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A Trijan Refrain - Modified

A chapter in the book Family

To See Her Smile

by Treischel



I've often seen her suffering
from pains in knee and back.
Our hope is to defeat this thing
that's knocked her off the track.
We pray these horrid hurts retire,
and yield to our supreme desire
to see her smile,
to see her smile.
Then higher spirits will acquire.

I've often seen her suffering,
but there's a glint of hope,
that surgeons can remove the sting,
allowing her to cope,
by them removing what is sore,
an operation perfect for
a new life style,
a new life style,
where she won't suffer any more.

I've often seen her suffering,
but now a brand new knee
that could change almost everything,
when she completes PT.
With all discomforts that accrue,
as long as she keeps pushing through,
then it's worthwhile,
then it's worthwhile,
and so completely overdue.








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This is a picture of my wife, Karen. Now that her surgery is done, the hard work begins, as she must spend 3 months of rehabilitative physical therapy (PT). She has to do exercises twice a day, and goes to out-patient care twice a week. Between pain pills and icing, we try to keep the pain and swelling down. She has good days and bad days, but I do see great progress. We are hoping to go for walks again and maybe even bicycling, in the near future. That will definitely put a smile back on her face.

This poem is a Trijan Refrain.
The Trijan Refrain, created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas under it basic format, although a variation of the form does not repeat the same line at the beginning of each stanza. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d/c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4/8

I used the standard format for this poem, repeating line 1 in each stanza. However, I modified the form by not using the first four syllables of line 5 as the refrain, but let them stand on their own. The total rhyme scheme carried through the 27 lines is as follows:
A,b,a,b,c,c, D1,D1,c - A,e,a,e,f,f, D2,D2,f - A,g,a,g,h,h, D3,D3h, where the capital letters indicate the repeated lines.

This photograph was taken by the author himself on November 11, 2014.
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