Legend Chasers
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Wampus Cat - Part 2"An old man retells stories of fighting monsters.
21 total reviews
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
Enjoying the story so far. Glad there is another chapter since we are being left at a very exciting part of the story. Looking forward to reading more. Roxanna
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Enjoying the story so far. Glad there is another chapter since we are being left at a very exciting part of the story. Looking forward to reading more. Roxanna
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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Thank you, Roxanna! I'm glad you're enjoying it.
Rhonda
Comment from lyenochka
I like your Greek mythology reference with Zeus and the meteorological interest of Harry. I guess I read this in the wrong order as this was before all the excitement happened. Good interactions between the characters.
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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I like your Greek mythology reference with Zeus and the meteorological interest of Harry. I guess I read this in the wrong order as this was before all the excitement happened. Good interactions between the characters.
Comment Written 07-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 07-Mar-2018
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I'm always reading chapters in the wrong order. haha. That's one reason I try to post about a week apart, but this one was a sort of one chapter split into two sort of thing. it was too long for one post.
Thanks for taking time to read both!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good chapter, Rhonda.
-You continue to show the
interaction of the characters very well.
-We even learn about Buck, aka Lightning.
-Good rapport between Nara and
Henry and Harry, as they tell her
about the area they are riding in.
-Suspense is created when even
Riley is concerned about
the cracking of twigs.
-Excellent ending, as Lightning
lives up to his given name.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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-A good chapter, Rhonda.
-You continue to show the
interaction of the characters very well.
-We even learn about Buck, aka Lightning.
-Good rapport between Nara and
Henry and Harry, as they tell her
about the area they are riding in.
-Suspense is created when even
Riley is concerned about
the cracking of twigs.
-Excellent ending, as Lightning
lives up to his given name.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the wonderful stars and comments, my friend! It means so much to me to get your take on it.
The next chapter is going to take the story to a whole different level, but, I promise, no Zombies or human experimentation.
I've built up the relationships and rapport for the next stage, which will contain a lot more action.
Thank you again!
Rhonda
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and comments, Rhonda. It means a lot that you find the comments helpful. You have done a good job in laying the groundwork for an action chapter!
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Thank you. It took a few people off-guard. They were expecting a typical western, but that's not my style, and it is listed as fantasy. As long as I keep it from being dark like that last one I started, I should be okay!
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You are very welcome, Rhonda. I think you will be more than fine; the story is going very well and I see so much creativity it.
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Thank you so much!
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You are very welcome.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rhonda,
Somehow, I knew that oasis was just an illusion.
Aren't those three burly, wise Greek gods called ranch hands
carrying rifles in the wilds of west Texas.
Old Riley, well he aint worth his weight in salt, "could be anything." I coulda said that!
The smartest of the bunch is old Buck, high-tailing it outta there.
An excellent chapter that builds to the excitement and danger
of the unknown encounter.
Very good dialogue and banter between the characters, too.
Looks like a school of Wampus cats, or is a nest of hornets.
We'll find out in the next episode
Well done
RS
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Hello Rhonda,
Somehow, I knew that oasis was just an illusion.
Aren't those three burly, wise Greek gods called ranch hands
carrying rifles in the wilds of west Texas.
Old Riley, well he aint worth his weight in salt, "could be anything." I coulda said that!
The smartest of the bunch is old Buck, high-tailing it outta there.
An excellent chapter that builds to the excitement and danger
of the unknown encounter.
Very good dialogue and banter between the characters, too.
Looks like a school of Wampus cats, or is a nest of hornets.
We'll find out in the next episode
Well done
RS
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you so much, Robert, for the stars and the comments!
Yes, Riley has dug them into a hole, hasn't he?
To be honest, someone else brought up the gun issue. Normally, yes, any self-respecting cowboy in Texas would be carrying, but... with recent events, I thought I might shouldn't mix guns and schools right now.
I think it's a pride of Wampus cats, but I'm not really sure, as, ah hem, I'm not sure they're real. But that's just me, I'm a doubter. Might get me in trouble some day.
Old Buck has many hidden talents!!
Thank you, again, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment from mbroyles2
An excellent chapter filled with a lot of suspense.
Nara seems to be settling in, but now that Lightning has taken off in a full run, we'll see what kind of horse rider she truly is.
and I must know if that thing is really a wampus cat.
Sounds scary.
Michael
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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An excellent chapter filled with a lot of suspense.
