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A (modified) Shakespearean sonnet of cursed enchantment
Silver Threads by visionary1234
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The wind blew fair the day we set to sea
to seek out lands of mystery and gold.
No thought, just then, for our mortality -
fresh-sworn were we, so close, to have and hold
 
forever.  I did swear that you and I
could fly to scorching glory of the sun.
And as the willing winds whipped through the sky
my silver thread of bliss with magic spun.
 
But with the captain’s daughter you did lie,
betraying all sweet promises to me.
I cast my thread of silver to the sky
and wailed, as chains of lightning set me free.
 
I bind you now, by cursed silver thread,
to lie with me, in ocean’s blackest bed.
 

 

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Author Notes
Please pronounce 'cursed' as two syllables
Note also, that 'enjambment' (run on lines) are permissible, even desirable, between verses, as well as just between lines within a verse.

Shakespearean sonnet - from Poetry Dances:
A traditional sonnet is a poem of 14 lines. It follows a strict rhyme scheme. It is often about love.
A Shakespearean, or English, sonnet consists of 14 lines, each line containing ten syllables and written in iambic pentameter, in which a pattern of an unstressed syllable followed by a stressed syllable is repeated five times. The rhyme scheme in a Shakespearean sonnet is a-b-a-b, c-d-c-d, e-f-e-f, g-g; the last two lines are a rhyming couplet. I have chosen a slight variation on that rhyme scheme: a-b-a-b, c-d-c-d, then c-a-c-a, e-e.


















Every A rhymes with every A, every B rhymes with every B, and so forth. This type of sonnet has of three quatrains (so, four consecutive lines of verse that make up a stanza) and one couplet (two consecutive rhyming lines of verse). The structure is important. But it is not everything. A sonnet is also an argument that builds up a certain way. And how it builds up is related to its metaphors and how it moves from one metaphor to the next. In a Shakespearean sonnet, the argument builds up like this:

First quatrain: An exposition of the main theme and main metaphor.
Second quatrain: Theme and metaphor extended or complicated; often, some imaginative example is given.
Third quatrain: Peripeteia (a twist or conflict), often introduced by a "but" (very often leading off the ninth line).
Couplet: Summarizes and leaves the reader with a new, concluding image

     

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