Regrets
Sometimes you regret the way you treated those you love.27 total reviews
Comment from F. Wehr3
Very nice work on this poem. Syllable count looks good. I missed the voting for this one , but I would have given this strong consideration.
Take care,
Russell
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Very nice work on this poem. Syllable count looks good. I missed the voting for this one , but I would have given this strong consideration.
Take care,
Russell
Comment Written 17-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Thank you Russell.
Comment from Mike J
Really good one-line poem, you say so much in just one line and ten syllables. A message many can relate too. Best wishes in the competition, good entry.
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Really good one-line poem, you say so much in just one line and ten syllables. A message many can relate too. Best wishes in the competition, good entry.
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 17-Feb-2018
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Thank you, Mike.
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Thank you, Mike.
Comment from Harry Smith
So much said in so few words. This poem speaks loud and says so much. I can relate to this and I am sure a lots of people will relate to this poem. Well I couldn't resist this morning I had to come to see your writing and I can see you have accomplish a lots in such a short period of time. This is something to be expected coming from Birmingham (Smile).
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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So much said in so few words. This poem speaks loud and says so much. I can relate to this and I am sure a lots of people will relate to this poem. Well I couldn't resist this morning I had to come to see your writing and I can see you have accomplish a lots in such a short period of time. This is something to be expected coming from Birmingham (Smile).
Comment Written 16-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
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Thank you for checking me out , Harry. Birmingham is a great place, isn't it.
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Thanks. Yes Birmingham is a great place.
Comment from Lucian Carter
Ouch.
A truly horrible feeling. It's easy to lose fond memories and dwell only on the problems ones.
This fits the contest perfectly and packs so much into ten syllables. Really great stuff.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Ouch.
A truly horrible feeling. It's easy to lose fond memories and dwell only on the problems ones.
This fits the contest perfectly and packs so much into ten syllables. Really great stuff.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for those six stars. I am so pleased that you were able to identify with something here.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This speaks regrets of not listening to mom ever an impossible dream now for she has passed away; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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This speaks regrets of not listening to mom ever an impossible dream now for she has passed away; well said, well done. Thank you for sharing this with us. Good luck with the contest. KEEP WRITING, TIP CHANGING. DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Thank you for those words of encouragement. I really appreciate your words.
Comment from Kathleen Young
Despite the brevity necessitated by this writing prompt, the author succeeded in evoking a lifetime of tug-o-war relationship and the sadness that comes from realizing a loved one's value too late to acknowledge it. The focus is on "Mom" even to the exclusion of the "I" that could have stood at the beginning in juxtaposition. The author omits the "I" (leaving it the understood subject of the first clause) in favor of using "and" to connect the clauses. This choice works for me because it reflects the self-abnegation that regret can bring, whether lasting or fleeting. The "and" connects the past and present, alluding to the wish the first response could be undone while making clear it cannot be. This poem, therefore, accomplishes the goal of the prompt.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Despite the brevity necessitated by this writing prompt, the author succeeded in evoking a lifetime of tug-o-war relationship and the sadness that comes from realizing a loved one's value too late to acknowledge it. The focus is on "Mom" even to the exclusion of the "I" that could have stood at the beginning in juxtaposition. The author omits the "I" (leaving it the understood subject of the first clause) in favor of using "and" to connect the clauses. This choice works for me because it reflects the self-abnegation that regret can bring, whether lasting or fleeting. The "and" connects the past and present, alluding to the wish the first response could be undone while making clear it cannot be. This poem, therefore, accomplishes the goal of the prompt.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Thank you so much for this intelligent, thoughtful review. You could be a college professor offering advise. I really appreciate that. You obviously spent so much time on this. I appreciate it and will use your comments in future writings.
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You're welcome and most kind.
Comment from ameen786
Oh, this is superb! Should resonate with many readers, so true and alas, so sad. Even in its brevity, the one-line verse speaks volumes; thanks for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Oh, this is superb! Should resonate with many readers, so true and alas, so sad. Even in its brevity, the one-line verse speaks volumes; thanks for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Such an intelligent, sweet review. Thank you.
Comment from Jeffrey L. Michaux
There is a lot of sadness is so few words. We sometimes don't miss or appreciate the things that we have until they're gone. The saying here today and gone tomorrow is a true saying. Thanks for sharing this short and to the point work. Well done.
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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There is a lot of sadness is so few words. We sometimes don't miss or appreciate the things that we have until they're gone. The saying here today and gone tomorrow is a true saying. Thanks for sharing this short and to the point work. Well done.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem, Jeffrey.
Comment from Pantygynt
I like the assonance Mom/gone in this monostitch. As far as I can see this meets all the requirements. Something you regret that that can't be undone. I am presuming that sins of omission like this count as much as sins of comission. It gave me a moment or two's worry though. Can you undo something you never did?
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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I like the assonance Mom/gone in this monostitch. As far as I can see this meets all the requirements. Something you regret that that can't be undone. I am presuming that sins of omission like this count as much as sins of comission. It gave me a moment or two's worry though. Can you undo something you never did?
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Good point. The omission surely involved action of some sort. Even if it is just turning a blind eye
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Good point. The omission surely involved action of some sort. Even if it is just turning a blind eye
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think that this is a good entry for the Impossible Dream Monostich writing prompt.
Well done, well said.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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I think that this is a good entry for the Impossible Dream Monostich writing prompt.
Well done, well said.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-Feb-2018
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2018
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Thanks, Sharon
