By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV Character Atamus: An young Imperial soldier I appreciate the feedback provided. One request that I have is to provide something that you like and dislike. If you see something that needs improvement, please don't hesitate to let me know. I can't improve otherwise. Thank you to everyone that is enjoying Rise From the Fall so far. I'm going to be cutting longer chapters up, so one old chapter may become two to three smaller ones. |
By Rinshikai
I can't let her see me like this. She'll only worry. A few scrapes and bruises litter my face, but they are not too bad. I wash up with water in hand, and a stinging sensation runs along my face. Slapping myself, I stare at my warped reflection in the barrel water. Satisfied, I dust myself off and enter the tavern.
I'm barely inside, and the stench of pipe smoke burns my eyes. Boastful mercenaries clack their mugs together, ogling the girls. Their antics are only kept in check by the wet chopping of the owner's hog-splitter—severed hands displaying their grizzly purpose on the bar's back mantle.
The pain in my gut flares up, but the scent of pomegranate soothes me. I look for the source, and the owner's wife meets me. Her lean and withered features hide what was once a great beauty. However, those stern but brilliant eyes reveal a kind soul. Ushering me to follow, she leads me to an adjacent room that reeks of oil and sweat. Inside, four souls gather around a table; among them are three war-weathered men bearing the sigil of the Grey Hawk. Across from them, my Aunt sits, sipping wine.
I thank her, getting a firm slap on the ass as she leaves. One of the men waves me away, focusing solely on his parchment. "This is a private meeting, boy." I refuse to go, and his comrades move for a more direct approach.
"He's my nephew, captain," those piercing green eyes matching my own. Though a twinge of worry escapes, she quickly hides it behind a stoic expression. "He won't bother us, I promise." The tension leaves the room, for the moment at least. "Now, you require experienced combatants. Those recommendations should speak for themselves."
"You cannot be serious, Iona," the Captain drops the parchment on the table. "You're a fucking arena fighter with a chip on your shoulders. I need seasoned men." His condescending words irk me, but I hold my tongue. "Not entertainers."
"I've served in three expeditions from here to the frontier. How many of your boys say the same?"
The Captain gestures to his men. "There's a difference between protecting caravans from bandits and fighting real soldiers, Iona." Her composure is unfazed even as they surround her; I know she is not some weak wallflower. But worry chips away at me. "But you're a fool if you believe I would allow a woman in my ranks." One tries to grab her, but the wet snap of his finger and a broken nose set him straight. Furious at her defiance, the Captain flips the table, distracting her long enough for the Captain's man to grab her from behind. Held aloft, she still keeps her composer, unfazed by her predicament.
"Let me be clear." The Captain draws his sword, stabbing it into one of the tables, then pulls her by the hair, forcing her to look at him. "We have no use for some northern." He spots the tattoo on her wrist. "Especially an heir of those traitorous Averni."-punching her in the gut-"Fighting in the arena is not battle, Iona; there are no Umpires. You glorified bitch." His blow sends a spatter of blood from her lips.
I bolt towards them, fueled by rage, freezing at the cackle coming from my Aunt's crimson smile. "Is that supposed to scare me?" She strikes the shin of her restrainer, elbowing his throat the second she's free. "I was one of the condemned, Captain,"- ducking under a chair turned weapon- "I fought every day for five years." Then, like a dance, the two begin to trade blows.
He has the advantage, and he knows it. Every chance he gets, he throws something to keep her at a distance. If he manages to get one good hit, she's done. But he gets cocky, and my Aunt slips past his defenses. Jumping on his back, she uses his cloak like a noose.
The man with the broken nose stands, pulling a knife. Panic taking over, I rush him, planting my knee on his back as I use my size to pin him, knocking the blade across the room. His compatriot tries to rip me off, but I get my arm around his throat. "Don't get involved," I growl, trying to keep them out of this fight.
"Get off me, you northern bitch!" The Captain tries smashing her into a pillar to knock her off, but she coils her legs around his chest, pulling them both to the ground with all her strength. "Wait." He squirms, frantically trying to free himself. "Kill me, and my men will hunt you down." He looks at me, baring his teeth like a feral dog. "All of you!"
With a bloody smile, "Oh, I won't kill you." She tightens his noose, and his face turns red like a tomato. "But Captain, if you ever threaten my family, I'll kill every last one of you." The Captain goes limp, panic gripping me. I race to free her.
Letting go of my prey, I rush over to my Aunt. "Are you okay?" I pull him off, checking if she has anything other than that oozing cut on her lip. When she pushes me away, I know she's okay. I make a rag from the Captain's cloak. "Here," she cleans herself off. "They could've killed you." He's breathing, but barely. The storm of emotions recedes, but like the tide, they'll return.
"I had it under control, Colton. Stop fussing." She trades the mercenary's badge for her bloody rag. "I'll be taking this." Ignoring the moans, we leave, bribing the other Hawks with a round.
Many eyes follow us out of the streets, unsure if it's Iron Iona. Some try to approach, but with a flick of my wrist, they scurry off. "How many companies is that now? Five?" Seven, she corrects me. "Why are you trying so hard to join them? There are other ways to make money."
"I'm a fighter, Colton. It's all I know how to do." She traces a well-healed scar by her eye. Could you honestly see me doing anything else? I don't have Triana's looks or Mago's trading skills." I wish I had comforting words, but my mind is blank.
"But, none of these imperial Mercs hire women." I try to be honest. "Yes, they pay better than most, but aren't you worried they'll retaliate?" My eyes patrol our surroundings, looking for any threat in the sea of people.
"They won't," she reassures, "Men like the Grey Hawks take pride in their skills. If it was known, they were bested by a woman. Their company would lose all their credibility."
"But you're not just a fighter. What about teaching? Why not become Lanista?" She pins me in a side alley, her forearm against my throat. Those eyes are barring into me, and fear grips my heart while my neck feels every angry twitch coursing through her body.
"Let me be clear, Colton, I will never force what they did to me onto another," her barbed words, hiding her past. She releases me, crossing her arms, and she looks away, flushed at what she had done. The fire in her eyes fading.
"I'm sorry," I said, clenching my throat for air. "I didn't mean to open that old wound."
She hugs me. "It's okay," the tough exterior cracks and a flicker of the actual Iona shows. Our eyes meet. "We'll save every coin we can, and we'll get that land they promised. But we won't become imperials to do it. Come on. I need to meet someone before we head back."
We enter the market, losing ourselves in the colored fabric that creates an ever-changing street labyrinth. The fog of grilled fish and spices tempts me from my ration, but I force it down to ease my hunger. The taste of sawdust remains with me. We push through the sea of flesh, our ears bombarded with every known language. A few vendors spot us asking for an endorsement from Iron Iona, but their offers don't interest her.
We find shelter in one of the indoor stalls, hidden by large rugs. The flicking of torches is our only light, illuminating walls filled with powders and dried herbs. I couldn't even guess what they were. Like thieves, we step carefully over mousers, paroling the floors until we reach the counter in the back.
An elderly man sits at the counter, opening his eyes when we approach. "I'm here for," my Aunt says. He tosses a coin purse at my Aunt and then gestures toward the back door. "Thanks," she says. With our task finished, we leave for the estate.
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Colton: Main POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt The Captain: Leader of the Grey hawk Mercenary Company This chapter is a rewrite from the feedback I have gotten over the last few months. All I ask from reviewers is a minimum of one thing that you liked, and one thing you disliked. If you see something that needs to be improved or fixed, please let me know. I can't otherwise enhance. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt Alexis: Estates advisor Melissa: Alexis's daughter, and childhood friend of Colton Sevrious: Senior house slave who helped raise Colton This chapter is a rewrite of chapter two, now as a new chapter 3. I ask that reviewers give a minimum of one thing they like and dislike. If you see anything that needs to be fixed or improved, don't hesitate to point it out, I can't improve otherwise. Thanks |
By Rinshikai
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Colton:POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt Enid: Colton's younger sister Melissa: Colton's childhood friend Alexis: Melissa's mother This chapter is a rewrite of chapter 3, now as a new chapter 4. I ask that reviewers give a minimum of one thing they like and dislike. If you see anything that needs to be fixed or improved, don't hesitate to point it out, I can't otherwise enhance it. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV character Cato: Son of one of the Five great families Lady Vita: Mother of Livia Livia: Daughter of Vita Tatyana: Daughter of one of the Five great families This chapter is a rewrite of chapter 3, now as a new chapter 5. I ask that reviewers give a minimum of one thing they like and dislike. If you see anything that needs to be fixed or improved, don't hesitate to point it out, I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV Character Luna: Colton's Aunt Servious: House slave that raised Colton Becka: POW given to Colton as a gift This is a rewrite of chapter six. I ask that you provide a minimum of one thing that you liked, and disliked. If you see something that needs to be fixed or improved, don't hesitate to point it out; I can't otherwise enhance it. Thank you |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV character Becka: POW from the north This chapter is a rewrite of chapter 6, now as a new chapter 7. I ask that reviewers give a minimum of one thing they like and dislike. If you see anything that needs to be fixed or improved, don't hesitate to point it out, I can't otherwise enhance it. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV Character Giselle: Colton's foster mother Enid Colton's younger sister Becka: POW from the north Servious: Slave that raised Colton. This chapter is a rewrite of chapter 8. I ask that reviewers provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that can be improved, don't hesitate to point it out. I can't otherwise enhance. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV character Enid: Colton's younger sister Giselle: Colton's foster mother Iona: Coltons Aunt Runa: Becka's mother Becka: Runa's daughter Servious: Slave that raised Colton This is a rewrite of chapter eight, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV Character Iona: Colton's aunt This is a rewrite of chapter ten, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV Character Iona: Colton's aunt Tristan: Colton's childhood friend Hahaku: Tristans father Becka: POW from the north This is a rewrite of chapter ten, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Iona: POV character Giselle: Northern Queen Lord Titus: Head of one of the Five great families (Northern Province) Emperor Octavian: Current Emperor Lady Orianna: Octavian's sister Hahaku: Friends of Iona and Mercenary captain This is a rewrite of chapter twelve, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Iona: POV Character Hahaku: Friend of Iona Giselle: Northern Queen Livius: Minor Lord Hunter: Giselle's agent Emperor Octavian: Ruler of the Empire Lord Titus: Head of one of the five great families This is a rewrite of chapter twelve, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. Update May 7 I've rewritten this chapter after taking feedback from the fan story committee. |
By Rinshikai
"Pig!" Becka knees her groper in the groin, igniting a powder keg of frustration and anger. Fists start flying, and chaos fills the streets. I pull her to a side alley before she can join in the maelstrom. However, I did enjoy watching that idiot hit the ground.
