL Yes, Katherine is shook up. I am wondering how she will handle it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from eliz100
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There is one sentence that is a little bumpy. It starts with "Dad announces the games. Otherwise you moved your story along. I continue to enjoy your use of space and font choice.



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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    I will recheck that sentence. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
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If that photo is accurate, I can understand her being flustered. I am a straight man, but I do know how the sight of a healthy buff man can affect a woman who has been separated or divorced from her husband might be affected by close proximity to a man that she is already growing close to. Let's just say that things might get a little challenging.

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 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    His image does shake Katherine up, quite a bit. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
reply by nomi338 on 29-Mar-2021
    Oh well. I guess that is just life. I can only imagine how I would feel if I came upon a scantily clad attractive woman by surprise.
Comment from Ben Colder
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The shower bit should start the ball rolling in another direction. I saw the photo and thought of one of my boys. He was into the weight lifting and looked something like this.
Good one Barb.
I have been watching the girls soft-ball, thank God they are playing after all this world scare.

 Comment Written 28-Mar-2021


reply by the author on 28-Mar-2021
    I do understand. My boys were hunks too. They played all sports and worked out daily, still do as adults. Thank you for the kind review.