Commentary and Philosophy Poetry posted January 21, 2025


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the promise of heaven...and heaven lost

Floating Through Eden

by Me and Erin G

Your pain will be gone...
  You will always be the one...
          You will never be alone...
                  you will never be alone...   you will never be alone...  you will never be alone...
 
I am astounded by its beauty,
Its peacefulness, its providence,
And its promise of perfection
 
I am floating,
Floating in a paradise no longer lost
Revealing all, concealing nothing from thy view
 
          How could we not have known?
          Why were we not shown?
          How could we have forgotten?
 
I am floating...
Floating through Eden
Floating in a heaven.
But there's no one here.



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I had these few lines that were written a few months ago. Which I thought could lead to something:

"I am astounded by its beauty,
Its peacefulness, its perfection
the scene is a heaven.
But there is no one here."

Then I read an article on NDEs (near death experiences) and somehow it evolved into this
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