Whistles blare, and guards fill the street, "Break it up, break it up." They strike anyone who resists, but there are too many of them. In the ensuing chaos, we slip away. The storm fading behind us, we take a moment to catch our breath. Standing in, I don't even want to know.
"Fuck," I curse under my breath. I look back to the brawl and see the desperation. The crowds of refugees were bad enough, but the guards make it worse. This was supposed to be a simple job: make the delivery and go home.
Becka dusts herself off, "You didn't have to do that, Colton." Even after these few months, her edges haven't dulled. Her skirt gets caught, and she rips it in frustration. "Fucking dress!" She rips it until it hangs above her ankles, then smiles triumphantly over her opponent. "There! If you had let me change, this wouldn't be happening."
"Hey, you wanted to tag along, Becka, so it was either the dress or your skivvy." I toss her one of the packs. "Come on; we have to get to the Blackstone district."
Tristan whistles at us, "I know another way. Follow me." He hands me my share of the load before we slug through the trash. A putrid smell rises with each step we take. Making our way into an open area flies gather in buzzing clouds, eager for their next meal. Buckets rain down from the bridge above, oozing across the cobblestone. I trust Tristan like a brother, but sometimes I question his sanity.
"Are you sure you know where you're going?"
"Relax, Colton," he reassures me, "I always come this way." The glint in his eyes telling me all I need to know. He's leading us to Smith Alley.
Becka wipes her face, then punches my arm. "Again, pants would have been nice." she gestures down her legs, her skirt coated in muck. She's never cared about her appearance before. I don't know why she cares now.
I pull her close when another wave falls, narrowly dodging a direct hit. But droplets still manage to pelt us like stones. I feel the heat rushing to my cheeks, and I panic, resting my chin on her shoulder. "We'll have a scented bath when we get back."
She leans into me. "With the berry scent?"
I wipe the spatter from her cheek. "If you behave."
"Hey! It's this way," Tristan yells, leading us back into the narrow alleys. These once-proud buildings are now bones, ready to give at the slightest touch. "So, either of you hear about that incident up North?"
Debris blocks our way forward, so we start clearing it, "Something about Besekers and poison?" The thought of such a weapon sends a shiver up my spine. "Yeah, we heard. The Empire lost everything north of Bloodcrest Keep."
I throw the last beam, revealing a poorly maintained door, and wisps of black smoke puff through the cracks. I ready myself, that day threatening to engulf me. My breathing quickens, and memories creep their way into my mind.
A hand snaps me out of it. "Are you going to be ok, Colton?" Tristan asks.
"Yeah, I'll deal with it." I calm my nerves with one last deep breath, and we open the door. Tying scarves around our faces, we enter. A wave of heat blasts us, and flashes fill my mind. I close my eyes and say, "It's in the past, it's in the past," pushing those memories back down.
Ash fills the air. Compared to the rest of the city, this place is a graveyard. The warm colors are now an oily black. An ever-present cloud of smoke blackens the sky. The echo of anvils singing their off-key chorus while metal footsteps hush the voices of the masses.
The voices grow louder, and curiosity gets the best of us. Out in the open square, a black iron statue is surrounded. Many soldiers try to calm the sea of people at its knees, "People, we understand that you are tired, but you must endure."
"I lost three men to exhaustion," one of them yells. One of them fell into the forges." He rallies the crowd. Emboldened, they close the gap, but the click of crossbows breaks their will to fight. Like beat dogs, they return to work. Curiosity sated, we follow Tristan to Smith Alley.
Tucked away from prying eyes sits our destination. The Steel Rose is a smaller smithy run by one of the most cantankerous old men I know. I bang on the door, and a pipe flap opens above us.
"We're closed."
"Then open the door," Tristan answers.
"Oh no, I ain't letting you lot in here." The lid on the pipe closes.
"That's a shame. I have all this steel, but I guess we'll have to sell it somewhere else." Tristan starts to walk away, counting to three with his fingers. The pipe opens again, and he stops. "I guess we were doing business then?"
A loud sniff shoots out of the pipe. "Not smelling like that, you ain't. You know the routine mutts."
Another pipe opens, rattling so hard that fissures form in the wall. Tristan and I lock arms with Becka. What's about to happen is going to piss her off. "Hey!" She squirms frantically, unable to touch the ground.
"Don't be mad, Becka. We have to do this," I say. We close our eyes and are drenched by a tidal wave of cold water. It's refreshing. The grime oozes off of us, taking the smell with it.
"You dick!" Becka kicks me in the shin, water dripping off her fiery features. Her cheeks flush red, and her shirt is soaked, giving me a good view. Seeing my eye wonder, she covers herself. Something starts running down her cheeks, and she wipes it away with her sleeve. Was she wearing makeup? She turns to Tristan, ready for a fight, stopping when the door opens.
Supported by a metal leg, the owner tosses us some rags. "Don't drip on anything." He limps his way back into the shop, taking a seat. "Show me." Becka and I open our packs, and several weapons we liberated fall on the table with a metallic ting. "I won't ask where you got these," He eyes most of them, unimpressed. "I can salvage most of this. What do you want for it?"
Tristan opens his pack. "I need these blades repaired." Wrapped in a wolf's pelt are several spear tips. "With how things are going, my father wants us prepared." Tristan's gaze darts around the room, "Is Sophia here?"
The room turns cold, "And why do you want to see my granddaughter?"
Folding the wolf pelt, Tristan hands it to the Smith. "I wish to court her." His resolve is unwavering, even with that metal boot ready to meet his ass. "I love her, and I ask for your blessing."
Locking eyes with Tristan, the old man pulls a knife, stabbing the table between Tristan's fingers. "What makes you think you're worthy of her hand?" his expression cold, daring Tristan to flinch.
"I'm still breathing."
No words pass between them but smiles creep their way through. The Smith starts to let out a laugh, and Tristan follows suit. "You're a brave man, Tristan," he pulls the knife, "Sophia!"
Metal rattles through a door in the back of the shop, and a head pops out. "Opa, I'm in the middle of..." Her soot-covered face spots Tristan, and her cheeks flush red. The door shuts, and she exits a moment later, her face clean. "Tristan, what are you doing here?"
"I was making a delivery." He walks to her. "And I have a proposal I wanted to give." He takes her gloved hands. "Sophie, will you marry me?"
She turns to her grandfather, who gives a nod of approval. Her legs become jelly at a loss for words, and she goes limp in Tristan's arms.
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Character List
Colton: Main POV Character Tristan: Colton's childhood friend Becka: Northener POW Sophia: Blacksmiths granddaughter Blacksmith: Sophia's grandfather This is a rewrite of chapter fourteen, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
Wringing out a rag, I place it on Sophia's head. The cool waters calm her, but she hasn't woken up. "She needs rest," I say. Both Tristan and her grandfather are worried. Seeing her like this must be disheartening.
Tristan rubs his temples. "Is she going to be ok?" He caresses her cheek, guilt weighing him down, her eyes flutter open, and he is overjoyed. He hugs her, but let's go when he remembers they are not alone. "You had me worried. Are you feeling ok?"
"Yeah, I'm ok, just tired," she says. "Wait, did you?"
Tristan nods, "Yeah." With red cheeks, he rubs the back of his head. "So, wanna marry me?" Closing the gap, she plants her lips on his. "Alright then."
While this is a touching moment, my medical lessons kick in. "You need to rest," I offer Sophia a fresh cloth. At the rate you're going, you'll pass out again." I turn to her grandfather; while he manages to hide it, he's not far behind her. "Both of you."
"We have orders to fill." The Smith stands. "If we don't meet them, they'll take our shop." Stress is oozing off of him. "I put my life into this place, and I won't lose it." I can respect his resolve, but he's being foolish. Even if they finish this order, the army will demand more.
I reach into my pack and toss Sophia and her Grandfather some herbs. "Here, this helps when I'm stressed." I turn to Tristan, gesturing to him to convince them to leave and have them join his father's company. They can't keep this up, and we both know it. Strangely, I don't see or hear Becka. "Where's Becka?"
"She's over there," Sophia points to a wall display on the other side of the room.
Still a statute, Becka focuses on a pair of daggers hanging amongst several weapons. They're plain in design compared to the axes and short swords. "Why?" she mutters, reaching for them as if possessed.
"Becka," I grab her from behind. "Don't just go for a weapon like that."
She trembles in my embrace. The lack of her usual spark makes me nervous. She's cold, and it worries me. She knocks me to the ground. A dagger meets my throat. "How did they get these?" she demands, through heavy breaths and bared teeth. "These are mine!"
