General Poetry posted July 28, 2016 Chapters:  ...419 420 -421- 422... 


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A Triquint

A chapter in the book Little Poems

The Gathering Clouds

by Treischel




The gathering clouds, portending doom,
convey bright daylight to gloom.
Shadows darkly loom.
Day resumes
NIGHT.

Enveloped, darkness that now entombs,
kills colors our eyes consume.
Shadows darkly loom.
Day resumes
FRIGHT.

As the downpour gushes flooding spume,
all dire straits, we assume.
Shadows darkly loom.
Day resumes
PLIGHT






Some parts of the country, including here in Minnesota, have been deluged recently in floods, due to incredible cloudbursts. Last week, St. Cloud and surrounding areas got hit with 8 inches of rain, high winds, and lightning. Only to be hit again within 2 hours with another large storm. This poem attempts to capture the thoughts as those people in the area see the clouds gather again.

This poem is a Triquint.
A Triquint is a poem form created by Sylvia A. Feeley, which consists of 3 stanzas of 5 lines each. Where Lines 3 and 4 of the first stanza becomes a Refrain that repeats in stanzas 2 and 3. The syllable count for each stanza is 9, 7, 5, 3, 1 and has a rhyme scheme of:

a,a,A1,A2,b,

where A1 and A2 are the repeated lines in each stanza.
Since the "a" rhyme carries through all three stanzas, it is very important to select the "a" rhyme wisely. Since the "b" rhyme is just a single syllable that must interplay with the repeated refrain, it makes this a very complex format to write.

I hope you enjoyed mine.

This photograph was taken by the author himself on July 8, 2016.
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