I Am a Clock
what defines us anyway?42 total reviews
Comment from Michael Steinert
This is s really well written poem. I love how it brings together the interiors as well as the exterior( in this metaphor a clock) A great read. With s perfect metaphor.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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This is s really well written poem. I love how it brings together the interiors as well as the exterior( in this metaphor a clock) A great read. With s perfect metaphor.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thank you Michael! I am anxious to go sample your work!
Karenina
Comment from Harry Smith
Beautifully written is the poem with lots of imagery and the picture selection is outstanding and went perfectly with the poem. The reader really enjoyed this poem. Outstanding work!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Beautifully written is the poem with lots of imagery and the picture selection is outstanding and went perfectly with the poem. The reader really enjoyed this poem. Outstanding work!
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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I am deeply humbled. Thank you,
Karenina
Comment from jdrhye
I love the way you entertwine analogies with a simple object that is what it is on the inside despite what is viewed from the outside...very clever metaphors. You give great descriptives building up to the credenza of life stages. Bravo!
J
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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I love the way you entertwine analogies with a simple object that is what it is on the inside despite what is viewed from the outside...very clever metaphors. You give great descriptives building up to the credenza of life stages. Bravo!
J
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2018
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Thanks..
Always so much more than what is seen on the outside!
Karenina
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Karenina - This is well written, a good rhyme and rhythm and a good read. Clever poem. I particularly like what your initial words were leading up to -
'You are not your chiseled chin,
nor your alabaster skin,
what you are is what's within,
best
if you take stock.
You too will have change of face,
shifting images to trace,
time will alter ev'ry face-
passing years may shock.
I
remain
a clock....... Good personification of a clock - Well done. Warm regards Dorothy
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Hi Karenina - This is well written, a good rhyme and rhythm and a good read. Clever poem. I particularly like what your initial words were leading up to -
'You are not your chiseled chin,
nor your alabaster skin,
what you are is what's within,
best
if you take stock.
You too will have change of face,
shifting images to trace,
time will alter ev'ry face-
passing years may shock.
I
remain
a clock....... Good personification of a clock - Well done. Warm regards Dorothy
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much. I'm glad the message came across. We are all so much more than our exteriors!
Karenina
Comment from Writeling
This has a thought-provoking narrative, which gradually reaches the reader. Would the insertion of 'still' in 'I cannot display to you,' help keep true the scan and reinforce the pleasing repetition (?)
With best wishes, Writeling
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This has a thought-provoking narrative, which gradually reaches the reader. Would the insertion of 'still' in 'I cannot display to you,' help keep true the scan and reinforce the pleasing repetition (?)
With best wishes, Writeling
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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I'll take a look at it more closely...perhaps? If so I will edit. Either way thank you for the suggestion and honest critique, it's how I learn....Karenina
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"I Am a Clock", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me this is a six, but I only have fives left.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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"I Am a Clock", is an extremely well-written and thought-provoking piece. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. To me this is a six, but I only have fives left.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Ah, I have run out of sixes as well...but the thought is as good as the stars from a poetess of your ilk!
Thanks,
Karenina
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Karenina, my possum, my ilk needs a holiday in the south of France.
Love and happy rabbits,
the Duchess
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Jolly bunnies to you as well!
Karenina
Jolly bunnies are fin as long as they carry eggs!!!!!
Love and Happy Easter,
the Duchess
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Jolly jelly bean eggs!
Are there any other sort????????????????
Comment from Ogden
This is a more interesting exploration of "You can't judge a book by its cover." It is what's inside that tells the story.
Nice work, Karenina!
Don (Ogden)
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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This is a more interesting exploration of "You can't judge a book by its cover." It is what's inside that tells the story.
Nice work, Karenina!
Don (Ogden)
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Yes....similar to be sure!
Thanks,
Karenina
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You're most welcome, Karenina.
Comment from pome lover
very good!
this poem is clever and meaningful.
You zing the reader with short truths
in an original fashion
and make us think.
well done.
Katharine - pome lover
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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very good!
this poem is clever and meaningful.
You zing the reader with short truths
in an original fashion
and make us think.
well done.
Katharine - pome lover
Comment Written 31-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Thanks so much . One should never assume from the outward appearance the worth of any person or thing!
Karenina
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that is quite true
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Glad we agree! :)
Karenina
Comment from Air Spirit
Excellent --. Comical yet profound at the same time. The poem had lots of imagery (hands, numerals, chisled chin, etc) which I love - because to me writing and poetry in particular, are paintings but just with words not canvas.. loved your time-piece!
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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Excellent --. Comical yet profound at the same time. The poem had lots of imagery (hands, numerals, chisled chin, etc) which I love - because to me writing and poetry in particular, are paintings but just with words not canvas.. loved your time-piece!
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2018
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I have often used the same analogy....word painting! Many thanks!
Karenina
Comment from A. Willow Bends
How very creative. Great job with this. I love the whole concept. Wherever you got the idea, it came from a creative part of your writing brain. Keep that type thing going. A bit abstract and many people who love poetry love that. Good luck.
UNIQUE!
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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How very creative. Great job with this. I love the whole concept. Wherever you got the idea, it came from a creative part of your writing brain. Keep that type thing going. A bit abstract and many people who love poetry love that. Good luck.
UNIQUE!
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2018
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I cared, as an RN, for some in deep comas...I see people visit on occasion and speak to one another but never to the person in the bed...who, research shows, are most likely able to hear but not respond. Sort of like the clock without the face....their inner workings tick tock but their face doesn't show it....
That was the inspiration, however abstract....
Thanks so much for your review!
Karenina