Tristan leaps to his feet, but I signal him not to get involved. "So what now, Becka?" I try to stay calm, scared shitless at my situation. "Are you going to kill me? Them? What's your plan?"
Reason flickers in her eyes, and the trembling blade slowly leaves my throat. "No...I don't know." She's reaching for her head, trying to rub the frustration away. "Let me think." Stress chipping away at her, allowing the tears to run free. She looks at me through slow breaths, and the dagger falls from her grip. Collapsing onto me, she starts whimpering. "I'm sorry, I."
All I can do is hug her. "It's ok, Becka. It's ok." I sit up, piecing together the situation. "Cato sold you those daggers, didn't he?"
"How did you know that?" The Smith walks towards us, taking the dagger from the floor. "Yeah, he did. He demanded I fix his sword. He said I should be honored to work on a noble's blade." A faint smile escapes that wrinkled face. "Funny, probably didn't want people knowin he broke it."
I stand, Becka still clinging to me, her nails digging deep. "He sold them as payment?" The Smith nods. Looking closely at the daggers, they're too small for me. They're made for a woman's hand. And Becka's bluntness only proves the point. "What are you going to do with them?"
He places the blade back on the wall, "I'll use the metal to fill the orders."
"You can't do that!" Becka shoves me away. "Cato stole those from me! They're mine!" She tries to get past him, but he effortlessly shoves her back. Regaining her balance, I see her ready to fight. Before she can throw a punch, I restrain her again. "Let me go, Colton," She kicks frantically, going for my shins and groin.
"Becka, stop!" I tighten my grip. "This isn't helping."
Like a cat, she goes limp, dangling in my arms. I let her go, anger boiling off her like steam; she refuses to look at me, focusing solely on her daggers. Her breasts puffed out, and an idea hits me.
I turn to the Smith, "What if we buy them?" I get a confused look from both of them. "If you had some gold, you could buy the steel." I whisper in Becka's ear, "You still want those piercings out, right?" Putting two and two together, she reluctantly shows her breast.
Averting his gaze. "Girl, cover yourself." He turns his attention to the blades. "As nice as it would be to have that gold, it's useless to me." Straightening his back, it creeks like a rusty hinge. "With everything that's happened, we ain't getting steel from Titos Quarry anytime soon." Stress overcoming him, he sits. "I'm sorry, but I need that steel."
"Opa," Sophia walks towards us, holding Tristan's hand. "Just sell them the handles. We don't need the wood."
"Girl, we-"
Sophia kneels, taking his grandfather's hands, "Opa, I know how much this place means to us. But it's killing you," those brown pools start to drain on her cheeks. "Tristan's clan needs a smith, and we need a new home. Please." She begs, her words chipping at his resolve.
The weight of the situation hits him hard. He looks around the room, a lifetime of work crumpling to dust under the Imperial machine. "We finish this order first. And if we're going move, we still need coin." Before I can even speak, his arm flies up. "Coin, not gold."
"He's right," Sophia looks at Becka's breasts, examining the piercing. "I don't have the fine tools to remove these. And gold will be hard to trade with."
"So, you want what? Silver, copper?" I hesitate to reach for my coin pouch. It holds everything I made this month. The idea of spending it all in one go is disheartening. But if I could sell just one of those piercings, I would make it all back. With a heavy heart, I offer her my pouch, "Will this be enough?"
"Absolutely." She hands the pouch to her grandfather and gets to work on the blades. With precision and skill, the tangs come loose. With one last look at the handles, she hands them to Becka, who hugs them like an old friend. "You know. If you two still want those removed, I'm sure someone in the Red Lantern district could-"
"No." I haven't been there since they threw me to the wolves. The idea of crawling back for help makes my blood boil. But I'm out of options. Swallowing my pride, I remind myself it's for family and home. "Let's go, Becka. Tristan, you coming?"
"I'm going to stay for a bit."
Becka and I leave the shop, nearly blown away by ash-filled winds. It rushes through the street, blackening everything it touches. I take Becka by the hand. "Don't let go, ok." I pull her along until we reach that rickety old door.
We fight our way through, but the winds keep chasing us. The remains of buildings moan and cry all around us, breaking under the pressure. Their bones give way, and we run like madmen, narrowly escaping their wraith. With one last heave, we're blown out into the open.
I shield her with my body, our hearts racing. "Well, that was fun," I push myself off Becka, Removing my mask. We dust ourselves off, helping her to her feet. We stare at the rumble now littering the ground. "I hope Tristan has another way home. You ok?"
She rips off her mask, laughing between frantic breaths. "I can't believe we made it." She reaches into her cleavage, happy the handles are still there. Our eyes lock, and before I can react, we kiss. "Thank you."
"Don't thank me yet." I gesture to her breast. " We'll be even when we get those trinkets off."
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Character List:
Colton: Main POV character Tristan: Colton's childhood friend Becka: POW from the North Sophia: Blacksmiths granddaughter Blacksmith: Sophia's grandfather This is a rewrite of chapter fourteen, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
Colton
Fuck I missed this. Drums echo through the streets, and the sweet scent of ecstasy fills the air. In the ever-changing maze of flesh and silk, whores, and gigolos offer their skills to anyone that catches their eye. A few recognize me, but I pull my mask over my nose. If word reaches Giselle that I'm here, I'll never hear the end of it.
"Don't wander off, Becka?" When she doesn't answer, I find her with a group of thirsty women gawking at a man auctioning his services. Sneaking behind her, I wrap my arms around her waist, and her muscles tense. She glares at me, hiding her frustration under her mask. Resting my head on her shoulder, I say, "I think you're a little small for that ride."
Leaning her head back, she pinches my leg to get back at me. "I'm curious, not crazy."
"So, let's start bidding, ladies. How much are you willing to pay for this?" He gestures to his third leg, and like bitches in heat, they start betting large purses of gold like pocket change.
Not wanting to wait for the blood bath, I take Becka's hand, and we head deeper into the district. Perfume hangs heavy, masking the rot hidden in every nook and cranny. We keep bumping into other people, so I break for one of the side streets. Though it's less crowded, purse cutters wait among the broken crates. They size us up, one even going for his rusty knife, though it's little more than a broken blade with a cloth handle.
The fool rushes us, so I push Becka away, drawing his attention. They are not hardened killers, but they're no less dangerous. Our assailant points his weapon at me, but one blow to the back of the head knocks him flat. With the leader on the ground, the rest scurry back into the darkness. Broken bottle in hand, Becka drops her makeshift weapon, allowing us to continue.
We turn into another alley. I spot a familiar face. Pinning Becka to the wall, I ignore her protests, covering her mouth so we're not heard. Gesturing her to be quiet, I peer around the corner. I swear it's like the gods hate me.
"Great." I take my hand from Becka's mouth.
"What the big deal?" Becka follows my gaze. "They're just two drunks. I don't see the problem."
Of course, she didn't. She wasn't there. Those distant memories flicker at the back of my mind, yet I remember them clear as day. I did my usual patrol through the brothel hallways, ensuring everyone played nice. A scream drew my attention, and I rushed to the source. Throwing a door open, I found one of the girls cowering in the corner of the room, blood oozing from an open wound in her forehead, her eye swollen shut.
Her abuser looks at me, trying to get me out of the room so he can continue his fun, but I block his attack, slamming his face into the door frame. He bitched and moaned as I dragged him through the halls. I threw him outside, but he still wouldn't shut up, threatening me; I beat him till he was a whimpering child in the streets.
The next day, the Madame kicked me out, telling me never to return. I was only doing what she paid me to do. But, it's true, nobles will defend their little shits no matter what they do.
That man, Atius, the one I threw out of the Silent Sin a year ago, is blocking our path, nursing on a bottle of wine, "That fucking old cow, does she not know who I am?" he finishes his drink, shattering the bottle on a wall. "I swear I burn that brothel down for this!" His slave helps him to his feet.
"Screw this." Becka shoves her way past me, walking straight to Atius.
"Becka!" I rush after her, only for my voice to give us away.
Grinning like a fool, Atius pushes past his slave, cleaning himself, trying to impress Becka. "Well, if it isn't the bastard that knocked out three of my teeth." He leers at Becka's going for her slave tag, only to have his hand slapped away.
"I don't have time to deal with you." I take Becka by the hand, but Atius stops us, reaching for something. At first, I thought he had a knife, but it was a purse full of coins, more than I could make in a year.
"You know I still owe you for what you did to me." He shoves a pouch of coins into my chest. "I'll forgive you if you let me have a tumble with that slave of yours." I throw the purse back at him.
"She's not for sale."
He shoves the purse back into my chest. "You don't seem to understand the situation you're in. You take the money, and you walk away. It's that simple." He goes for Becka, but I grab his arm, ready to snap it like a twig. His slave goes for his weapon but hesitates when I stare him down. Shoving him against the wall, I gestured for Becka to follow me.
But that cackle echoes through the alley. Forcing himself to stand, Atius draws a knife on me. "You still don't understand, do you? My house is second only to the five Great families. And I won't be disrespected by some fucking mongrel."
I ignore his self-righteous condescension and shove his friend out of the way. It takes every ounce of my will not to beat him to an inch of his life again. This day was supposed to be simple, make the delivery and go home.
"I guess you're beyond redemption, mongrel. But what about your sister." I stop dead in my tracks; what was he planning? "I should teach her how to be a proper Imperial woman." Grinning as he twists the knife. "Or I could just take her as a concubine. She could pay back the debt you owe me. You know, after I give her a thorough education."
