General Poetry posted February 6, 2017

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The Very Best Star in History ...

by Mark Valentine

NARRATOR:  Twinkle twinkle little star,
                       Tell us all how yuuuge you are.
                       Tell us how you’re all the rage
                       Up on your celestial stage.
                       Tell us you’re the best by far,
                       You amazing orange star!
MAE:            Lookie, Merle – way up thar!
                     Ain’t that one fantastic star?
MERLE:        I don’t know Mae, I don’t see it.
                     Looks like a plain star to me, it
                     Seems to me a bit bizarre
                     To set great store by such a star.
MAE:           Oh Merle, what a fool you are,
                    Can’t you see that that’s OUR star?
                    Can’t you see, you blunderbuss
                    That he’s the star for folks like US?
                    Our kind come from near and far
                    To worship Him, our avatar.
MERLE:      You’re taking it a bit too far
                   To make of him some stellar czar.
                   He is, at base, a lot of gas
                   Who’ll fuse and fuss, and then will pass.
                   And just in case my brain’s subpar,
                   Please explain who “our kind” are.
MAE:         If all the presets in your car
                  Were not tuned in to NPR,
                  You might fin’ly get a clue,
                  And look at things the way I do.
                  I’ll proudly fly the stars and bars,
                  And hitch my wagon to this star.
MERLE:     Seems to me this simple star
                  Has not much in his repertoire.
                 “The sky is dark, I’ll make it light
                  Because I’m very, very bright”.
                  As logic goes this guy’s on par
                  With folks who drink lunch from a jar.
NARRATOR:  As Merle and Mae say “au revoir”,
                       We gaze back up at you, our star,
                       Knowing that one day your soul
                       Will implode in a big black hole.
                       So twinkle, narcissistic star,
                       What a mass of gas you are!


Twinkle Twinkle Twist writing prompt entry
Writing Prompt
Twist on the nursery rhyme Twinkle, twinkle
Original poem:
Twinkle twinkle little star
How I wonder what you are
Up above the world so high
Like a diamond in the sky
Twinkle twinkle little star
How I wonder what you are

Your challenge:
Somehow change the nursery rhyme... it can be completely different or keep the idea of the star. However, the only line from the original poem you can use is "Twinkle, twinkle little star"
You can add on multiple stanzas, varying from 2, to 4, to 6 lines apiece. The rhyming pattern must be as followed:
For 2 line stanzas: aa
For 4 line stanzas: aa, bb
For 6 line stanzas: aa, bb, aa
(Near rhymes are fine)
Have fun with it!
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