I smiled the entire time I read this. It flowed easily and worked well read out loud. If I could give a critique it would be that it could have used a bit more of your voice interpersed within the differant cliches.
It sounds as if you like my poem, rachgalla. Did you mean to give the poem only a four? None of my "own voice" is in the poem. It is composed only of cliches. Your rating of four negated the overall rating of six. But welcome to FS.