I throw him to the ground, his laughter ringing in my ear. My heart starts racing, and I start wailing on him, but he won't stop laughing, no matter how many times I hit him. I can feel the fires in my angry haze while the stench of burning flesh floods my nose. The screams echoing all around me. Standing, I fight for air. He finally stops laughing like a madman; only wet gargling remains. Turning to Becka, she and Atius's friend are pale, and shock decorates their faces.
Through heavy breaths, I look to Atius. His face is gone, now only a pulpy mess of blood and bone, his body twitching as a crimson pool forms. I look at my hand, now socked red, and it's clear what happened.
"Oh, you've done it now, mongrel." He pulls Becka into a headlock, pointing a knife at her. "You murdered a noble; they'll make you bleed for this." Becca bites his arm and manages to wiggle free. "Ah, you bitch!" Grazing her across the back with his knife, she falls to the ground, grabbing her shoulder.
I rush him. Like two bears, we slam each other into the walls, desperate to get the knife. In this dance of death, broken crates and shattered vases fall, making it harder to get a footing. The blade glides between us, and we nick each other. I get a cut on the cheek, but it pushes me harder to stop him. We stare each other down as I slowly gain the upper hand. His bravado is replaced with utter fear as I slowly push the tip of the knife into his throat. His one hand flails, desperate to free himself from my grip, but I slide the blade further and further into his throat. He begs with gargled words, but they are ignored. In one quick motion, I pull the knife across his throat, and he slumps to the ground, his blade clenched in his hand. He twits momentarily, desperate to stop the bleeding, but he goes limp, his eyes glazing over.
Everything becomes a hazy mess, and my body acts on its own. A pile of debris is next to Atius's body, and I throw it to the ground. It lands directly on his head, giving the illusion it killed him, but I'm spattered with his blood. I look back at his friend slumped against the wall. If we're lucky, people will think it's a suicide after the two of them got into a fight. Satisfied with my work, I fall onto a wall, trying to catch my breath. Becka joins me, and for a time, we sit in silence for a while. "Are you okay?" I asked.
She rubs her shoulder, trying to ease the pain. "I'm fine, Colton."
"Let me see."
The knife had cut right through her dress, leaving a nasty red line on her shoulder blade. It isn't deep, but we still should get it looked at. I push myself from the wall and offer Becka my hand. "What about them?" She gestures to the bodies. "Shouldn't we hide the bodies?"
"No," We start to walk away. "As far as anyone is concerned, this was a drunken fight that led to a suicide."
We zigzag through the side alleys, ignoring the beggars in their shanties, desperate for anything we can give them. We come to the street that'll lead us to our destination. But something is off. There wasn't a fortified wall and door a year ago. I'm sure we went the right way. Did I make a mistake? I bang on the door, and a little peephole opens.
"What?" a feminine voice says, a single blue eye staring at me through the peephole. The woman gasps and quickly tries to close the hole, but I stop it with my finger, recognizing the voice. "No, you're not welcome here anymore, Colton." She tries to force the peephole shut, threatening to chop my fingers off if I don't move them.
"Whisper, please. I need Madame's help," I say softly like I did back then. Give me five minutes, and you'll never see me again." I pull my fingers out of the peephole and hear a click as the large metal door opens, revealing an old acquaintance of mine.
In the last year, Whisper has matured quite a bit. The skinny girl was now a woman, wearing a blue silk loincloth with a top that left little to the imagination. But the cloth over her one eye pulls at my heartstrings. If I had been quicker, I could have saved her vision. She takes us by the hands and leads us down the familiar alleyway.
When we arrive in the little nook, I'm taken aback. There used to be five brothels working in this spot, but now everything is different; a sweet smell fills the air, and I swear I'm hallucinating. The old tree in the center area is bursting with life. At its base, a mercenary is teased by a girl half submerged in a makeshift pond. I can see scales from the waist down, as if she has a tail.
Behind them, two girls with goat's legs and horns pull a man into their grotto decorated with vines heavy with flowers. That man reaches for his lover, as she is shouldered by a bear wearing a man's skin. Something's wrong; I can't focus on anything and feel light-headed. I look at my hand, and it's nebulous. I look at Becka, and she is grasping her heart, silently panicking as her gaze darts around the room, her eyes black as onyx.
"Come on," Whisper pulls us from the main area into a familiar location. Her otherworldly voice dancing in my ears. Guarding the door is a giantess wearing nothing but a golden torque and blue body paint. Her hair, a lion mane, giving her a fierce warrior look, tantalizing men brave enough to hire her. We walk past her, and she gives us a wink, smacking my ass as we pass.
The Silent Sin, or what it used to be, has changed into a bathhouse. Steam hangs heavy in the air, silhouettes tempting us like a siren's call. Where the bar used to be now lies a large communal bath, its edges littered with mermaids, each wearing shells like jewelry, their tails glistening as they tend to the guests.
Desperate for clarity, I close my eyes and shake my head. When that fails, I focus on the pillars, heavy with flowered vines wrapping around them like snakes. On the second floor, I spot several massage tables. Unlike everything else I had seen, the girls are ordinary. Good, I'm not going insane.
Becka clings to my arm, trembling like a fearful child. Whatever this stuff is, it's hitting Becka hard. Whisper pulls us into a side room with a door. Once inside, the room's finery glints in the midday light as a silk curtain dances in the breeze. I remember this room being one of Madame's private rooms. How did Whisper get access? The large bath at the center can seat at least four people. A massage table and clean linens lie ready for use in one corner. Opposite of that, soaps, herbs, and oils litter a shelf held in various-sized containers.
"Colton," I turn to Whisper, who wraps her arms around me, sticking her tongue down my throat. A bitter syrup fills my mouth, taking the haze from my mind but leaving my head feeling like a war drum on the march. "I'll get the Madame, and then we're even," our attention darts to Becka, crouched in the corner like a beat dog. "Give her this," she plops a vial into my hand, "Make sure you're clean by the time I get back."
"Thank you, Whisper." I slide my fingers between her blindfold and cheek, revealing the eye I couldn't save. Though the bruises are gone, her eye is now a milky gray. "I'm sorry, I should have acted sooner." Flushed, she knocks my hand away, slamming the door behind her as she leaves the room.
The thud of the door causes Becka to yelp. I kneel, reaching for Becka, only for her to slap me away in a panic. Her eyes are still as black as onyx. She grabs my face, trying to make sense of the situation. The touch of my face calms her down, and she focuses solely on me.
"You're real, right?" she begs.
Taking her hand, I look deep into her eyes. "Do you trust me, Becka?" With the simple nod, I get confirmation. Vial to lip, I finish the bottle and then press my lips to hers. I pinch her nose and hold her jaw open to slide my tongue down her throat, letting the medicine do its job. She struggles at first, digging her nails into my shoulders and threatening to bite my tongue off. But, she calms down, kissing me back using her tongue, battling for control of the situation.
When she swallows the drug, I let her go, and she instantly goes for her head. "Oh, what did you give me? It's like I just drank an entire keg." She rubs her eyes, desperate for the headache to stop. After a moment, she looks at me, her eyes no longer black voids. "What the fuck happened?"
I help her to her feet as we both nurse our raging headaches. "Sorry, I should have warned you. Places like this always use aphrodisiacs or some other fucked up concoction. Gets people in the mood." I turn to the center of the room. Then, an idea pops into my head. "On the plus side, I can promise you that bath now." I gestured to the bath.
Peering behind me, Becka then looks at me with a skunk eye. "Couldn't wait till we got back to the estate? Crossing her arms with a smug look, her gaze darts between me and the bath. Taking a whiff of herself, she caves. "Fine." She points at me. "We do this back to back. I don't look at you. You don't look at me, deal."
"Works for me." Peeling my clothes off, I searched the shelf, finding what I was looking for. "Looks like." A projectile of green, bloody fabric blinds me. Ripping the dress from my face, I'm rewarded with a flushed and naked Becca who covers herself.
"I said don't look you perv." Her bare feet echo across the marble floor as she slowly creeps into the bath. She takes a deep breath, disappearing under the water.
Not wasting time, I join her, dropping the dried berry powder into the water. I submerge myself, and the world disappears. It's peaceful but doesn't last when a sharp burning brings me back—popping my head above the water. The dirt and grime peel off like a second skin, but the cuts still burn. I glide my finger across my cheek; it's not bleeding anymore.
Becka pops back out, splattering me with a torrent of water. Pulling her hair from her eyes, she looks at me and quickly covers herself. I marvel at her as the waters glisten off her pale skin. Crouching, she covers my eyes with her hand. "I told you not to look." Moving her hand, we eye each other, trying our best not to break eye contact.
Taking the opportunity to mess with her, I stand up. Like I expected, she looks at my crotch but quickly looks away. "There, now we're even." I sit back down, getting a punch in the chest as a reward.
"Ass." She crawls to the other side of the pool, refusing to look at me, exposing her back. The wound she got in the alley is still fresh. If we don't get that treated, it's likely to cause a mark. However, I doubt Becca cares if it would leave a scar.
Creeping towards her, I reach for her back, tracing the wound with my fingers. Her muscles twitch, but she doesn't turn around. It's my fault she got hurt, "We should get this treated. Don't want you to get a scar right." A trickle of blood breaks through the seam, and I apply pressure, doing my best not to poke her below the belt. "When the Madame arrives, I'll ask for a needle and thread, but you'll have to take it easy for a while." I lean in so that my lips are right next to her ear. "So try not to use me as a punching bag, okay?"
I turn around, but Becka stops me by wrapping her arms around my chest and resting her head on my back. "Thank you." Her nails dig into my chest as if afraid to let go.
"Don't worry about it." I take her hand, "Once we get those piercings out, we're even."
