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Heartbreak - Burns Stanza potlatch practice

A chapter in the book 36. Heartbreak

Life's unfair

by Sandra du Plessis

No food on table brings distress
the medic aid's without access
my life became an awful mess
beyond repair,
the struggle's hard I must confess
it seems unfair.

My car is grounded there's no gas
another option, ride an ass
he only needs to eat some grass
my mind's on seethe
my troubles, I hope will soon pass
give time to breathe.


Poetry Potlatch practice - Burns Stanza

I am usually a positive person, but some hardship over last weekend, made me write down my sorrows, and I processed it into the format of the Burns Stanza.

Seethe - to be agitated

Burns Stanza or Standard Habbie

This week we will look at the Burns Stanza. This is named after Scotland's national poet Robert Burns (1759-1796). The form already existed before he made it his own; its old name was standard Habbie, after Habbie Simpson (1550-1620), the Piper of Kilbarchan, its earliest known exponent. This form is also sometimes known as the Scottish stanza or the six-line stave. Stanzas have 6 lines rhyming aaabab, the a lines are written in iambic tetrameter having four feet of two syllables each and the b lines are written in iambic dimeter with two feet of two syllables each, but see the notes below each poem re. feminine rhyme. In this form the first three lines rhyme and the fifth. The fourth and sixth lines become the second rhyming pair. The pattern with upper case letters denoting stressed syllables is thus....

x X x X x X x A
x X x X x X x A
x X x X x X x A
x X x B
x X x X x X x A
x X x B

The Fire Brigade
by Bob Newman

Their uniforms are so divine,
A shiver tingles up my spine!
I swear I never saw so fine
A band of men.
Their mission: let nothing combine
With oxygen.

My heroes! For although each knows
The perils, through the fire he goes
Armed only with a rubber hose
With which he aims
His stream at all the reddest glows
To douse the flames.

Such gallantry! And yet he spurns
The prize his courage surely earns.
My ardour for his brave heart burns
And won't extinguish.
I serenade him �???�??�?�¡ la Burns
(Although in English).

This follows the description above closely except in the final stanza lines 4 and 6 which have feminine endings, an extra, unstressed syllable on the end of the line. This is not shown in the schemata. To a Mouse on Turning up her Nest With a Plough.
by Robert Burns

Wee sleekit, cow'rin, tim'rous beastie,
O, what a panic's in thy breastie!
Thou need na start awa sae hasty,
Wi bick'ring brattle!
I wad be laith to rin an chase thee,
Wi murd?ring pattle!

I'm truly sorry man's dominion
Has broken Nature's social union,
An justifies that ill opinion,
Which makes thee startle
At me, thy poor, earth-born companion.
An fellow mortal!

This is Burns' famous poem in which every line has a feminine ending.

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