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A Japanese Adaptation of the Sonnet

A chapter in the book Little Poems

haiku sonnet (bright decoration)

by Treischel



bright decorations
multi-colored lilies grow
wondrous creations

stunning floral show
in homes or apartment flats
makes the garden glow
in colors that catch the eye
while observers tend to sigh

blossom's bloom
colors any room
poisons cats

try
to grow a few nearby
Hai






These are some more of the lovely lilies that my brother, Richard, has all over his backyard. I love the colors in this hedge by one of his pools. His wife, Corrine is a marvelous gardener.

Lilies are notoriously poisonous to cats.

One thing that I have discovered in my research of the Sonnet genre of poetry, is that the form seems adaptable to almost limitless poetic formats. However, in my search, I never found one that adapted the Japanese characteristics of their poetry. So, I created this form myself. May Sonnet purists forgive my Bohemian spirit.

This poem is a Haiku Sonnet.
The Haiku Sonnet actually blends several Japanese formats into a 14 line structure that also containes other Sonnet features, such as a rhyme scheme. The format begins with a 5-7-5 Haiku followed by a 5-7-5-7-7 Tanka. It then executes a 3-5-3 Haiku and closes with a rhymed 1-6-1. Because I want to emphasize the Japanese correlation, this format must end with the word "Hai", which is Japanese for "Yes".
A Sonnet usually carries a "Volta", so mine is in the 3-5-3 (lines 9 - 11). Still the Haiku and Tanka require a similar turning point, called a "Kiru", in each of its formats, so I tried to achieve that too. I think I got it in each Haiku. Not so well in the Tanka. The rhyme scheme Is:
aba bcbdd eec ddd.

I hope you like this attempt.

This photograph was taken by the author himself on July 11, 2015.
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