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A Canzone

A chapter in the book Little Poems

Cosmos Considerations

by Treischel



The sky spreads before me in blankets of light,
mysterious void in the darkness of night.
The heavens, like diamonds are flickering bright.
I delight in the mystery of it all!
The immensity, the vastness, makes me feel small
with concepts enormously beyond recall.
Those cosmic constructions show beauty and grace
exceeding the reach of the whole human race,
that tinkers and toys concepts of time and space.
Like a little child, I wonder in twilight
at sparkling tableaus making marvelous sights.
The sky spreads before me in blankets of light.

I delight in the mystery of it all,
as its deep enigma keeps me in thrall.
I hear Siren songs clear as clarion calls.
Those cosmic constructions show beauty and grace.
Through eons of time Nature couldn't erase
the signature wielded upon Heaven's place.
The realization of it is wonderful,
a spontaneous spark so successful
that the Universe became bountiful,
full of those things that can swim, fly, walk, or crawl.
While I am here looking up, standing tall,
I delight in the mystery of it all!

Those cosmic constructions show beauty and grace,
constellation patterns of ribbon and lace
that even a small simple mind can embrace.
The realization of it is wonderful -
Compositions cosmically colorful,
arrayed so, in a manner most beautiful.
Astonishing forces determine our fate,
that flow with the feeling of something so great,
far beyond comprehension humans relate
to experience we typically face,
that only zen masters usually trace.
Those cosmic constructions show beauty and grace.

Astonishing forces determine our fate,
expanding in space at exceptional rates,
igniting the cauldrons explosions create.
The realization of it is wonderful!
Swirling around in gravitational pull,
doing dazzling dances that are masterful,
those cosmic constructions show beauty and grace.
As the planets align in a tight solar chase
where the powerful pull of the sun sets the pace,
while all the stars light the way to Heaven's gate
on Earth man is learning a little too late.
Astonishing forces determine our fate!

The realization of it is wonderful!
I stand here admiring a sky so full --
canopy covering truly delightful.
Those cosmic constructions show beauty and grace,
as the planets, the moon, and stars interlace
in visions that only the clouds can displace.
I delight in the mystery of it all,
and ponder the moments of light that may fall
on this pitiful person who sits a wall
while some comet tails blaze just off to my right.
The scene never fails to amaze and delight.
The sky spreads before me in blankets of light.

Astonishing forces determine our fate.
The realization of it is wonderful!
Those cosmic constructions show beauty and grace.
I delight in the mystery of it all!
The sky spreads before me in blankets of light.





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The Universe is so big and we are so small. I often sit on a star filled night and think these thoughts. I tried to portray the wonder of it here.

Siren songs - in Homer's Odessy, the mythical Sirens in the sea sing compelling songs that draw unwarry sailors upon the dangerous rocks to their deaths.

Clarion calls - something you hear clearly that is commanding or hard to resist. The Clarion was a trumpet-like instrument used by medieval armies for instruction. In modern terms, a bugle.

Zen Master - an individual who teaches Zen Buddhist meditation and practices, usually implying longtime study and subsequent authorization to teach and transmit the tradition themselves. Zen emphasizes insight into Buddha-nature and the personal expression of this insight in daily life. The term Zen refers to the belief that one's mind is from the beginning of time fully enlightened.

This poem is a Canzone.
A Canzone is the very lyrical Italian poetic format. The original Italian canzone consists of 5 to 7 stanzas typically set to music, each stanza resounding the first in rhyme scheme and in number of lines (7 to 20 lines), followed by a short closing envoi. The canzone is typically hendecasyllabic (11 syllables).
I researched several sources describing this style and each was a bit different. One stated that there is no rhyme scheme, but a repeat of key words, like a Sestina. Others identified structured schemes. Most stayed with either 10 or 11 syllable lines. No specific meter was identified.
So, I chose here to go with 5 stanzas of 12 lines with repeating lines that grouped in threes, with variable meter. Each stanza also opens and closes with the same line. The structure is as follows, where the capital letters are the repeated lines:
Stanza 1: AaaBbbCccaaA
Stanza 2: BbbCccDddbbB
Stanza 3: CccDddEeeccC
Stanza 4: EeeDddCcceeE
Stanza 5: DddCccBbbaaA
Envoi: EDCBA

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