General Poetry posted June 7, 2017 |
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by Dean Kuch, Hitcher, and Gypsy Blue Rose
Renga (Barren tree limbs break)
by Gypsy Blue Rose
![]() barren tree limbs break as brutal, bitter winds blow- lightning cracks the sky the heart breaks as heaven does tears and rain run down her face the warrior's will begins its brutal battle— to kill or be killed treachery has terrorized and taken too many lives soul samurai senses harvest moon-- her fury rises, blackening the Autumn sky— her torrents of rage unleashed as larch leaves let go cherished dreams wither and die-- honor arms vengeance her wedding white kimono at the bottom of Green Lake skeletal trees moan mimicking painful whispers of a broken heart she walks slowly from his grave her naginata burning at dawn she leaves home memories of laughter linger behind slowly the sun sinks, silent— matching Jubei's morose mood. |
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Collaborative renga composed by Hitcher, Dean Kuch, and Gyspy Blue Rose.
kimono=dress
naginata=weapon
Jubei=our protagonist a woman samurai
Renga is an ancient Japanese poetic form of link verses. There are many different types of Renga, some go on up to 100 verses, ours will go up to 36. We broke up the poem in three parts of 12 verses each so it won't be so long. The scheme is 5/7/5 by one poet and 7/7 by another. Ours follows a very specific pattern that I included below.
Renga is pre-haiku. The first verse was called hokku and in the 17th century it became haiku.
The art of renga is in the shifting from verse to verse.
Dean, Hitcher and I don't know what we will be writing next so the poem evolves as we go. It's an exciting project. We are all very thankful that you took the time to read it.
Thank you,
Gypsy
Barren tree limbs break
as brutal, bitter winds blow-
lightning cracks the sky
by Hitcher
the heart breaks as heaven does
tears and rain run down her face
by Gypsy Blue Rose
the warrior's will
begins its brutal battle
to kill or be killed
by Dean Kuch
treachery has terrorized
and taken too many lives
by Hitcher
soul samurai
senses harvest moon--
her fury rises,
by Gypsy Blue Rose
blackening the Autumn
her torrents of rage unleashed
by Dean Kuch
as larch leaves let go
cherished dreams wither and die--
honor arms vengeance
by Hitcher
her wedding white kimono
At the bottom of Green Lake
By Gypsy Blue Rose
Skeletal trees moan
mimicking painful whispers
of a broken heart
by Dean Kuch
She walks slowly from his grave
her naginata burning
by Hitcher
At dawn she leaves home
memories of laughter
linger behind
by Gypsy Blue Rose
slowly the sun sinks, silent
matching Jubei's morose mood.
By Dean Kuch
Renga pattern
1. [3 lines] winter - Hitcher
2. [2] winter - Gypsy
3. [3] non-seasonal should end with a verb - Dean
4. [2] non-seasonal -Hitcher
5. [3] MOON / autumn - Gypsy
6.[2] autumn - Dean
7. [3] autumn -Hitcher
8. [2] non-seasonal / love - Gypsy
9. [3] non-seasonal / love - Dean
10. [2] non-seasonal / love -Hitcher
11. [3] non-seasonal - Gypsy
12. [2] non-seasonal - Dean
Pays
one point
and 2 member cents. kimono=dress
naginata=weapon
Jubei=our protagonist a woman samurai
Renga is an ancient Japanese poetic form of link verses. There are many different types of Renga, some go on up to 100 verses, ours will go up to 36. We broke up the poem in three parts of 12 verses each so it won't be so long. The scheme is 5/7/5 by one poet and 7/7 by another. Ours follows a very specific pattern that I included below.
Renga is pre-haiku. The first verse was called hokku and in the 17th century it became haiku.
The art of renga is in the shifting from verse to verse.
Dean, Hitcher and I don't know what we will be writing next so the poem evolves as we go. It's an exciting project. We are all very thankful that you took the time to read it.
Thank you,
Gypsy
Barren tree limbs break
as brutal, bitter winds blow-
lightning cracks the sky
by Hitcher
the heart breaks as heaven does
tears and rain run down her face
by Gypsy Blue Rose
the warrior's will
begins its brutal battle
to kill or be killed
by Dean Kuch
treachery has terrorized
and taken too many lives
by Hitcher
soul samurai
senses harvest moon--
her fury rises,
by Gypsy Blue Rose
blackening the Autumn
her torrents of rage unleashed
by Dean Kuch
as larch leaves let go
cherished dreams wither and die--
honor arms vengeance
by Hitcher
her wedding white kimono
At the bottom of Green Lake
By Gypsy Blue Rose
Skeletal trees moan
mimicking painful whispers
of a broken heart
by Dean Kuch
She walks slowly from his grave
her naginata burning
by Hitcher
At dawn she leaves home
memories of laughter
linger behind
by Gypsy Blue Rose
slowly the sun sinks, silent
matching Jubei's morose mood.
By Dean Kuch
Renga pattern
1. [3 lines] winter - Hitcher
2. [2] winter - Gypsy
3. [3] non-seasonal should end with a verb - Dean
4. [2] non-seasonal -Hitcher
5. [3] MOON / autumn - Gypsy
6.[2] autumn - Dean
7. [3] autumn -Hitcher
8. [2] non-seasonal / love - Gypsy
9. [3] non-seasonal / love - Dean
10. [2] non-seasonal / love -Hitcher
11. [3] non-seasonal - Gypsy
12. [2] non-seasonal - Dean





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