Why Stars Shimmer
sedoka10 total reviews
Comment from Susanjohn
it's romantic Mikey!!! LOVE IT!... a winking moon and passions and the sun acting all jealous!...so good mike! I enjoyed reading...imagery leaving a smile on my face. :-)
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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it's romantic Mikey!!! LOVE IT!... a winking moon and passions and the sun acting all jealous!...so good mike! I enjoyed reading...imagery leaving a smile on my face. :-)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2018
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Awww, you're too sweet. A smile suits you. Thanks so much, mike
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Sedoka writing prompt.
Your verse speaks of the play that takes place under the sun and moon.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
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I think this is a good entry for the Sedoka writing prompt.
Your verse speaks of the play that takes place under the sun and moon.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
Comment from Cheryl Baker
I really enjoyed your presentation of your poem, "Why Stars Shimmer." It is thoroughly delightful to read and I love both pictures. This is a great example of a sedoka poem.
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I really enjoyed your presentation of your poem, "Why Stars Shimmer." It is thoroughly delightful to read and I love both pictures. This is a great example of a sedoka poem.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2018
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-Syllable count is good.
-Good imagery and contrast
between the sun and moon
in the two verses.
-The second verse also
has effective alliteration and personification.
-A good entry; good luck.
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-Good artwork and presentation.
-Notes are appreciated.
-Syllable count is good.
-Good imagery and contrast
between the sun and moon
in the two verses.
-The second verse also
has effective alliteration and personification.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
Comment from Mary Hollingsworth
I remember when I was a little girl, the neighborhood kids would walk on Saturday mites. That was one of highlights of the times. Back then there were far more stars in the sky than seen today. And we used to pick images that seemed to appear in the stars. This puece reminds me of those times. Thanks for sharing
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I remember when I was a little girl, the neighborhood kids would walk on Saturday mites. That was one of highlights of the times. Back then there were far more stars in the sky than seen today. And we used to pick images that seemed to appear in the stars. This puece reminds me of those times. Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
Comment from Artasylum
The poem is beautifully displayed lovers in light, lovers in dark. my favorite part was:
Sword Dance - One of the three chief English dances of Medieval times. It was a ritualistic and ceremonial drama danced by men with swords and elaborate costumes while parading through the streets. It depicted the death of the old year
This was soooooo interesting to me thanks for the teach. yours, diana
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The poem is beautifully displayed lovers in light, lovers in dark. my favorite part was:
Sword Dance - One of the three chief English dances of Medieval times. It was a ritualistic and ceremonial drama danced by men with swords and elaborate costumes while parading through the streets. It depicted the death of the old year
This was soooooo interesting to me thanks for the teach. yours, diana
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
Comment from Air Spirit
Great form, descriptive and delicious imagery.. I am new to FanStory and Iove reading and learning about all of the different forms of poetry. Thank you for sharing your talent.
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Great form, descriptive and delicious imagery.. I am new to FanStory and Iove reading and learning about all of the different forms of poetry. Thank you for sharing your talent.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
Comment from karenina
SSSSSSIZZLING hot sedoka...... I have got to give this one a try, it's been years! I don't think anyone can beat yours though....both katauta are pristine and the images as well...
Karenina
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SSSSSSIZZLING hot sedoka...... I have got to give this one a try, it's been years! I don't think anyone can beat yours though....both katauta are pristine and the images as well...
Karenina
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
Comment from royowen
A beautifully written entry in this Sedoka poetry contest, wonderfuly presented with a blended image, and a silhouetted image it back up your great themed entry, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
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A beautifully written entry in this Sedoka poetry contest, wonderfuly presented with a blended image, and a silhouetted image it back up your great themed entry, well done, good luck, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
Comment from Harry Smith
Thi is an excellent contest entry that has lots and lots of imagery. The pictures really compliments the poem. Good luck with the contest.
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Thi is an excellent contest entry that has lots and lots of imagery. The pictures really compliments the poem. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2018
