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Catch and Release by Connie P
Chapter 22 of the book Twist of Fate

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Once again your suspense has you on the edge of your seat. Excellent job. Nice writing, great read, excellent flow. I can't wait for the next chapter. Excellent job. Thank you.


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Poison Arrows by smileycloud

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I don't know if being shattered is the best way to describe being shot by cupid's arrow, but it is certainly different. Well done.


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2010

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A Life Well Lived by Ann Smith

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What a lovely poem honoring your mother! Nice abcb rhyme scheme in your quatrains. I enjoyed the alliteration of frail/fragile. Your ending is poignant and true: "But joy and contentment can be found in a life well lived day by day."

Here are some suggestions for the rhythm and flow of your poem (and the reason I gave a four, as it is rated not for the topic or message, but for the technicalities):

This line does not flow the best:
"with a cane her walk is slow."

and this line is in reverse syntax, which is fine,
but it is somewhat hard to understand with one read:
"her burdens down she needs to lay."

"The eyes have seen joy and sadness"
- I would say Her eyes have seen joy and sadness.
(and I would add the period)

"but wisdom which she'll gladly share."
- wisdom that (flows better to me)

"of many years.
And grieved" -
of many years,
and grieved

"happy and a good mood" - and in a good mood

I'll be happy to revisit and upgrade if possible, if you want.

Lovely presentation as well. I feel the vibrancy and youthfulness of your mother's spirit and life. Good work, I just think that a little fine tuning for smooth flow will make it even better :) - JeJo


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Without Love by Suzie Q

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This is a terrific double reverse tetractys. And quite a sweet little love poem. I've never tried to write one of these yet. This is an excellent write...Katz


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A Life Well Lived by Ann Smith

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Hi Ann,
This is a nicely written Birthday tribute poem to your mom. Wow, ninety years- that's a lot of good, well- lived years. Happy Birthday to her. May she have many more good years!
Anabella


 Comment Written 02-Sep-2010

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