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Animal poetry and short stories

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Comment from judiverse
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Sadly, nothing keeps the roaches away. We lived in an apartment in Texas and regularly had to empty cabinets, so exterminators could come in and spray. You suggest in your poem that the roaches can be anywhere and everywhere. So true. A funny image of the roaches riding elevators. Maybe a few will get squashed. Last stanza, I'd just go with islands instead of islants. Interesting rhyme. judi

 Comment Written 16-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 16-Feb-2018
    I?m known for spelling liberties. I think it?s funnier misspelled to rhyme than being correct. I stopped putting it in notes a long time ago.
reply by judiverse on 16-Feb-2018
    It's your privilege. Any more, teachers talk about conventional spelling, not correct spelling. You're just being unconventional! judi
Comment from nomi338
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Ugh, apples have always been my favorite fruit, but seeing bugs all over it makes me wanna puke. Ooh, get away, get away! I would never eat another apple ever again if this were to happen to me.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    That?s what Adam said.
reply by nomi338 on 14-Feb-2018
    Ha, ha. That's funny. You are a funny guy.
Comment from brenda faye curtis
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This is a bright and catchy poem to go with a really gross photo of a huge roach-not my favorite critter, obviously. Only thing I'm a little confused about is the line "Canary Islants". Did you mean Islands? At any rate, it's a good one.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    Thanks, BFC
reply by brenda faye curtis on 24-Feb-2018
    You're welcome.
reply by the author on 24-Feb-2018
    Funny spelling to mstch the rhyme
reply by brenda faye curtis on 27-Feb-2018
    Ok, now I get it. :)
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Bravo! Good job. I love the Canary Islants... so preddy by the sea.

All those monster bugs
drink from barroom mugs,
and ride the elevators.

That's my favorite verse.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    Thanks, Phyllis. I?ve had to explain islants and buenos noches a few times.
Comment from Ulla
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Hahahaha, I love it, Bill. True, they can be enormous here in Spain. They are big fat black things and can cover a whole bathroom floor. They favour heat an humidity. Now, I've got three cats, so cockroaches have never been a problem. I loved your well written poem.
One wee language issue: there ain't no buenos noches. = there ain't no buenas noches. Noche is female hence it's buenas noches.
All the best.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    Gracias!
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Bill;
It is too true that in the Grand Canaries, the cockroaches are HUGE!! I was there in the spring of 1978, and we were staying at a five-star hotel, and the place was crawling with them. Management told us there wasn't anything they could do about them.

Needless to say, I was horrified,

~patty~

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    I?m sure they were the best cockroaches available.
Comment from Dean Kuch
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I can understand how that could be possible, Bill.
We have sewer roaches here in the Queen City. They're large enough and fly fast enough to saddle up and ride into town.
Good stuff. It didn't bug me a bit.
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~Dean

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    I saw a couple roaches at Lejeune that looked like baby moccasins.
Comment from Dawn Munro
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LOL - okay, I am presuming that you meant to spell "islands" the way you did... (I think I am beginning to understand your sense of humour - just 'beginning', mind you! LOL) Yep, if those cockroaches are anything like the ones in Jamaica (and judging from that picture, they are)they are huge, and fly. ("mahogany birds") Yech!!!

Another fun poem to add to your collection, Bill.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    Thanks, Dawn. Dolly wanted this one.
reply by Dawn Munro on 15-Feb-2018
    LOL
Comment from Quoiky
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Eeeeewwwww!

What an excellent poem!

It sorta reminded me of a poem that started.... I once knew a guy from Nantuckett...

Those icky creatures will indeed outlive us all.

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    You refer to a limerick. I should do a cockroach limerick. Thanks, Quoiky.
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
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Well that is very disgusting. ={ I hate the little or big buggers. We get big ones here in FL too. But thank you Lord none in a long time have found there way into my home. Not where I can see them at least. Now ants are another story. Does Dolly hate roaches too? Very well done, if a poem about roaches can be well done. =}

 Comment Written 14-Feb-2018


reply by the author on 14-Feb-2018
    Thanks, Roxanna