General Poetry posted October 1, 2017

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A pure and simple love!

Pavane for a Grandchild

by Analie Shepherd

There’s a bird on the wing,
there’s a bird in the nest;
the wind, it is silenced
and gone off to rest.
A little red fox
  ‘neath shimmering sky -
a soft spotted fawn
is wandering by.
Take my hand gently -
I will lead you just so;
we shall waltz through the stars,
 paint meadows below.
O’er the oceans we’ll sail,
and skip the blue seas; 
we’ll sweep the wide desert
and sing with the trees.
Forever, I’ll hold you
and sing you to sleep;
I’ll kiss your sweet face
and give you all these.
We'll listen as raindrops
wash the air clean 
and touch the light softly,
wrapped up in a dream.
Through the night, gently,
the hours creeping on -
a vigil I'm keeping,
till soft comes the dawn.
I will tie up my love
with ribbons of blue,
as day dances in,
I will give it to you.
For I love you, forever
and ever, I do.
My dear one, my sweet one,
I’ll always love you.


I would love some honest critique of this poem. I have tried to write something fanciful and whimsical. I want it to reflect the very special relationship of a grandparent and grandchild ... please help!
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