She tightens her grip, Her nails on the verge of ripping into my flesh. "That's not what I meant, you ass." I turn around, and she rests her head on my chest. "I would have killed myself if it wasn't for you." She looks into my eyes, trembling, sorrow hanging heavy on her features. The only thing I can do is embrace her. What's gotten into her? "You've done so much for me, more than I can ever repay." Taking my hands, she rests them on her breasts. "So, let me pay you back." She kisses my neck.
My heart wants to jump out of my chest when she says that. Are the drugs still messing with her mind? I'd lie to myself if I said the thought never came to mind. Becka has a natural beauty few women have. A feminine frame but not soft, And that red hair mixed with those freckles is a rarity even amongst Northern women. But the last time I let myself go, I burnt bridges with Melissa's family. I don't want to do that with Becka and her mother.
"What's wrong?" Becka stops herself. "Don't tell me you're not interested?"
"It's not that." I look down into those emeralds. "Every time I let myself go, it always bites me in the ass." I sit on the edge of the bath with only my legs in the water, but Becka continues her antics by crawling on top of me. I cup her face, "You grew up on the road, free from this bullshit." My mind wonders about a life that could have been. "I'd trade lives with you in a heartbeat."
I'm pinned to the ground in the blink of an eye, Becka glaring down at me with a stare that could kill, water dripping from her hair. "No, you don't." She lays on top of me, those damn piercings rubbing against my chest. "Colton, I never spent more than a month in any place before coming here. I had no friends and no family other than my mother. We could never trust anyone." She looks at me on the verge of tears, "We were never safe." Her fists clench, and she stares, trembling. "At least you had a home."
I'm taken aback. To be hunted down like an animal, I can't even imagine what that must be like. But that hatred, I know that all too well. I wipe her tears away with my thumb, and the world disappears. Not even thinking, I let myself go.
It starts with a kiss, and we savor the taste of our lust before letting go. A smile creeps on Becka's face, and she sheaths me. Not wanting to give her the satisfaction, I roll us over and pin her arms over her head. Smiles turn into grins, and we lock lips again.
It was like a dance with Melissa. We'd read each other's movements, flowing like the current of a river. But with Becca, it's like a battle. We fight for dominance as if we were sparring. But I'm enjoying myself, even when she manages to get on top. She grinds her hips, one hand behind her head while the other caressing her chest. She looks at me hungrily, biting her lower lip in satisfaction.
Closing the distance, I grab her by the scruff and nibble on her neck. My tongue runs across her neck until I reach her earlobe. Gasping, Becka wraps her arms around my neck, grinding faster, trying to climax. Bear-hugging her, I rob her of an early victory.
"What's wrong?" Rubbing her nose against mine. "Don't want to lose to a woman?" Her smirk driving me wild.
Standing, I pin her against the wall, taking control of how much she's allowed to have. Not backing down, she wraps her legs around my waist, biting my lower lip. I force a kiss, only for her to shove her tongue past my defenses. Our duel grows most passionate, and we both ache for release. With one final thrust, my muscles tense, forcing me to lean on the wall for support while holding Becka, now collapsed in my arms.
Through heavy breaths, we look into each other's eyes. I lower Becka to the ground, her legs giving out under her. Falling backward, she takes my hands, pulling herself into my embrace. Taking the hit, I kiss those sweet lips. Taking the chance to mess with her, I pick her up like a bride. Though all she does is smile, her cheeks flushed.
Walking into the bath, I slide Becka onto my lap, washing the leg she offers. "Well, are we even?" she rests her head on my shoulder.
"Yeah," I squeeze her breasts. "But I'm still taking these." I play her piercings, getting a giggle from Becka.
She leans forward. "Fine with me," she cups one of her breasts. "Don't like these anyway." With her hunched forward, I spot something under her mane. Curiosity getting the better of me, I pull the red curtain back, revealing a tattoo of a fox hiding behind its tail. "Hey!" She leaps off me, shielding the back of her neck." Don't do that!" The grin turns to a scowl.
I'd crossed a line, raising my hands, "Sorry, I was just curious."
She rolls her eyes, crossing her arms. "Yeah, whatever. Just don't do it again."
The door flies open, revealing the Madame. Her silk dress is ready to burst from her hefty figure. She's gotten bigger since I saw her last. Rings line her fingers, each bearing a precious stone, while elaborate earrings hang from her ears. Though she wears fine makeup, it can't hide that glare of hers.
"Usually, I'd charge you for using my bath." She pulls a lever next to the door, opening a hole in the bath. While the water drains, the Madame pulls another lever, causing what I thought was a wall decoration into an aqueduct. Boiling water rushes towards Becka and me, so we jump out of the tub to avoid getting burned. "But Whisper has convinced me to be lenient." Pinching her nose at the smell of berries, she stares at us like unwanted guests, "So, why are you here, my little soldier?
"I need a favor."
I turn to Whisper, ready to thank her, but she refuses to look at me. She's flushed, a layer of sweat coating her body. Without a word, she gathers our dirty clothes, pausing when she sees the dagger handles. She and Becka lock eyes like a pair of alley cats. Not willing to risk Becka's ire, Whisper leaves us clean clothes. Turning to me, she takes my underwear and sniffs it, tucking it into her loincloth. Great, thanks, Whisper. At least we're even now.
Author Notes |
OCT 29 update: I've rewritten this chapter using feedback from the community and readers.
Character List Colton: Main POV character Becka: POW from the north The Madame: Owner of the Silent Sin brothel Whisper: A girl from Colton's past This is a rewrite of chapter sixteen (formally Herb and Spice). I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
“Becka, would you just sit still?” I take her under the chin so she has to look at me. Every twitch makes stitching her wound all the more time-consuming. I’ve already lost enough thread and don’t want Madame trying to fleece me.
With her cheeks puffed out like a squirrel, Becka grabs me by the scruff, leaning back, her warm breath running along my ear. “You try sitting still with this fat harpy squeezing you like a cheap whore.” She grits her teeth, glaring at the Madame who threatens to squeeze her breast till it pops.
“This harpy has claws,” she returns to examine Becka’s piercings. Digging between the golden globes, hugging Becka’s nipples. “Honestly, it’s always a hammer and nail with soldiers.”
“Can you get them off?” I finish by applying a damp cloth to my work.
“I suppose I have the tools to cut them off.” She looks to Becka, who covers herself at the Madame’s choice of words. “The clips, not your nips,” her eyes dig into me, looking for an opening. “You know you’re the last person I thought who would own a slave Colton.”
The Madame was always a shrewd businesswoman, but she did show me kindness. Back then, I opened up to her. But after she cast me out for helping Whisper, our relationship was strictly business. “It’s not by choice,” Becka gives me a hurt look. “But it’s not all bad.” She grins at my relief. However, it ends when the Madame stands.
With only a pair of trousers and a shirt between us, Becka and I dress, following her out of her private bath. Though the sweet aroma floods my nose, I don’t feel like I’m in a dream. Whatever Whisper gave us is working its magic. Even as guests enjoy their distractions, a few give us unwelcome stares, but I don’t care anymore. A lesson the Madame taught echoes in my ear. All they care about is what they can get out of you. When girls learned who I was, a couple of them tried their luck, hoping to get pregnant so they could blackmail me. Thankfully, Aunt Luna’s herbs stopped that from happening.
When their little ruse came to light, Giselle lectured me for letting my guard down, and the Madame worked me like a dog to make up for the money the girls lost. I hate admitting to myself, but I was glad to leave. Though the guard tower was unpleasant, I didn’t have to worry about a knife in the back.
We climb the stairs, scurrying between patrons offering the Madame thanks—a few offering gifts that quickly disappear from prying eyes. The plane bar, once filled with mugs of ale, now had a carved mural depicting every depravity imaginable. The few tables once filled with drunkards eyeing up the girls are now decorated with perfumes and oils that only the wealthy can afford.
“You’ve done well,” I say.
“I’ve been at this a long time, my little soldier.” She turns her arms wide open. “Now I get to enjoy the fruits of my labors.” She gestures to us to follow. “Come, we’ll talk about payment in my study.” She leads us past some gruff-looking guards into a familiar hallway. Like the bar, murals litter the walls, enticing guests to pleasure for a price.
“Right,” one of the girls offers a drink from her tray, but I decline. I want to get this over with and go home. “And who’s dick did you have to suck to buy out the competition?” Becka raises an eyebrow, holding in a laugh. “Last I checked, your neighbors weren’t keen on selling.”
I remember the Madame’s ambition; she wanted to expand her influence. But it is a cutthroat business. Yet, in less than a year, she made impossible gains. “Colton, a woman doesn’t kiss and tell.” A faint grin leaves her dyed lips. Nails between the cracks, she opens a pair of doors hidden in plain sight. “Come on.”
Entering her study, we’re met by a Madame’s attendants. Glinting head to toe in gold accessories, the warm light of the afternoon only adds to their allure as it flickers between the silk drapes. If we weren’t in a brothel, I’d have mistaken for nobles’ daughters.
One smiles, tucking a lock of hair behind her ear, her hair ornaments ringing like a wind chime. She whispers into her friend’s ear, earning a giggle. Scurrying away when I meet their stares, their attention either on a wall of scrolls or eyeing various items on the tables.
A year ago, this room housed plants for brewing alcohol and other vices to get people to spend their hard-earned coin. But now, no matter where you stepped, something elaborate stood in your way. Fancy tables are littered with gifts from wealthy patrons to marble statues of holy figures.
At the center of it all is a desk carved from northern pines, blanketed in eastern silk, with precious stones from the sea of Mem acting like little islands in a sea of purple fabric.
