General Flash Fiction posted January 12, 2021

This work has reached the exceptional level
Satirical, dialogue only


by DonandVicki

"Let us make man in our image and let them have dominion over the fish of the sea and over the birds of the heavens and over the livestock and over every creeping thing on the Earth."

"Abba, what do you say we give it a rest? You, The Holy Spirit, and I have been working, going on six days straight. Not only did you make the earth and all things therein, but when you said, "Let there be light!" WOW! I know they will be talking about that for eons to come, that was a singular job."

"I told you; we rest on the seventh day, not the first day, not the sixth day, but the seventh...Why does it feel like I'm always talking to myself?"

"That's the spirit Abba, let him know who's in charge."

"It is not good that the man should be alone; I will make a helper fit for him, and he will call her woman."

"Alright! Now that's what I'm talking about. Oh yeah Eve, walk that around for a while."

"Up here Adam,...My eyes are up here."

"You are gorgeous babe, what's for supper?"

"I have a craving for some ribs and applesauce."

"Abba, I suppose that you are going to give them free will? Really? I hope you realize what a mess that will lead to, right HS?"

"The woman will let him think he has free will, remember, Father is still in control."

"Can I get an amen you two?"



Dialogue Only Writing Contest contest entry



I had to do a little revision to get the dialogue right.

"Abba"- Hebrew for father.

"HS"- Holy Spirit

This is meant to be satirical, tongue in cheek, not blasphemous.

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