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Octaves with an Envoi
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: My Brother's Backyard by Treischel



The pool says "Peace", in my brother's backyard.
We gather here as friends to celebrate.
The table with anniversary cards
Is filled with words the two appreciate.
Of course you'll find there's lots of luscious food,
Enough around to feed a hungry brood.
Libations freely flow to set the mood,
In my brother's backyard.

This place he has reminds me of a park,
Where open spaces blend with quiet nooks.
There's areas where dogs can play and bark,
And vegetation everywhere one looks,
To fill the eyes with multicolored sights.
Around the ponds and trees are hanging lights
That set the scene amongst the yard's delights,
In my brother's backyard.

The water freely flows in two small ponds.
A bridge exquisitely crosses the span.
A lily pond with waterfalls responds
Esthetically, like gardens in Japan,
With terra-cotta water-spewing fish -
A most relaxing place to make a wish.
Those are among the many things to cherish
In my brother's backyard.

A lovely place that excites and delights me.


Author Notes
This is one of two ponds that my brother, Richard, has in his backyard. He owns several acres in Andover, Minnesota, which is a northern suburb of Minneapolis. He and his wife, Corrine, just celebrated their 40th Wedding Anniversary with a party in his backyard. He did all the landscaping himself. I like it out there.

I wrote this poem in Octaves (8 lines), having a refrain taken from part of the first line, and closed it with a one line Envoi. It is written in iambic pentameter, with a couple feminine lines. The entire rhyme scheme is:

ababcccR cdcdfffR ghghiiiR.

You'll notice my favorite set of triple rhymes.

This photograph was taken by the author himself on July 11, 2015.

     

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