Biographical Poetry posted June 19, 2015 Chapters:  ...109 110 -111- 112... 


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An Octogram

A chapter in the book Family

I Need to Show

by Treischel


Hey mom, I have a nasty bruise
I need to show.
Since it's the latest bit of news
You need to know.
It's when I came in through the door,
Encountering the slip'ry floor,
My knee received an ugly blow,
I need to show.

I slipped when I removed my shoes.
I didn't know
That shiny wood should give the clues
It's slick below.
So, see the signs my pain asserts,
Because by showing where it hurts,
And mommy's kiss will make it go,
I need to show.






My grandson Isaac isn't really hurt, but he knows he can get his mom's attention and affection if he shows his mommy his bruises. He'll get a kiss on it. Remember doing that as a kid? Her kiss always made it better.

This poem is an Octogram.
The Octogram is a style of poetry invented by Fanstorian Sally Yocom (S.Yocom). It consists of two stanzas of eight lines each, with a very specific syllable count and rhyme scheme.
Syllable count is: 84848884, repeat on second stanza.
Rhyme scheme: aBabccbB ababddbB, where B repeats same text repeated.
No more than 16 lines.

This picture was taken by the author himself of his daughter, Aisha, and grandson, Isaac, on November 25, 2014.
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