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Dandizette

A chapter in the book Little Poems

Ice Lions

by Treischel

The frozen lions of the ice,
asleep in Winter's chill,
dream of tropical paradise
while sitting on this frigid hill.
What caused them to be here?
A magic touch of wizard's will?

Their genesis is far from clear.
Unknown, the cause remaining still.
The consequence of doom, I fear.
Their tomb -- the ice, upon this shore.
Don't deign to draw too near,
caught in its spell forevermore.

Asleep in Winter's chill,
What caused them to be here?
Unkown, the cause remaining still.
Don't deign to draw too near.
For the wisp of the wind is death,
and the ice may draw your last breath.




This image captured my imagination, as I see at least 3 lions in it. I hope that you do too. I gave it a sinister interpretation. The poem will become part of my Animated Still collections, which I hope to publish later this year.

This poem is a Dandizette.
The format was sponsored by the FanStory Potlatch Poetry Club this week. So I thought I'd try one.
Dandizette form created by Discoveria of Allpoetry.com is composed of
3 six line stanzas. The form is partially inspired by the villanelle and
features a tricky repetition of 4 refrain lines in the final stanza.

The form is syllabic with asyllable count for the first two stanzas is:
8/6/8/8/6/8.
The last stanza has lines of:
6/6/6/6/8/8 syllables.
The rhyme scheme is:
a,B1,a,b,C1,b, - c,B2,c,d,C2,d - B1,C1,B2,C2,e,e. (The capital letters designate the repeated lines, while the numbers differentiate them from where they were originally located)
The final stanza is composed of lines 2 (B1), 5 (C1), 8 (B2), and 11 (C2) from the previous two stanzas, plus a concluding rhyming couplet. Where they reappear
in the last stanza, the four repeated lines should
make sense together as well as making sense where they
are first used.
Meter is optional.

This photograph was taken by the author himself on March 2, 2013.



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