Becka bumps into me, dumbfounded at every little glint and shimmer, reminding me of a crow. The Madame snaps her fingers and gestures for us to follow her. Climbing the stairs, we join her out on a balcony. From here, the area below looks different. Safe from the intoxicating mist, the creatures tantalizing the guests are no longer otherworldly, just performers in elaborate costumes.
The Madame clears her throat, sitting at a small table with a bottle of wine. Becka enjoys the view, so I join her, refusing the wine she offers. “I’ll remove the piercing.” She swirls her goblet, admiring her crimson prize. But I expect payment?” she takes a sip. “I’m not running a charity,” she says, placing her drink back on the table.
My gaze falls on Becka, who’s leaning on the railing, her tunic barely covering her ass. The events in the bath flood my mind, but Becka’s flushed glare brings me back to reality. She tries covering her ass but settles for sitting on the edge of the balcony. “Perv,” she mutters, but I swear a grin escapes those lips.
Crossing my arms, I lean on the table to gather my thoughts. “Becka’s piercings are mostly gold. I will pay you with one, but I want the other for yourself.”
“Oh, Colton, I would have taken that offer a few months ago.”
What is she getting at? Gold is gold; it’s unlike her to reject easy money. “It’s not like you to reject money.”
She gestures to the area, “Look around you,” her ringed fingers shining in the sun. “I have more gold than I’ll ever need, no,” pulling a small crystal decanter. “I’ve gotten a taste for something more refined.”
“No,” I clench my fist, hiding my frustration under my breath. Many arena fighters have perfumes made from their sweat. My Aunt Iona is no different. However, she refused to give it to anyone but her closest friends. She has no right to ask for such a gift. “Ask for something else.”
Unsatisfied with my answer, the Madame takes another sip from her glass. “Do you remember Atius? That boy you threw out of my establishment last year?” Those eyes peer over her cup like a pair of suns on the horizon. “He was found dead in an alley today. His head crushed like a melon, and his slave was covered in cuts, his throat slit like a pig.”
My heart drops into my stomach, and panic rushes through my body. Keep calm, I chant in my head. You covered your tracks. There is no way she could know how things played out. I glance over to Becka, who rubs her shoulder, agitating her wound. She winces, looking at her hand. She’s relieved at the lack of blood, pulling out one of her dagger hilts tucked between her breasts. When she sees my staring, the hilt disappears between the mounds, crossing her arms, refusing to meet my gaze.
Shrugging my shoulders, “The streets just aren’t as safe as they used to be. Atius’s drinking problem likely didn’t help.”
“Indeed,” the Madame finishes her drink, placing the glass on the table. “I told him time and again that his drinking would be his downfall,” She looks between Becka and me. “Whisper said the two of you were injured when you arrived.” She focuses on Becka. “Tell me, how did you get that gash on your shoulder, girl?
A finger stops me from uttering a word. Dammit, she’s testing us. Glancing over my shoulder, Becka twirls her slave tag between her fingers, ignoring the Madame’s question. When she sees us looking at her, the Madame repeats the question. Looking to me for answers, I can only gesture to the Madame.
Standing, Becka walks towards us with her arms crossed. “We cut through the alleys,” she looks at me, continuing. “Someone jumped me with a knife, trying to steal this,” she holds the shiny slab of metal dangling around her neck. “I fought him off,” Rubbing her shoulder. “He got me on the shoulder.” She wraps her arms around my neck, resting her cheek against me. “Thankfully, Colton chased him off.
Taking me by the arm, the Madame examines my cuts. “Hmm, that would explain these.” She looks me in the eye like a cat cornering a mouse. “Do you inform the sentries?”
“No,” I pull away from her grasp, only for the cut to open. I apply a handkerchief the Madame offers to the wound, a smear of red dyeing the white fabric. “We handed it, no point in getting them involved.”
“I see,” the Madame pours herself another drink. The cat-like stare is still on her face. “A bit of advice, my little soldier, to report such a crime is always a good idea.” She finishes her drink in a single gulp. “If you don’t, rumors spread.”
What is she playing at? I clench my fist on the table but force myself to relax. I can’t show she’s getting under my skin. “And what rumours would those be?” I can feel hairs on the back of my neck warning me.
Leaning forward, the Madame rests her chin on her hands. “Stories are racing through the streets that a blonde man and redheaded woman were running through the area where Atius was found.”
Becka’s nails dig into my chest, so I cover her trembling hands, praying the Madame didn’t notice. “You don’t believe these rumors, do you.” My heart starts thumping in my chest, making it hard to breathe. I need to calm down, but the Madame’s smile hides a viper, ready to strike when I let my guard down.
“Of course not,” she tilts her head, her eyes barely a slit, as she continues to smile. “In fact, I would like to stop these rumors from spreading.” She stands, walking to the edge of the balcony. “Your mother has such a burden to bear.” Her eyes land on me, cold as ice, yet she smiles calmly. “I can’t imagine hearing the rumor of her adopted son murdering a noble’s son in cold blood.” She returns to her seat, calm as an autumn breeze.
Now, it all makes sense. I lean forward, weighing my opinions. I can’t give her the perfume, but if I don’t, word of what happened will spread. It gets harder to breathe, and I can’t focus, but Becka pulls me into a hug from behind. My heart stops pounding, and the haze starts to clear. I cup her hand on my shoulder, telling myself it will be ok.
A glint from the curtains races across my eyes, pulling me from my thoughts. Without a thought, I shield Becka with my body, reaching for where my blade would be. I step back until Becka’s piercings are pressing into my back. I don’t hear the cocking of a crossbow or the twang of a bow. Instead, the head of an axe creeps through the curtains, pulling them aside, revealing the wraith in the shadows. Stepping into the light, a man clad in leather and fur joins us on the balcony. I know this man. Those cold blue eyes make me uneasy, just like the day he came to the estate.
“Hunter,” I say
“The two of you were due back hours ago.” He steps forward, ignoring the attendants, and panickedly apologizes to the Madame. “Your mothers were worried, so they sent me to fetch you.”
Standing, the Madame eyes Hunter head to toe. “Who are you? How did you get past my security? Was that a twinge of fear or admiration in her voice?
Looking her in the eyes, Hunter keeps his composure even as one of the guards rushes out with a hand on his sword. His cheek is bruised from a blow to the face. “Madame, are you ok?” He says through panicked breath.
Her answer, was a flick of her wrist, telling the guard and her assistants to leave. Though hesitant to leave their mistress, they comply, though I’m sure they’re not gone. “Now, I’ll ask you again, who are you?”
Holstering his axe, Hunter looks coldly at Becka and me. “I work for ambassador Giselle. These two were due hours ago, so Giselles sent me to find them.”
“I see,” the Madame returns to her seat. “Well, we were just negotiating.” She slides the decanter to the side, giving her arms a resting place. “Colton, I can silence these rumors, but it will cost you more than your aunt’s perfume.” She eyes me, ready to go for my throat if I don’t play her games. “Think about your family, little soldier. Surely it’s worth the price?”
Her fake niceties make me want to vomit. Behind those honeyed words is a venom that could tear my family apart. If I don’t give her what she wants, she could hold that debt over me for the rest of my life.
I look at Hunter, whose calm has remained unchanged since his arrival. He walks up to the table, reaching into his cloak. “I agree.”
Why would he agree? Is there something I’m missing?
“I believe we can come to an arrangement.” Pulling out a sphere-shaped sack, the stench of rotting meat hits like a hammer. “Silence for silence.” A dark red liquid oozes from the fabric. We all know what it is, but none of us say it aloud.
The Madame pales, yet she keeps her composure. Straightening her back, she looks at the rotten sack spilling blood on her expensive table. Though she stands her ground under Hunter’s gaze, it is like a cornered mouse against a lion.
“Ambassador Giselle has had me hunting smugglers since before this attack on the frontier.” He walks behind us, leaning on the balcony’s edge. “For years, holy sites have been desecrated for their herbs.” He takes a deep breath. “Herbs that are now being used here.” He turns around, sitting on the balcony’s edge, crossing his arms. “I’ve been working with these herbs my whole life. So, I hope you were not aware of this sacrilege.”
Sighing, the Madame joins Hunter on the balcony’s edge, “If these herbs were stolen from the north as you claim, I can assure you I had no part in it.” She rests one hand over her heart, playing innocent.
Hunter walks to the table without a word, unraveling the sack and the fumes erupting like ash from a volcano. The skin is pulled tightly against the bone, and the nose is curled back like a pig. Dried-out lips leave a grizzly smile, with eyeless sockets completing the look of terror. Grabbing it by the little hair felt on the head, Hunter’s gaze returns to the Madame.
“Before life fled, this poor wretch gave me names in exchange for a quick death.” Hunter puts the head back on the table, making a wet, squishy noise. “I’ve been following these trails, which led me here.” He gestures to the district.
“I admit the man decorating my table was known to me, but again, I had no idea where he acquired his goods.” She goes to the table, eyeing the head. Cup in hand, she finishes the few drops of wine. “However, I fail to see how his demise would pay for my silence regarding a lord’s murder.”
Standing next to the Madame, Hunter looks out across the district. Stoic as a statue, he rests his hand on his axe, pointing at Becka. “The man who took out your northern garrisons.” He stares with cold eyes, making it clear how serious he is. “Is her father.”
“What?” I look at Becka, who is trying to avoid my gaze. “Becka, is this true?” she refuses to answer, wrapping her arms tightly around my neck. “Becka?”
She trembles, hanging for dear life, calming down when I take her by the hand. I can see why Becka wouldn’t say a word if it's true. Her father sounds like a monster. Looking at the Madame, she agrees with my sentiment.
