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tanka contest entry
tanka (rose petals) by Val Crisson
Tanka Poetry Contest contest entry

rose petals
drop to hospital floor
detached
old man's life ticks away
his soul reaches for heaven

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Author Notes
I have chosen to use a more traditional Japanese approach to this tanka, and have gone short/long/short/long/long. I have used 25 syllables, which is appropriate as long as I follow the short/long/short/long/long rule. I thank all of those that take the time to read this.

     

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