General Poetry posted September 25, 2015

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tanka contest entry

tanka (rose petals)

by Val Crisson

rose petals
drop to hospital floor
old man's life ticks away
his soul reaches for heaven

Tanka Poetry Contest contest entry


I have chosen to use a more traditional Japanese approach to this tanka, and have gone short/long/short/long/long. I have used 25 syllables, which is appropriate as long as I follow the short/long/short/long/long rule. I thank all of those that take the time to read this.
Pays one point and 2 member cents.

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