Hunter turns his attention to the study, his hand still on his axe. “The girl and her mother’s capture have given all the justification Baer needs.” He pulls his axe out, “If word were to reach him about his daughter’s mistreatment or how the Empire was smuggling sacred herbs.” He let the handle slide through his fingers until the pummel kisses his hand. “Many more northerners would rally to him.” He says in a cold tone. “But if the smugglers were all dead, and these rumors were silenced, it would be in the Empire’s best interest.” He turns, towering over her like a mountain. “All the smugglers are dead, right, Madame?” The glint of his axe shines as he raises his arm over her head.”
“Yes, I believe he was their leader.” She points to the head, sighing when Hunter sheaths his weapon. “A pity, I’m going to miss being able to purchase such lovely herbs.” She looks behind her, finding a faint smile on the hardened warrior’s face.
Taking her hand, Hunter gives it a gentle kiss. “Thank you for your hospitality, Madame. I’ll ensure the right people know. Now, will you be so kind as to remove Miss Becka’s piercings, and I’ll see if her mother is willing to part with one of her recipes.”
The Madame’s eyes shimmer like gold with the prospect of future money. “Well, then, I have to prepare some appropriate attire. I can’t have her leaving like that.” She claps her hands, ushering her handmaidens out onto the balcony. “Girls, prepare some clothes while I work on our guest.” They both bow, one leading Becka while the other leads Hunter and me to another room.
Closing the door behind us, I find the only pieces of furniture are a table and a chair. I have a shirt and a pair of boots prepared for me. If not for the light from the tiny windows high on one of the walls, we’d be in complete darkness. I get dressed while Hunter leans on the wall with arms crossed.
“Did you intend to kill him?” Hunter says.
I freeze in place, debating on how I should answer. I barely know the man, but my gut tells me he is ok. “No,” I pull the shirt over my head. “He said he’d force himself on my sister if I didn’t let him have Becka.” I sit, sliding a worn boot around my foot. “I didn’t mean to go that far, but he would stop laughing.” I clench my fist, but it doesn’t help.
Pushing himself off the wall, Hunter joins me at the table. “If he threatened your sister like that, I can see why you wanted to hurt him.” He leans forward, resting his head on his hands. “But by pulling that stone, you may trigger an avalanche.”
I’ll deal with it.” He starts sounding like Giselle, which only adds fuel to the already stewing emotions I’m fighting to control. “Did Giselle actually send you?” I pull the other boot on, tying the laces.
“Is that so hard to believe?” I ignore his words, which he notices right away. Pushing himself to stand, he walks around the table to stand next to me. “Colton, I know you believe Giselle doesn’t care. She can be cold and distant, but you must know behind all the stoicism that you and your sister are her world.”
I tap the front of my boot on the floor, “Well, we must be talking about two different women.” The bad memories flood my mind, and I feel like that ten-year-old boy again. “I can’t remember a time where she said that she loved me or was proud of anything I did.” I sit on the table’s edge, crossing my arms as I look to the floor. “It was never enough.” I look at Hunter, wondering why I’m sharing this with him. “The only time I saw her happy was when I wasn’t there.”
The door flies open, and I have to hold back a laugh. Standing in the doorway, my redheaded companion scowls in a lovely green dress that hugs her frame. A pair of earrings adorn her ears, creating an upside-down triangle with her slave tag, which has a partner in the form of a polished stone held aloft by a rope. “It had to be a dress,” Becka says, stomping into the room. “Here.” She plops two golden piercings in my hand. “Now we’re even.” She pulls me into a kiss. “And thank you.”
She takes me by the hand, making a mad dash for the door. But Hunter’s hand grips my shoulder, foiling her plans. I turn around, finding those cold eyes looking at me, yet they are softer. “When we return, you, me, and Giselle will have a long overdue chat. It’s about time we clear the air on a few things.”
I pull away. “Good luck with.”
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Character List
Colton: Main POV character Becka: POW from the North The Madame: Owner of the Silent Sin Brothel Hunter: Giselle's agent This is a rewrite of chapter seventeen (Formerly called an Accord). I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point it out. I can't improve otherwise. Updated April 5 2024 |
By Rinshikai
Colton
The slap echoes through the room. I'll be feeling it for hours. Allowing the blow to turn my head, I can avoid Giselle's glare. I can deal with the physical pain; it fades. But those eyes, that look of disappointment, it was like getting stabbed in the heart.
"Becka, go to your mother." Becka gives me a worried look, but when I gesture, it's okay. She does as she's told. Disappearing into the side room, she shares with her mother, leaving me alone with Hunter and my now furious foster mom. Hunching over the table, Giselle digs her nails into the wood. "I allowed you to help your friend on the condition you would return immediately."
"Things got…" I protest.
With one finger, she silences my protests. "Not only did you break your promise, but you endangered Becka's life." She glares at me. "Going to the Silent Sin." Rubbing her head, fighting the migraine taking shape, her usually well-kept hair now in tatters. "What were you thinking?"
"Like I said…" I say
"Enough!" she reaches for her cup. "Colton, go to Livius's office. There are things we need to discuss." As she is about to grab the pitcher, Hunter walks past me, his hand over the cup.
"You've had enough." His words are calm yet firm. Though she doesn't like his gull, she relents. Those war-weary eyes land on me. He gestures to the door. "Go. I will join you shortly."
"If you'd just listen," I say.
Giselle throws her hair back, taking a deep breath. "Colton, for once in your life, do as you're told!" She barks, pointing to the door. "Go." She cuts me deep, and we glare at each other, but as always, it's a pointless endeavor. I look back, but the scowl is still there. "You had me going, Hunter." I wanted to believe Hunter's words, hoping she'd actually been worried about me, not her reputation.
I throw the door open, a torrent of frustration racing through me. She demands answers but won't let me talk. Then she questions my every action and silences me when I try to explain. It's never good enough for her. Master one language, learn another. Become skilled with a weapon; learn another. I want to punch the wall but stop for fear of breaking a finger.
I look outside, the training dummies tempting me, but my bruised cheek says otherwise, so I continue my journey. Lost in my thoughts, the voices of the house slaves are little more than hazy words at the back of my mind. Despite everything, Giselle's demand to learn other languages comes in handy. I always know when they're talking about me.
Something is off. Usually, two guards are standing watch over Livius's office. Peering in, Livius has his back to the entryway, his full attention on the map on the back wall. Cane in hand, he draws a path along the major roadways as if planning for war. I walk into the room, the desk littered with parchment and letters. The wax seals of Jarls and Trajan lay scattered amongst the papers.
"Tell me, Colton, why are natural barriers better than man-made ones?" He turns, his cane tapping the ground with a thud. Those grizzled features drilling into me like a commander expecting the troops. It's always a test with Livius, and if you screw up, we'll, I don't want to relive that.
"They're less costly to maintain. Allowing us to control where the enemy can attack." He nods but glares at me. "Sir." Satisfied with my answer, he gestures for me to sit. "What's this about Lord Livius?"
"I'd like to know myself." Aunt Iona's voice fills the room. She sits beside me, checking the bruise on my cheek. "Oh, I'm going to have a few words with Giselle about this." She growls but holds her tongue. Eyeing Livius, she crosses her arms, leaning back with her legs crossed, "It's rare for you to want to see either of us. What's going on?
"War is on the horizon." He sits, his weary bones making each move a challenge. "This Baer has raided our northern territories, and our Jarl allies are refusing to reinforce our lines along the Scar."
"You can't blame them." Hunter enters the room with Giselle, her hair back in its usual bun. "The Trajans and the Jarls have been at each other's throats for generations." He stands behind me while Giselle sits next to me, earning a glare from Iona. The ire she gives off, you could cut it with a knife. Hunter grabs my shoulder, but I shove him away. "Those years of mutual distrust have festered into hate." He looks at me with those icy blue eyes. "If it's left untreated, we'll all bleed for it."
Livius rubs his temples, his eyes narrowing as he reaches for one of the letters. His face contorting as he reads, "Our enemies rally in the south, and the Emperor expects me to handle the north in his absence." Tossing the slip of paper, he rubs his eyes.
Giselle clears her throat. "I understand that, as the Emperor's former teacher, he places great faith in you. But shouldn't this be handled by the Trajans and the tenth?"
Rising from his seat, Livius turns to the map. "Normally, yes, but these recent attacks have taken their toll." Cane in hand, he points to the Titos quarry. "The region is unstable, spreading the legion thin. They have no time to train new soldiers. So they must prioritize defending the quarry and Bloodcreast."
It makes sense. The quarry is known for producing the best ore on the continent, which has given the Empire an advantage for generations. Losing it would prevent them from making new weapons and armor.
Giselle looks at me apologetically, trying to reach for my hand. But I refuse to acknowledge her. She doesn't get off that easily. "Will another legion be sent?" I ask, desperate to avoid Giselle's gaze.
All Livius does is shake his head. Reaching into his sleeve, he pulls out a letter bearing his family's seal. "Livia has sent word. Cato was summoned to lead the imperial vanguard to the holy land. They have no men to spare." He turns his attention to Iona.
"You're planning on sending mercenaries?" Iona says.
"Yes. It would take Titus's people more than six months to rebuild a local militia." He points to the Eastern mountains. "So the Trajans have two options. They can either recruit eastern sellswords or southern mercs."
"I wasn't aware the east had sellswords?" Hunter asks.
Giselle turns with one arm on the back of the couch. "They're the largest military force the East can muster. Nearly ten thousand strong." She turns her attention back to me, but I refuse to meet her gaze. "Livius. Titus has had no love for you since the brothel incident with Livia." Giselle said, turning to Hunter, who nods in agreement. "He'll turn to the East before ever asking you for aid. They have as much to lose if Baer invades."