Nara seems to be settling in, but now that Lightning has taken off in a full run, we'll see what kind of horse rider she truly is.
and I must know if that thing is really a wampus cat.
Sounds scary.
Michael
Comment Written 06-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the six stars, and the six star review!
Nara is settling in for the moment, but the next chapter will add a bit more action to the story.
I can only take so much character building before I jump into a bit of a fight.
Thanks so much. Your input is appreciated and welcomed!
Rhonda
Comment from Rasmine
Hello, :)
This is my first time reading one of your chapters, and I enjoyed it immensely.
I like this. It would have been awesome to take a class like this when I was in school:
"It's part of my science class. I devote a whole unit to teaching kids to forecast weather. They love it, especially when a storm they predict materializes."
I found a typo in your author notes:
Harry: Hank's triplet brother. Teachers (teaches) science.
Take care
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hello, :)
This is my first time reading one of your chapters, and I enjoyed it immensely.
I like this. It would have been awesome to take a class like this when I was in school:
"It's part of my science class. I devote a whole unit to teaching kids to forecast weather. They love it, especially when a storm they predict materializes."
I found a typo in your author notes:
Harry: Hank's triplet brother. Teachers (teaches) science.
Take care
Comment Written 05-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the review, and for catching my mistake. That is so helpful.
I do so hope you continue reading.
Thanks again,
Rhonda
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi Rhonda. I enjoyed reading this well written chapter of your story. Clear and interesting. Good descriptions and dialogue throughout. I especially like:
" Henry took off his hat and swatted Nara's horse on its bottom.
"Get her out of here, Lightning."
The old horse threw his head up, his nostrils flaring out in anger. Ten years fell off his countenance, as he became alert and aware. Old flabby muscles tightened and bunched. He jerked his head forward, and sprang to the left off the path. An unnerving cat cry followed in their wake."
Marilyn
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Hi Rhonda. I enjoyed reading this well written chapter of your story. Clear and interesting. Good descriptions and dialogue throughout. I especially like:
" Henry took off his hat and swatted Nara's horse on its bottom.
"Get her out of here, Lightning."
The old horse threw his head up, his nostrils flaring out in anger. Ten years fell off his countenance, as he became alert and aware. Old flabby muscles tightened and bunched. He jerked his head forward, and sprang to the left off the path. An unnerving cat cry followed in their wake."
Marilyn
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the brilliant review, Marilyn. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment from emptypage
Oh.... I'm sure the students will be fine. Right? I mean, this great guy wouldn't save the girl and abandon the kids, would he?
I wouldn't consider scrapy branches oasis-like, either. Nara knows whereof she speaks....
Meanwhile, I'm dreaming now of my own oasis--pristine beach, blue water, and no cats.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Oh.... I'm sure the students will be fine. Right? I mean, this great guy wouldn't save the girl and abandon the kids, would he?
I wouldn't consider scrapy branches oasis-like, either. Nara knows whereof she speaks....
Meanwhile, I'm dreaming now of my own oasis--pristine beach, blue water, and no cats.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the six star review, my friend! Yes, the students are being cared for by all the others. The old horse is all Nara gets, lol.
Yes, an oasis free of scratchy branches and Wampus cats is a great idea
Have a great week,
Rhonda
Comment from MelB
Another crackle to the left had the horses snorting. Two more on the right... the horses stamped. - Did you mean stomped?
Hi Rhonda, this is an exciting and suspenseful chapter! Hopefully, Nora and everyone else will get back safely.
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Another crackle to the left had the horses snorting. Two more on the right... the horses stamped. - Did you mean stomped?
Hi Rhonda, this is an exciting and suspenseful chapter! Hopefully, Nora and everyone else will get back safely.
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Thank you for the six star rating, Melissa! I appreciate the comments and time involvoed.
Nora's fine, I assure you... or maybe not so much!
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Mustang Patty
Oh, my. I certainly hope Nara knows how to hold on. Once a horse gets going like that, low-hanging branches can become a real danger. Great building of the suspense and tension. I can't wait for the next part,
~patty~
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Oh, my. I certainly hope Nara knows how to hold on. Once a horse gets going like that, low-hanging branches can become a real danger. Great building of the suspense and tension. I can't wait for the next part,
~patty~
Comment Written 04-Mar-2018
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2018
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Nara's had experience riding, but not for what's ahead!
Thanks so much for reading and commenting, my friend!
Take care,
Rhonda
