It's There We Fare To Die
Just a poem39 total reviews
Comment from Boogienights
A very interesting and dark poem. I ponder on its meaning, while delighting in its alliteration ans somber tone. Thanks for sharing. :) I think you are a fine writer.
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A very interesting and dark poem. I ponder on its meaning, while delighting in its alliteration ans somber tone. Thanks for sharing. :) I think you are a fine writer.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2023
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Hmmm. Well, definitely you were not in a happy frame of mind as you wrote this memorable and captivating poem. But, often, writers --poets, in particular-- take on more sorrow than most. They just express it more eloquently and with visual allusions.
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Hmmm. Well, definitely you were not in a happy frame of mind as you wrote this memorable and captivating poem. But, often, writers --poets, in particular-- take on more sorrow than most. They just express it more eloquently and with visual allusions.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2023
Comment from JSD
Much prefer the shorter ones. I can dwell for longer on them. This is full of taught language, tough alliteration and assonance and excellent, vivid imagery. Well done.
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Much prefer the shorter ones. I can dwell for longer on them. This is full of taught language, tough alliteration and assonance and excellent, vivid imagery. Well done.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2023
Comment from Heather Knight
I disagree. This isn't just a poem. It's spectacular like everything you write.
I like the word order, the rhythm, the alliterations, the repetitions...
Maybe my favourite bit is 'in the never-ending wend of wind'.
Thanks for sharing.
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I disagree. This isn't just a poem. It's spectacular like everything you write.
I like the word order, the rhythm, the alliterations, the repetitions...
Maybe my favourite bit is 'in the never-ending wend of wind'.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
Comment from Aussie
What a terrible place to pick, to die; red dead barn and dark dead shed. To die in this world is to live in the next. Our real home. Mind you, the way the earth is dying rapidly, it could be a dead barn or a dark shed; all that's left standing! K xx
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What a terrible place to pick, to die; red dead barn and dark dead shed. To die in this world is to live in the next. Our real home. Mind you, the way the earth is dying rapidly, it could be a dead barn or a dark shed; all that's left standing! K xx
Comment Written 23-Jul-2023
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Easy,
This is the second poem about death... is it on your mind? I guess it's in everybody's mind. I like the free verse with the repetition to take it home. I like the theme of life and death. Well done!
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Hello, Easy,
This is the second poem about death... is it on your mind? I guess it's in everybody's mind. I like the free verse with the repetition to take it home. I like the theme of life and death. Well done!
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tom,
An interesting play with and on words creating the mood
of a lost world, perhaps Limbo, in between.
Too bad the wind mill is broken, with the never-ending wend of wind
it could have been useful.
Just an intriguing poem.
Best wishes.
Robert
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Hello Tom,
An interesting play with and on words creating the mood
of a lost world, perhaps Limbo, in between.
Too bad the wind mill is broken, with the never-ending wend of wind
it could have been useful.
Just an intriguing poem.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, It's There We Fare to Die, presented with three tercets and some boffo word work, brings another dark mood across the page. I hope you have cleared your pipes.
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This poem, It's There We Fare to Die, presented with three tercets and some boffo word work, brings another dark mood across the page. I hope you have cleared your pipes.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
Comment from John Ciarmello
I was slightly lost on this one, but it seemed dark and, to me, a limbo of where we live and where we die. I loved all the wording and the phonics. Well done and beautiful. Best, JohnC
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I was slightly lost on this one, but it seemed dark and, to me, a limbo of where we live and where we die. I loved all the wording and the phonics. Well done and beautiful. Best, JohnC
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
Comment from MissMerri
What I really love about this poem are the strong images: dead red barn, dark dead shed, broken windmill, never-ending wend of wind, salt spray, frayed baited nets, the rough sea, etc, all words creating such delightful images in my mind, even though, while reading this, I couldn't help but think you chose each word for how it collided with the words around it, more than because of what the word actually said. The sounds are fun and unique and tickle the ear and I enjoyed that almost as much as the vivid pictures.
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What I really love about this poem are the strong images: dead red barn, dark dead shed, broken windmill, never-ending wend of wind, salt spray, frayed baited nets, the rough sea, etc, all words creating such delightful images in my mind, even though, while reading this, I couldn't help but think you chose each word for how it collided with the words around it, more than because of what the word actually said. The sounds are fun and unique and tickle the ear and I enjoyed that almost as much as the vivid pictures.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2023