It makes sense. Melissa used to talk about how her people's strength came from trade. But does Lord Titus have the means to employ the Silverscales? They're the most well-renowned mercenary company on the continent and the pride of the Eastern military. Yet it's rare to see them outside the Eastern plains.
"True," Livius leans on his cane. "I'm sure Titus would stoop to that just to spite me. But the merchant princes won't risk such a valuable force without a heavy price." He turns, leaning on the desk, his eyes searching for something. "For the good of the Empire, we need seasoned men to be able to fight year-round." Finding his prize, he tosses it to Iona. "Thus, mercenaries."
Iona eyes the papers with a look of confusion. Whatever is in these documents vexes her. I try to sneak a peek but can't understand what she's looking at. They look like names; some are scratched out, while others are circled.
"Veteran soldiers don't come cheap," Giselle says, sitting back and crossing her arms and legs. "Just how do you plan to pay them?"
"With land, Giselle." He walks around the desk. "The Trajans will provide ample land for mercenaries to settle. They can act as a permanent line of defense. Don't you agree, Iona? That's what most of them want in the end."
"Most of these companies are inexperienced." she glares daggers. "These greenhorns won't get along and would run at the first sign of trouble." She throws the papers on the desk.
I grab the papers, trying to understand what she's saying. Names litter the sheets like drops of rain. None of them are familiar to me other than the Greyhawks. Names like the Imperial Line and the Heirs of Arios sound impressive, but their accomplishments, not their names, make a company.
Unfazed by her venom, Livius stares her down like a father scolding a child, handing her some parchment. "Enlighten me. Who would you recruit?"
Taking a quill, she writes several names, Hahaku among them. When she returns the quill, I glance at about twenty names. After a moment for the ink to dry, she hands it to Livius, who looks through the names and finds a pattern in her choices.
"Iona, most of these men are well past their prime." He drops the parchment as he leans on the edge of the deck, rubbing the bridge of his nose. With a weary stare, he pushes himself to stand. "Have any of them been in a large-scale battle these past twenty years?"
"Some, others have been acting as private military to the regional lords; they have combat experience, and they know how to work together."
"But, they lack numbers, which companies like the Greyhawks can provide," Livius says.
The air in the room grows heavy, and neither one is willing to give the other an inch. I imagine the situation. The Empire needs veteran mercenaries. Aunt Iona's friends have experience, while the imperial mercs have numbers. But the Greyhawks will never back her after what happened at the Eagle Tavern. They may even turn on her, given the chance.
In the midst of it all, Hunter walks to the map. "It won't matter either way." His words are cold as ice. "Baer has been massing his forces for twenty years. They number in the thousands." His eyes dart around the map like a hawk stalking its prey. He taps a few spots on the map, ignoring everything else. With an icy stare, he turns. "You need more men."
Joining him, Livius stares at the map. "Numbers alone don't win wars." He points at the Scar with his cane. "We control every large access across the Scar. Their moments will be limited."
"There are other routes," Hunter said.
Turning to Hunter, Livius offers a stoic expression. "At worst, we will have small warbands raiding isolated farms and villages. It's an acceptable loss." He taps his cane in front of him. "Should a large enough force cross the Scar. Those stationed at Bloodcreast will outlast them."
I was expecting them to throw barbs, but it feels like the build-up before a bolt of lightning strikes. "You fought the Northmen, Livius. You know how they will fight." Crossing his arms, "But Baer knows how the Empire fights. He'll pick at the scab until it rots, sewing distrust along the border.
Though I have little love for the Empire, is this Baer any better? I look over to Giselle, who rubs her hands together and tries to wipe away invisible filth. She doesn't talk about her life in the North, but this situation bothers her. Muttering under her breath, she closes her eyes, leans back, and focuses on the lines that make up the ceiling. "What about the poison?"
So, the rumors are true? Did the Northmen attack with a new weapon? I try to read the room, but it's a mixed bag. Hunter and Livius are stone-faced, while Aunt Iona hides scared memories behind a glare. But Giselle, those eyes scream hopelessness. Her confidence is a broken mask.
"It's hard to say." Hunter walks around the desk, kneeling to take Giselle by the hand. Her back straightens as they lock eyes. "From what I witnessed, the poison must be in large quantities and is most effective in a closed space." Resting his head against hers, Hunter says, "I have people working a countermeasure as we speak."
They start whispering in a northern dialect I can't fully understand. Through it all, the only words I can make out are family, home, promise, and amends. The glint of a tear starts to creep from Giselle's eyes, but she quickly whips it away once she sees me looking at her.
Hunter's words ignite a spark in her eyes. A smile starts to form but quickly fades. Even in this dire situation, she still forces herself to remain composed. With a deep sigh, she rises, rubbing the bridge of her nose with her index fingers. "I'll regret asking, but how did you convince the Trajans to part with a piece of their province, Livius?"
I'm curious. Livia and Tatanya have been thick as thieves since they were kids. But their fathers are a different breed. Livius is new money, a man who made his own house from nothing, while the Trajans have leeched off their ancestors' legacy for generations.
"Through a marriage pack." Livius turns to Giselle, reaching for a black-edged letter among the clutter. "Titus's younger brother Dorian holds the northernmost part of their territory. He lost his wife to a fever, and with his only son lost during Cato's expedition, he stands to lose his claim without an heir." Rummaging through the pile of paper, he offers Iona a scroll. "In light of this, I will offer him a new wife, offering mercenaries as her dowry."
How does he plan to do that? Livia is with Cato. He has no other daughters, no sisters, or extended family. His eyes dart to Iona, making me nervous. Livius has always found ways of outplaying his opponents despite the odds against him.
"You don't plan on breaking your pack with the Juliana?" Giselle says.
"Of course not," he looks to Giselle, stone-faced, a vain thumping on the side of his head. Such an alliance is necessary for the Empire to endure. "While I have only one daughter," his attention returns to Iona. "But the winds of Arios are never still, so we must change with them."
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Character List
Colton: Main POV Character Giselle: Colton's adopted Mother Iona: Colton's Aunt Hunter: Giselle's agent Livius: Colton's patron and head of the estate This is a rewrite of chapter eighteen, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. Updated April 5 2024 |
By Rinshikai
Author Notes | This is a rewrite of chapter eighteen, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Character List
Colton: Main POV character Enid: Colton's younger sister Blind old woman: Another survivor of the purge This is a rewrite of chapter twenty, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Character List
Colton: Main POV character Giselle: Colton's adopted Mother Iona: Colton's Aunt Blind of Woman: Another survivor of the Purge This is a rewrite of chapter twenty, divided into two parts. I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV Character Iona: Colton's Aunt Luna: Colton's Aunt Enid: Colton's younger sister Giselle: Colton and Enid's foster mother Hahaku: Mercenary captain and close family friend Captain Locke: Older mercenary captain Captain Zeno: Mercenary captain I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt Lord Titus: Head of one of the five great families Tatanya: Lord Titus's daughter Runa: Northern Preistess captured by the Imperials I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV character Hahaku: Mercenary captain and friend of the family Iona: Colton's aunt Locke: Mercenary captain Yanna: Old woman and healer Triana: Old friend of Iona's who knows poisons I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt Hahaku: Mercenary captain and friend of the family Becka: POW from the north Locke: Mercenary captain Eran: Elderly Blacksmith Triana: Friend of Iona's who knows poison I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Colton: Main POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt Becka: A northerner POW Tatanya: Coltons wife Alex: Member of the Habi family, and Melissa's older brother Mangus: Tatanya's Uncle and younger brother of Lord Titus The Commander: Leader of what remains of the Tenth Legion I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Character List
Colton: Main POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt Becka: Northern POW Hahaku: Mercenary Captain and close family friend Tatanya: Colton's wife Mangus: Tatanya's uncle and younger brother of Lord Titus Alex: Member of the Habi family The Commander: Leader of what remains of the Tenth Legion I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Character List
Colton: Main POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt Becka: Northern POW Tristan: Colton's childhood friend and Hahaku's son Hahaku: Mercenary Captain and close family friend Triana: Mercenary Captain and old friend of Iona Locke: Mercenary Captain The Commander: Leader of what remains of the Tenth Legion Tatanya: Colton's wife I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Character List
Colton: Main POV character Iona: Colton's Aunt Becka: Northern POW Tristan: Colton's childhood friend and Hahaku's son Hahaku: Mercenary Captain and close family friend Triana: Mercenary Captain and old friend of Iona Alex: An old acquaintance of Colton and older brother to Melissa I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Character List
Iona: Main POV character Hahaku: Mercenary captain and friends of Iona Locke: Another mercenary captain Triana: Mercenary and friend of Iona Tristan: Son of Hahaku Becka: Young warrior of northerner roots fighting for Iona The Commander: Leader of what remains of the Tenth Legion The Bloody Bear: Leader of the invading force I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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Iona: Main POV character
Hahaku: Mercenary captain and friends of Iona Locke: Another mercenary captain Triana: Mercenary and friend of Iona Tristan: Son of Hahaku Becka: Young warrior of northerner roots fighting for Iona The Commander: Leader of what remains of the Tenth Legion The Bloody Bear: Leader of the invading force Alex: An member of the Habi family from the Eastern Plains I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. |
By Rinshikai
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POV character: Iona I ask reviewers to provide a minimum of one thing they liked and disliked. If you see errors or something that should be fixed, please don't hesitate to point them out. I can't improve otherwise. This will be the final chapter of this book. And I will be either working on the next one, or I'll start a series of short stories to flush out my world. Thank you to everyone who has taken the time to review my work. It's been a great help. Edit: This chapter was originally just the letter portion. Taking feedback, I've added more to the scene. |
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