Excellent

lol. it was amazing as ever. i always enjoy reading ur stuff. it was so original. i am big fan of king and i would hv done anything if i had gotten a letter frm him too. congrats on winning u deserve it

MARYAM

Excellent

its a real good story. nice imagery and the dialogues were really good as well. a lot of times it had happened to me that i hv told stories from my childhood and at the same time asked myself if that actually happened or not and i hv to ask someone (mostly) my brother just to make sure that it did. i really enjoyed it. thanks for sharing

MARYAM

Exceptional

og my God!! that was sooo touching and so sad. i loved it. its so wonderfully written and it reallyy touched my heart. i just dont have words so i am giving it 6stars that it truly deserves.

regards, MARYAM

Good

its a nice poem. it shows your anger and all. didnt really find any mistakes wither except that the first letter of the first line should be capital and MAybe>>should b either in caps or small letters. but on the whole i just didnt feel that this poem was excellent. at points i felt that it lost the rhythem. but thats just my opinion. good try.

regards, MARYAM

Excellent

hmmm interesting. had my interest going right til the end. nicley and simply told. didnt find any errors. just one suggestion. if u break them into paragraphs it would be easier to read,

regards, MARYAM

Excellent

yea hmmm... is what i hv to say about this as wll. its funny and beautifully written. flow was good and it definitaely made me smile. the picture adds the flavour to it. enjoyed :)

MARYAM

Excellent

There's always tomorrow
Oops!! Too late >>>>>>> really like these lines. u have captured something that everybody does so simply yet beautifully. its soo true and probably everyone puts something or the other to tomoroow. i really wnjoyed ur poem and didnt find anything to be changed.

cheers, MARYAM

Excellent

wow is what i have to say about this piece! i loved your honesty and the way you appreciated your husband. i can relate to some of the things u mentioned. like loosing patience and screaming n all. i do the same while my husband just gives me a response that make me either laugh or feel absurd. but its good to hv a husband that can make u forget the reason of the anger rather than reacting to it himself. hope u do live happily everafter!!

MARYAM

Excellent

awww thats cute. perfect for a children poetry. it flowed well. rhyming was good. its easy and clear and thuse good for a child to read and understand. enjoyed reading.

cheers, MARYAM

Excellent

i liked the story, especially the ending. even if u take it out of the context of a black and a white man, still the ending of an arrogant man's walk into existance is something that ppl would like to read. the story is kind of long but coz u had intent tehrefore it didnt get boring. i like ur descriptions of how dan was dressed adn everything. good luck for ur future work.

MARYAM